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Welcome to Spot Writers! The prompt for August is to use the phrase “Out of Season.”  This week’s contribution comes from Kathy L. Price, author of Down the nanoTubes.

 

Ernie

by Kathy L. Price

 

CRACK! The sharp retort and blinding flash of a lightening strike caused Georgia to jump. Whatever it hit, it was close. She looked out the window and saw the yellow-white line from the sky continuing to hammer the huge oak on the far side of the parking lot. A skirt of blue plasma began to swirl around the base of the tree and spread out across the ground. Finally, it stopped, replaced by a few seconds of eerie stillness before bucket-sized drops of rain began pelting the ground. Georgia watched in horror as half the big tree began a slow motion descent toward the boats tied up at the dock along the bank.

“Damn it,” she cried as she raced for the door.

“Wait. You can’t go out in that.” Alan grabbed her arm and spun her around as she pulled her foul weather jacket from the hook.

She jerked her arm away, still angry at him from their recent argument. “Ernie’s still on board,” she snapped. “The tree hit his boat. What if he’s hurt?”

Alan groaned and shook his head but reached for his jacket and followed her out the door. They ran through the heavy rain, barely able to see, and paused for a moment in the gazebo by the pool as another flash lit the sky. The air crackled around them and Georgia felt her hair stand on end. She took a deep breath and glanced at Alan.

“Ready?”

They raced onto the dock and made a left, paralleling the shore. After passing a dozen or so slips, they could see the tree had, indeed, made a direct hit onto Ernie’s boat and a huge branch had completely crushed the cabin of the boat next door. Georgia’s boat. Georgia’s home. Everything she had, except for her car, of course, was in that boat. Her heart seized as the enormity of this latest blow stuck home but Ernie, her eighty-six year old neighbor, was more important. She’d deal with her own problems later.

“Ernie, Ernie,” she yelled, trying to be heard above the storm. The huge trunk of the tree had hit the boat just off center and the extra weight had almost submerged the port side. Water was lapping at the gunwales, the wind-driven waves washing into the boat. Georgia and Alan scrambled on board, threading their way through the broken branches into the cockpit. One side of the main hatch had been completely crushed. Georgia yanked the broken door out of the way and there was barely enough room for her to squeeze through. She found Ernie sitting at the table in the main salon, a huge grin on his face.

“Hello, darlin’” he said when he looked up at her. “You’ll never guess what’s happened.”

“I know, Ernie, a tree fell on your boat. You gotta get out of here. Are you hurt?”

“No, no,” he replied in a daze, oblivious to what was happening around him. “I just won the lottery,” and he held up the ticket. “See? Sixty million dollars.”

“Oh, for God’s sake, Ernie. We’ve gotta get off the boat.”

“Let me get my hat,” he calmly replied. “Will you drive me to the lottery office to collect the money? I’ll give you half. You won’t have to worry about anything any more.”

“Sure, but let’s get off the boat first.” Georgia grabbed his jacket off the hook and helped him get it on. By now, the dock lines were groaning under the extra weight of the tree and water had started to pour into the cabin.

Alan stuck his head into the hatch and yelled, “Hurry it up. We gotta get off NOW.”

Ernie carefully tucked the lottery ticket into his jacket pocket. He made sure it was velcroed shut  then started up the companionway stairs. There was another loud crack as the forward cleat pulled out of the deck. The boat rocked sharply to port but Ernie was an old salt and kept his footing. It wasn’t until a gust of wind blew rain in his face that he seemed to wake up from his daze. “Holy crap,” he cried, as Alan reached in to help pull him through the main hatch.

Georgia squeezed out into the storm behind Ernie and the three of them managed to scramble along the slick, rain-drenched dock. Dodging airborne debris, they made the gazebo just as another bolt of lightening stuck the mast of the big Irwin tied up next to the office.

Florida, it seemed, was living up to its reputation as the lightening capital of the world. Being inland, Glen Cove Springs marina was relatively safe from hurricanes, even during the late summer/early fall, but powerful thunderstorms like this one were never out-of-season. They could quite easily wreak as much havoc as the big named storms.

Back in the office, Georgia helped Ernie take off his wet coat and checked to make sure he really wasn’t hurt. She leaned in close and whispered in his ear. “Keep quiet about the ticket. Don’t say anything to anyone. We can’t go out in this storm anyway so it’ll have to wait until tomorrow.”

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 RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

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Kathy L. Price: http://www.kathylprice.com

Last summer, I read and reviewed Poison Study, the first book in this trilogy. When I attended the Pennwriters Conference this spring, I was delighted to see that Maria V. Snyder, the author, was a presenter. I purchased the third book in the trilogy (the second was not for sale at the conference), had it autographed (of course), and added both Magic Study and Fire Study to my to-be-read list.

Magic Study continues the adventures of Yelena. She has been freed (physically) from all the nasty stuff that happened to her in book 1 (no spoilers here), though because of her circumstances, she must leave Ixia, where she spent her formative years. She returns to the south, to Sitia, the land of her birth, where she is introduced to her mother, father, and brother. She is also brought to the Keep, where she is encouraged to develop her magic abilities (there are rumors that she has more powerful magic than even the four masters).

But Yelena is already an adult. Most students enter the Keep, a magic school, at a younger age and are more slowly acclimated to the ways of Sitia. Once again, Yelena doesn’t fit in. In Sitia, decisions are discussed and mulled over by councils and groups. For Yelena, decisions are jumped into rashly with the hopes that she’s find or fight her way out.

I enjoyed the return of some of the characters from the first book—Valek, of course, Irys, Janco, and Ari. I also enjoyed Yelena’s relationship with her horse, Kiki. Her newfound powers allow her to communicate with her horse, which turns out to be an important ally. Yelena’s parents are intelligent and inventive, helping her with various inventions and discoveries, and her brother is annoying and damaged.

My one wish for this book is that the pace would slow down at certain points to let us reflect with Yelena on all that has happened. Everyone keeps commenting through the story on how Yelena’s life twists like knots or a snake, always jumping from one thing to the next. Sometimes, one crisis followed the next without a break. While it made for a fast read, I would have enjoyed a few more places for Yelena to slow down—either with her brother, with Valek, with Irys, or even with Cahil, a newly introduced friend/adversary.

Overall, I really enjoyed this book and look forward to reading Fire Study.

Today’s post comes from Cathy MacKenzie. The theme for this month is “Out of Season.”

When Cathy can’t come up with a story, she writes a poem; this is her offering. She has two new short story compilations coming out soon, PAPER PATCHES and BROKEN CORNSTALKS. Watch her blog for this news!

Out of Season

Thoughts of you and me
Filter through
During the day,
At night in dreams

Remembering the past
I live the present
But foresee a future
No one can predict

I see how I want us to be
But overshadowing all
I know how we will be,
Mirrors dulled and cracked

Seasons come and gone,
We’ve been through them all,
Lived each one over and over
Sometimes too often

Many tears flowed
Other times not enough,
Few words, many words
Between the silence

Lies captured truth,
Normalcy not the norm,
Fingers did not touch,
Eyes did not see

Walking in stride
We left the other behind,
Hands waving goodbye
Instead of hello

Doors shut instead of opening,
Windows tightly closed,
Shades pulled to block the sun,
Keys lost.

Too many locked doors,
A cellar of cold,
An attic of hot,
Unbearable heat and cold

Our season is now,
Yet now is too late,
Apologies might help
But tongues are tied

We’re out of season
For spring,
Too hot for winter,
Too cold for summer

Dreams morph to nightmares
Dawning at day,
Reality haunts
Seasons of our lives.

 

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The Spot Writers—our members:

 

RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller: http://www.valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Kathy Price: www.kathylprice.com

 

All the great things I heard about this book were true. It earns a top rating from me.

The Scorpio Races takes place on an isolated, stormy island. Every November, the Scorpio races are held. These are deadly races in which the capaill uisce, water horses based on Irish/Scottish mythology, race for both speed and blood, sometimes killing their riders (or the opponents) and sometimes earning them money.

What I liked about this book is that it uses the horse races as a backdrop, but it’s really the story of Puck (Kate) and Sean, two outsiders whose lives are woven together throughout the narrative. It’s told in alternating points of view—Sean’s and Puck’s, in first person—which usually annoys me, but it worked well in this case. My only gripe was by the end, their voices sounded very similar to each other, and I had to keep checking whose POV I was in—but as they grew closer by the end of the novel, this was probably intentional on the part of the author.

Puck and Sean are both strong, imperfect characters. In some ways, they reminded me of heroes from Ayn Rand novels in a more down-to-earth, likeable kind of way. Neither cared what society thought of them and only followed society’s rules to the extent that it benefitted them. And yet, they were both sympathetic characters, taking action to help others when the situation demanded.

I liked the world building. Though the author purposefully doesn’t name a date, women’s suffrage is mentioned, and the types of cars available, the mention of radio, but no mention of TV or other technology, suggests that it takes place well within the first half of the 1900s. The world building continued with things like November Cakes (there’s even a recipe in the back) and other traditions relating to the water horses. Speaking of water horses, I loved how the author made them at once magnificent and terrifying. I really felt like I was there.

The book is over 400 pages, and although it wasn’t a super-fast read for me, I found myself unable to put it down for the last 150 pages (the lawn didn’t get mowed that day!). The book holds enough interest that I think adults and young adults would enjoy it.

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This month the prompt is to use the theme “out of season.”

Today’s contribution comes from Val Muller, author of the newly-released The Scarred Letter, a young adult reboot of Hawthorne’s The Scarlet Letter.

Beast

Bella sat in a circle with the others. The crackling campfire singed the summer air, making Bella flustered and anxious.

“It’s only darkness,” she mouthed.

But Roy Davidson already wore a sinister smile. He had a scary story, alright. He had a scary story last year, too. Too bad it would be two more years until he went away to college. Hopefully by then he’d have better things to do than scare kids.

“They’re just stories,” Bella whispered. She glanced at the line of trees. Maggie’s parents’ cabin was barely visible through the summer foliage. Bella strained her ears for sounds of her parents and the other adults, but the chirping crickets and frogs and other summer-things of the forest were too loud.

How could six grown adults allow their children to camp out alone in the woods? Sure, Roy was sixteen, but the rest of them were younger. Maggie was only ten. Then again, Maggie lived here. She knew the woods. Maybe that made the stories less scary.

Bella, you’re thirteen. When will you grow up? They’re only stories.

Oh, but Roy was a good storyteller.

Without mercy, Roy stirred the fire and licked his lips, ready to spin his tale.

“This legend originated right here in these parts in the time of the Native Americans. There is a darkness that lurks all around us. It is so terrifying that there is no name for it. It knows its power, and it grows as it frightens us. It hides in shadows and lurks in the corners of our minds. It feeds on our fear, but usually we are too busy and brave to think about it. But in the wintertime, the Beast has the best chance of gaining power.

“In the chill of winter, we are forced inside by early darkness. Twilight lingers in the winter, and shifting shadows and bare tree branches claw at our imaginations. The cold of winter forces us indoors, into quiet reflection. And sometimes there is nothing scarier than the depths of our minds. And the snow. Oh, how the snow muffles sound in the cold darkness…”

Roy glared at Bella across the fire. He jammed a stick again, stirring the ashes and dimming the light, diminishing the heat. In a grim voice, he continued his tale about a bitter, cold winter in this very forest when an entire tribe was forced to all but hibernate for one full moon cycle. The cold dark bred fear, allowing the unnamed terror to manifest in the flesh. The next spring, scouts from a nearby tribe found nothing but bodies, slain by each others’ hands, just starting to thaw.

“Beware,” he had said. “When it gets too dark or too cold, you must control your thoughts. The Beast awaits, and your fear may be an invitation to him that ends up hurting us all…”

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Later, in the tent, Bella clasped her sleeping bag, pulling it up to her chin. Despite the mild summer night, she couldn’t keep warm. The grownups had said any of the kids could return to the cabin if they were scared or uncomfortable. But even Maggie was okay with camping. How could Bella admit to the others that she couldn’t handle one night in the woods? Besides, she would be too scared to walk the path to the cabin in the darkness.

So she pulled her sleeping bag tighter and strained her ears to hear above the snores coming from her tent and the tent next to her. Outside there were crickets, but there was something behind the crickets. It was silence. Silence in the darkness. She sunk lower into her sleeping bag and couldn’t help feeling a chill with the bite of winter in the darkening summer evening.

It was going to be a long night.

The Spot Writers- our members.

RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

 Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

 Catherine A. MacKenzie: http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

 Kathy Price: http://www.kathylprice.com

 

I picked up this book at a used book store and couldn’t resist. It’s a middle-grade mystery involving Shakespeare and 500-year-old British history. Some of it is factual. Other details were fabricated based on historical reality in order to construct the mystery.

The book follows a sixth grader named hero. Like her sister Beatrice, Hero has been named after a character in Shakespeare’s Much Ado About Nothing. She is picked on for her name, but she also lacks the self-confidence to do anything about it, and the teasing becomes worse.

Her family has just moved into a home that is shrouded in mystery: there is supposedly a million-dollar diamond hidden somewhere inside (the diamond is the non-factual part of the history). In the meantime, her father is a Shakespeare scholar and loves discussing what Shakespeare’s real identity may be. The novel weaves in some details from the debate/theory that Edward de Vere, Earl of Oxford, could be the real author of Shakespeare’s plays. The fictional bit involving the necklace plays into that theory.

As an English teacher, I loved the bits of history and British literature that were woven into the book. I’m not sure as a middle-grade reader myself that I would have had the insight to appreciate all the historical details. That said, the story weaves in enough about the social struggles of a sixth grader, budding friendships, and even a bit of a romantic interest, that I think it would hold the interest of any reader, even through the historical bits.

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This month the prompt is to use the theme “out of season.”

Today’s contribution comes from RC Bonitz, author of A BLANKET FOR HER HEART.  

 To Everything There’s a Season

Candlelight. Wine for two. Crackers and havarti cheese. A cheery fire popping behind the screen. The scene was set; they’d planned it out that morning. Camille’s black dress, slinky and flowing, cut low to show the pearls he’d bought for her last birthday. Nothing underneath it, just to please him. Jeff had dressed because he knew what she liked, dark suit and red tie, neatly pressed.

He took a sip of wine and beamed. “You look beautiful tonight. You’re glowing.”

She threw back her dark hair, her eyes shining, and grinned, teasing. “Don’t I always?”

“Especially tonight.”

She adopted her most coquettish look. “You’re quite handsome too. And I know what you’re thinking.”

“Of course, we planned this rendezvous. Romance is in season.”

She laughed and offered him a bite of cheese. “Isn’t it always?”

“When I look at you it is.”

She sipped her wine, nibbled seductively at a cracker, then grinned at him again. “I think I should remove your tie now.”

“Sounds like a great idea. Be my guest.”

She leaned across the table and reached for his tie. “Achoo.”

“What’s that?”

“Just a tickle in my nose. Achoo.”

He frowned. “That’s two tickles.”

“I know. Are your eyes watering?”

“Just a little. Achoo.”

She sighed, and sniffled back another sneeze. “It can’t be. Not tonight, darn it, not yet.”

“Achoo. I think it ith.”

“Nothing kills romance like a runny nothe.”

He groaned. “We’re too late. Romance is out seathon. Allergies are in.”

 

The Spot Writers- our members.

RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

 Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

 Catherine A. MacKenzie: http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

 Kathy Price: http://www.kathylprice.com

 

Last month, I attended the Shenandoah University Children’s Literature Conference, and I got to hear Blue Balliett speak about writing middle-grade mysteries. Of course, I had to purchase two of her books and get them autographed.

This stand-alone book is the first I chose to read. The Danger Box follows the adventures of a boy named Zoomy. He is legally blind and was left as a baby on the doorstep of his grandparents, who have raised him for the past twelve years. His real father is an alcoholic and didn’t even realize he had a son. Zoomy has a definite personality, and he understands the world best by making lists—for everything.

When his father visits one night in a drunken episode, Zoomy is frightened and forced out of his comfort zone. Lots of things happen as a result of that visit. His dad, who had been driving a stolen truck, leaves the family a box and a blanket with a notebook wrapped inside.

Spoilers follow.

 

To make a long short, the notebook belonged to Charles Darwin (it’s the notebook that went missing in the 1980s). Zoomy is allowed to look at the notebook, and as he discovers who wrote it, he is thrilled to find that Darwin was often unsure of himself, sick, nervous, and a bad speller! It made Zoomy feel that he wasn’t so strange after all.

Through the course of the adventure of figuring out who the notebook belongs to, Zoomy meets a girl, Lorrel, and the two of them publish a newsletter for the town with lesser-known facts about Darwin, and the town is invited to guess who they are writing about.

There are many more twists and turns that happen in this book, but I won’t spoil those. I will explain the title, though: Zoomy has a box called the danger box, where he puts things that he finds dangerous, like used firecrackers. It comes into play during the course of the novel.

I enjoyed how intricately many different mysteries were woven into one. I also enjoyed Zoomy’s character growth. Although this is a middle-grade novel, it had more depth than even some young adult novels I’ve read. I really liked Zoomy’s epiphany at the end: for most of the novel, he wants to stick to routines and do only what is predictable, but by the end, he realizes that the unexpected is both good and bad but is essential for adding depth to life.

I recommend this book, and I look forward to reading this author’s other works.

Welcome to Spot Writers! The prompt for this month is to use at least three of the following words: tremble, start, tiptoe, yank, dresser. This week’s contribution is from Kathy L. Price, author of Down the nanoTubes (www.kathylprice.com), soon to be released.

Tommy

by Kathy L. Price

She had thought everything was under control so she had slipped down to the basement for a minute to start the next round of laundry. It was too quiet, she thought, as she ascended the stairs. Her sixth sense had prickled and she was suddenly on edge. With an infant, a toddler and a six-year-old in the house, there should have been more noise. Brad had been watching a video in the living room. Tommy had been in his room and while it was supposed to be “quiet time” he had been making “zoom, zoom, brrrrrrrrring” noises as he ran his trucks and cars around on the floor.  She’d fed the baby and had put him down for a nap, so she didn’t expect him to be fussing yet, but still, there was something wrong.

 

As she reached the top of the stairs, Carla glanced out the kitchen window. Brad had taken advantage of her brief absence to escape to the back yard and was out on the swing. He wasn’t supposed to go out unless he told her he was going, but she’d deal with that later. At least he had turned off the TV first. She’d have to praise him for that but she wanted to check on the younger boys before going outside.

 

Quietly slipping into the baby’s room, Carla tiptoed to the crib, hoping the old wooden floor wouldn’t creak. He appeared to be fine – sleeping peacefully. She watched him breath softly for awhile, just to make sure, and a tiny bubble burst from his lips. Could she love him any more deeply? For a woman who had sworn she would never have children, here she was with three, each one special, each one precious. She blew him a little air kiss and moved back into the hall.

 

Tommy’s bedroom door was open but she couldn’t hear anything from inside. Maybe he had fallen asleep. He was still young enough to need a nap but always resisted when she cajoled and pleaded with him to lie down. She’d found the best tactic was to just tell him to “play quietly” so he wouldn’t wake his new brother and he’d usually fall asleep on his own.

 

What she saw when she entered the room shattered her world. There was blood everywhere. The tall, narrow dresser lay on the floor. Tommy must have pulled open the drawers and used them as stairs to climb to the top of the dresser. It couldn’t take all that weight, high up on the front, and had fallen forward, pinning Tommy’s legs and smashing his head into the heavy wooden toy box at the foot of the bed.

 

“Nooooo,” Carla cried as she raced to her son. The old dresser was heavy but she lifted it off as gently as she could, trying to keep the top drawers from falling out so they wouldn’t hurt him again. Her lower lip began to tremble and her hands shook as she turned back to her little boy.

 

“Mommy?” he said, as he opened his eyes. “It fell.”

 

“I know, baby. Just lie still.” She grabbed a freshly washed, neatly folded pillowcase that had fallen from the top of the dresser to the floor. She needed to stop the bleeding but was afraid to move him in case he’d broken his neck. What was she to do? She had to stop the bleeding but she also had to get help.

 

Moving him as little as possible, she gently slid the cotton pillowcase under his head, thinking ‘direct, even pressure, direct even pressure, direct even pressure’ as she’d been taught in an emergency first aid class decades earlier. Head wounds were notorious for bleeding profusely and Tommy had already lost a lot of blood.

 

“Lie still and wait here a minute while Mommy calls Uncle Scott,” she told him. Carla raced out to the kitchen and dialed 911. The paramedics, Scott and Sue, lived just across the street but Carla didn’t know if they were home or not. She gave the necessary information to the 911 operator, then yanked opened the kitchen door to call out to Brad.

 

“Chowder,” she yelled. It was their family code for an emergency situation. It was not to be used lightly, but when it was issued, the response by everyone had to be immediate, with no questions asked and no dawdling.

 

Carla raced back to Tommy, Brad following behind.

 

“What’d he do?” Brad asked.

 

“He climbed the dresser and it fell. Go wait by the front door for Uncle Scott or Aunt Sue.”

 

The chaos of the next few weeks merged into a large blur of doctors, hospitals, and eventually, the mortuary. It was the most difficult thing she had ever had to do – to pick out such a tiny casket, to bury such bright-eyed potential. There’d be no more little butterfly kisses on her cheek or chocolate chip cookie parties or discovering new bugs in the backyard. She tried hard to rally for baby Aaron’s sake, to make good memories for him, and for Brad, but the hole in her heart made it hard for her to smile.

 

Despite people telling her it was a tragic accident, “Don’t beat yourself up about it,” she couldn’t help but blame herself.  It would have been such an easy thing, to have attached the dresser to the wall: a few minutes of her time, a simple bracket, a couple of screws.

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The Spot Writers- our members:

RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

 

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

 

Catherine A. MacKenzie: http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

 

Kathy Price: http://www.kathylprice.com

Like most writers, my mind wanders often.

And by often, I mean: All. The. Time.

Driving to work, my mind often wanders. Driving the same route, a courteous part of my brain often takes over, and my creative brain is left to think about things. I bought a chunky little notebook to jot down ideas I have during these moments, and I found myself falling into the habit of writing haikus. They started out mostly about the dreaded yellow school buses I would have to wait for each morning. I kept telling myself I should write and post one haiku each day, but I kept thinking I should wait for some kind of grand start–like January 1, or maybe the start of the school year in September, or maybe my birthday. But today I decided: one day is just as good as any to start.

So here it is, my new blog where I’ll be posting one haiku each day, some with pictures and some without. I’m curious about whether, collectively, these haikus will tell a story. I wonder how people who don’t know me personally will piece together each haiku, find trends. The novelist in me wonders if a story will emerge.

Anyhow, if you are interested, here is the link: http://eachdayahaiku.wordpress.com/. If you choose to subscribe, I think you can do so in daily or weekly format, so you could opt to receive an email each Monday with 7 haikus in it from the week before. Hope you enjoy your daily 5-7-5!