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Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for this month is to use in the story “Just breathe and count to ten…” Today’s tale comes to you from Tom Robson, author of Written While I still Remember, A Patchwork Memoir. See if you can guess the identity of the “friends” before you read the last paragraph!

Goodbye, Old Friends!

By Tom Robson

They stand, solid and upright, in a quiet corner, these harbingers of spring and comforting reminders in the cold of winter. Unmoving and unmoved for over a year and a half, these friends, under-appreciated to the point of neglect, bring memories of my younger days.

Though we did not meet their first antecedents until I was in my fifties, I soon became obsessively involved in the sometimes rewarding search for replacements. New friends served me better by times. Those they replaced were handed on. New-found-friends provided more satisfaction and better prepared me to face the ups and downs of life. They promised to help me bypass life’s wrong turns and, if by some mischance I found myself in a hazardous situation, experiencing rough times, one of them was there to offer rescue.

The pockets in their protective cover are full of other comforts and items that I have needed on the picturesque, but oft unnoticed walks through green pastures. brush and water’s edge. In another section of the garage the ‘wheels’ for my companions dwell, unmoving and awaiting solid ground on which to travel. They too, are not inclined to winter use.

Can I finally give up the comforting feel of my thirty year friends manly grip, their resilience, their forgiveness of minor errors and the lessons imparted, but not always learned from major misplays?

Will my life be better if I abandon their discriminatory and wayward  behavior, the inconsistencies, the broken promises, the errant actions and the utter folly in choosing to employ them on an almost daily basis in some summers?

There is also the companionship factor to consider. These are friends for the unarthritic, for those who scorn the closer starting places; a tool for those to whom length still matters. They are companions of an ongoing search for perpetual youthfulness.

They are not for those whose mobility is threatened. They do not belong to those who no longer rant and rave, with expletive ridden venom, at the friends who misguide them on an increasing number of occasions. Once you accept that advancing age allows you to forgive the failures and foibles of the now, garage-bound friends and blame failure on your own advancing years, it is time to let the friends go.

So, just breathe and count to ten. Accept it. Then press that final key that will put those now useless golf clubs up for sale, on Kijiji.

The Spot Writers–our members:

 RC Bonitz: rcbonitz.com

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie:https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Tom Robson: https://robsonswritings.wordpress.com/

 

Welcome to Writer Wednesdays. Today I’d like to highlight a book hot off the presses (well, the electronic presses, for now. The paperback is on its way!). It’s called Dystopian Express, and I’m especially excited because dystopian writing is probably my favorite genre.

Dystopian Express

When someone asks me what my favorite book is, I always feel guilty–the way I imagine parents of multiple children would feel when asked which child is his or her “favorite.” As a writer and English teacher, I feel like if I name one book as my favorite, I am betraying so many other amazing works. And, sort of like having multiple children, each one brings something unique to the table. They’re not “better” or “worse”; they’re just “different.” But when pressed long enough, I cave in and name 1984  as my favorite book.

What I love about the work is how paranoid it is. The perspective, through Winston’s eyes, is limited so that we know only what Winston knows–and he knows that he can never know everything. We never are told with 100% certainty exactly what is real and what is made up. It’s, sadly, the way a story might be told by someone living reluctantly in North Korea. How could they ever be sure about anything they were told?

Following the dystopian vein, I wrote a short story called “Cohort 17” about a society in which Preceptors are created with a mutated form of cancer, allowing ordinary humans to have superhuman abilities–which are used “for the greater good,” of course, to keep everyone else in line. I just learned that the book has been released, so I haven’t gotten a chance to read the other stories yet, but I can’t wait!

From the publisher:

 

It wasn’t supposed to be this way.

You are followed.

You are watched.

Suppress your thoughts.

Do as they say.

You stand as one against them all.

What happens when every aspect of your life is managed, manipulated, and controlled by someone else? Everyone is guaranteed the opportunity to suffer equally for the greater good in this dystopian society. You become weary in your helplessness and have no voice in what happens to you, your family, friends and neighbors. Your possessions, your body, and even your thoughts, belong to them and not yourself.

What will you do? Jump on board and witness how the landscape has changed as we ride the rails of the Dystopian Express.

Available for Kindle here.

I happened upon this book in a used book store. I had previously read the (now award-winning) blog of the same name and was excited to see there was now a book. It was there in the illustrated humor section, right next to The Far Side and Calvin and Hobbes.

The book is a quick read, as it’s mostly illustrated. The author uses a highly stylized hand to create entertaining drawings meant to look like a kindergartener drew them, and I mean that as a compliment. You can check out what I mean at http://hyperboleandahalf.blogspot.com/.

Since I am a dog person, I only ever checked out the blog’s dog-related post in which the author humorously chronicles the life of her “challenged” dog and her “helper” dog. The book has several chapters about these dogs (which are just as funny as the blog) and also chapters about the author, including her childhood, a goose on the loose, and depression. I preferred the chapters about the dogs, though her childhood chapters were funny as well.

The book does have adult language, so even though it looks like a “comic book,” beware of allowing young’uns to read it. If you’re not sure, check out the blog first. If you enjoy the blog, you’ll like the book.

Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for February is to begin your story with “Just breathe and count to ten…” Sorry this post is a little late. Tiny Baby is Queen of the Universe and makes Mommy sometimes question what day it is!

This week’s flash fiction, “Just Breathe,” comes to you from Cathy MacKenzie. Check out her Facebook page, OUT OF THE CAVE [and the call for submissions (payment of $10 if accepted) for a horror anthology for teens]. In the spirit of horror, this one is a little dark.

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Just Breathe

by Cathy MacKenzie

“Just breathe.”

“But I can’t. It’s so hard…the stuff going in my mouth—”

“Try, please try. I need you to survive.”

“I want to, too. You think I want to die?”

“Breathe. Just breathe. Count to ten.”

“I can’t count to ten.”

“Come on. One, two, three, four….”

“I counted to three. No more breath—”

“Breathe.”

“Ah, I did. You hear me?”

“Yes, you did well. Another. And another. Keep going. One breath. Two breath.”

“I can’t.”

“What did I tell you? Breathe. One—”

“What makes you queen of all shit?”

“Just breathe, sweetie. One—”

“No more. Stop. I can’t.”

“Please. I don’t want to lose you.”

Silence.

“Please. For me?”

Silence.

“You there?”

“I’m here.”

“You took a breath, then.”

“I did.”

“You stole it!”

“I did?”

“Well, yes. You said you were done, so you stole it from someone.”

“No, I’d never steal.”

“You’re still there, right?”

“Yeah.”

“And you said you had no more breaths, right?”

“Yeah.”

“So you stole. If you had no breath left, then you stole.”

“No….”

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 The Spot Writers–our members:

 RC Bonitz: rcbonitz.com

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie:https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Tom Robson: https://robsonswritings.wordpress.com/

 

 

 

 

 

I enjoyed reading Knowlton’s first book, Dead of Autumn, and was excited to learn there is a sequel (and a third book coming soon). You can read my review of Dead of Autumn here. Now, for Dead of Summer:

Synopsis (from the publisher)

In a tale of suspense that travels from South-central Pennsylvania to Africa to the iconic Woodstock Festival of 1969, Dead of Summer embroils Alexa Williams in the dangerous world of sex trafficking.

With help from friends, family, and her yoga practice, Alexa Williams is finally starting to recover from last autumn’s trauma of finding a dead body and the violence that ensued. The young attorney can’t believe that her summer has begun with the discovery of another body. This time, the dead woman was famous for her worldwide campaign against sex trafficking. The murder hits close to home: the late activist was a friend and mentor to Alexa’s best friend, Melissa.

While the town mourns, Alexa stumbles into a burglary at Melissa’s home, barely escaping serious harm. A client asks for help in convincing the police that her foster child is not a runaway, and Alexa learns that other local girls have gone missing. Drawn into the fight to save lost and exploited children, Alexa discovers a community of child activists. A local philanthropist wants Alexa to join his foster care empire. A sexy social worker and a hip college professor want a more personal connection with Alexa, but she is also drawn to the police detective leading the murder investigation.

Searching for answers, Alexa becomes entangled in a web of deception and danger that puts both her heart and her life at risk. By the time she discovers that the key to the present lies in the halcyon days of peace and music, it may be too late.

My review:

Like the first book, I enjoyed Dead of Summer. The author’s selection of detail helped me imagine that I was there with the characters, and by the end Alexa once again felt more like a friend than a character. I knew about her coffee and yoga habits, her family dinner on Friday night… It helped that Alexa seems as tied to her giant and lovable dog as I am to my corgis.

With all Alexa has been through, she seems to become skeptical of almost everyone (especially guys), and since we see much of the story through her eyes, her skepticism helped keep me guessing. I especially enjoyed that the thrills kept coming, even after I reached what I thought was the denouement.

The Woodstock story was entertaining, and I kept waiting for the connection to modern day to be made–which it was, adding to the tension of Alexa’s situation. All in all, I enjoyed this thriller.

 

I received a review copy of this novel, but the opinion expressed is my own.

I had read so many summaries of John Green novels written by my students that I wanted to choose a novel I didn’t know about. This is his first novel, and none of my students had ever reviewed it or spoiled it for me.

Like Green’s other works, this is a young adult novel, a coming of age work following a boy nicknamed “Pudge” who goes away to boarding school. In his life prior to boarding school, he had no real friends and no real life. When he arrives at the boarding school, he is drawn into a world of pranks, drinking, smoking, and philosophy. He pushes himself beyond his comfort zone, making friends in the process.

The chapter headings indicate “X Days Before” or “X Days After,” alluding to an event surrounding Pudge’s new friend (and crush), Alaska. I won’t reveal in this review what happens involving her, but it forces Pudge and his friends to question life, hence the coming of age portion.

I started reading this novel over the summer and then forgot about it (not because it wasn’t good; simply because I misplaced it and became distracted reading other things). So it might be that I was in a different place reading the first half, but I remember getting annoyed at Pudge’s new friends in the beginning of the novel because they were encouraging him to do things like drink and play pranks on others.

But then, as the novel went along, I saw that maybe I was being a little too uptight—the way Pudge was in his old life—and missing some of what makes life fun and memorable. It’s a young adult novel, so it’s somewhat predictable, and it’s got its share of profanities and “bad” things, like minor alcohol use and sex. But overall it’s a solid coming of age book that I would have benefitted from as a teenager. It reminds me of Dead Poets Society, only without a “Captain” to lead the youths—they are left to discover the “Great Beyond” of life on their own, synthesizing their own discussions with what they are learning in school and experiencing in life.

A little late posting this one, but happy weekend, folks!

If you haven’t heard, I’ve been a little busy lately with a newborn. She’s a bundle of joy, for sure, but as with all newborns, there are trying times. So it’s good to keep a sense of humor. For instance, I never knew that newborns made, um, grown-up sized farts until I was sitting watching TV with my husband, when I heard a low rumble from that side of the room.

“Was that you?” I asked, concerned.

“No,” he said. “I thought that was you.”

We both turned toward the baby, at which point she let another one loose. Maybe it was the sleep deprivation, but the moment reminded me of the Monty Python rabbit scene. You know the one–an innocent-looking white rabbit suddenly attacks the knights, drawing blood. It was the same thing with a little baby passing such big gas–compounded by the look of total contentment taking over her face. I laughed and laughed until tears ran down my cheeks.

It made the sleepless night that followed all the more bearable.

It’s important to keep a sense of humor, which is why I especially appreciated a gift we received for our newborn. It arrived in the mail, and we removed it from its packaging to reveal the box:

cribdrib003I thought, “I know everyone has that one relative, but is this for reeeeal?”

I turned it over:

cribdrib001“This can’t be real,” I said aloud. My husband, too, grew concerned. We read the testimonies and the details, balancing skepticism with the concern that the gift giver may have actually thought this was a good idea:

cribdrib002But sure enough, on the other side, was a small note to the effect of calm down; your real gift is inside.

The real gift was a very cute baby outfit and book. But the real gift was the moments of laughter that followed, breaking up the anxiety of having a new baby at home. It was an important reminder the humor is a helpful part of life, and no matter how serious things are, there’s always room for some levity.

Especially from that one relative.

Welcome to the Spot Writers. Today’s contribution comes from RC Bonitz, author of DANGEROUS DECISIONS, which was released in September. The prompt for this month is “Just breathe and count to ten.”.

JUST BREATHE

by RC Bonitz

The door at Shea Security Services stood ajar when Meg O’Hara arrived for work. She eased it open a smidge and gasped at the chaos inside. Files, her office chair, pictures from the walls, even the artificial flowers from her desk, everything lay scattered on the floor.

“Just breathe and count to ten,” she said aloud and took a step into the office. “Anybody here?” she called and stood with a hand on the door, ready to flee if she heard the slightest flicker of a response. Not a whisper of a sound reached her ears.

Mike Shea’s office door was open too. She peeked inside and almost fainted. Mike lay face down on his desk, unmoving. Retreating to her desk, she dialed 911.

Hours later, as she made dinner in her apartment she reviewed the events of the day in her mind. Police had swarmed over the office, asked her eight zillion questions, most of which she couldn’t answer. They’d taken fingerprints everywhere, and basically left her in a state of mind as chaotic as the office was. Somebody had killed Mike and torn the office apart looking for something. That much was obvious. But, had they found whatever it was they’d been looking for?

Meg poured herself a glass of wine and shivered at the thought that stole into her head. What if they hadn’t found it? What would they do next?

The doorbell rang. She made sure the safety chain was on and peered through the peep hole. Somebody in a suit and tie. Probably a cop with more questions?

“Who is it?” she called.

“Police. Detctive Hanson.”

“Just a minute.”

She removed the chain. Unlocked the door and opened it cautiously. Meg saw only one thing. The barrel of the gun pointing at her.

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DANGEROUS DECISIONS is available now. I hope you enjoy it. RC Bonitz


The Spot Writers–our members:

RC Bonitz: rcbonitz.com

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Tom Robson: http://robsonswritings.wordpress.com/

Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for February is to use the following in a story: “How could she (or he) do a thing like that?”

This week’s flash fiction comes to you from Tom Robson. Check out his website/blog at www.robsonswritings.wordpress.com

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Service

by Tom Robson

He opened the back door, took off his boots, walked through to the kitchen and there she was, hiding behind her mother who was cradling the baby, Dolly.

He’d only stopped for a couple of jars at the Miners Arms in Billy Row. That wasn’t much of a delay, but Vera had got home, walking the six mile journey from Crook, before him. His instinct was to put the fourteen year old over his knee and give her a good thrashing. Before he could make his move to pull her from behind Emma’s chair, his wife said, “Slow thisen down a bit, Tom. We’ve got it sorted. She’s going back.”

“That’s if Mrs Milburn will take her. Stupid girl might have lost me one of my gardening jobs as well by running away. If tha’s not packed thi bags our Vera, Thou’d best do it now. We’re walking back there today. D’you hear me?”

Vera cowered as she pushed past her father then ran upstairs to the room she shared with four of her sisters.

“Div’n that girl know how hard it is to find work around here. The pits laying miners off. No factory work for girls and there’s fewer families can afford to employ servants. Not that I believe in that, but now she’s out of school our Vera needs to work, even if all that’s available is slaving away for some rich lady.” Tom Oliphant ranted at his wife as she nursed the youngest and, she hoped, their last. Doreen was their tenth.

Emma knew that Vera might have ruined the opportunity to work for Mrs Milburn, one of the colliery owners wives. She feared what her volatile husband might do to Vera if the situation could not be fixed

“Sit down Tom!’ she urged. “I know you want to walk her back there today. There’s still enough daylight. Can I tell you what happened?”

Tom interrupted. “She were fine when I left, and so was Mrs Milburn. Our Vera spoke up well for hersen. Told Mrs Milburn all the things she does around here to help you cook, clean and care for the bairns. She wanted her to start work right way and I was going back with Vera’s belongings tomorrow. What did that gormless daughter of ours do to mess things up after I’d left? Has she cost me one of my gardening jobs with her feckless behaviour? How could she do a thing like that?

“Vera’s nervous face edged round the door from the hallway. ‘I am sorry, father. But as soon as you left that Mrs Milburn was horrible. Gave me a long list of things that needed doing, and then the cook wanted me to help her. And when Mrs Milburn caught me peeling potatoes instead of doing the work she’d set for me, she hit me with a broom and chased me out of the kitchen. She was screaming at me. I were crying as I were cleaning out the fireplaces in t’ bedrooms. I wanted to come home.When she checked up on me again, she said she expected me to work faster than this. When she went away, so did I. I ran back here.”

Her father cut off her elaborate explanation. “We’re working class, Vera. As long as there’s upper class controlling the money we have to do as they tell us. That’s life in the nineteen twenties. There’s talk of protest marches and hunger strikes to bring about change. But it won’t happen today, lass. Time for you to go say you’re sorry and hope she takes you back. And say it as if you mean it, just like I have to lie to those thieving sods all the time.

“I am sorry, father. If she’ll give me another chance I’ll do whatever she tells me.” said the contrite daughter.

“Trouble is, our kid, you have to do it even though you hate doing it. P’raps she’ll be a good mistress. And I know the cook, Mrs Charlton is a good sort.” Now go say your goodbyes again. I’ll carry your bag the six mile walk over the top to Crook.” complained Tom.

“And six back!” his wife chipped in. “But I bet you’ll find a pub or three to visit on the return trip. And send our Elsie in. She’s my big help now our Vera’s a working lass! I’ve made you a sandwich cos you won’t be here for tea. Now ger on, the pair of you before it’s dark.

Father and daughter set off from Tow Law over the fields and moors by Castle Bank, picking up the road, as daylight failed, through Sunniside, Billy Row and Rodimoor to the Milburn’s house.

Mrs Milburn greeted father and daughter with an icy aloofness which was melted by Vera’s tears and sobbed apology. She pleaded to be given another chance at the maid’s position her father had begged for his oldest. The lady relented and offered one final chance.

Vera Oliphant took the offer but hated her job and all the others for the ten years she was in service between leaving school in 1926 and marrying ten years later.

Nobody is quite sure what hour Tom Oliphant staggered home that night, but it was long after 10:30pm, “last orders” at the final pub he refreshed himself at on the twenty four miles he walked that day.

And Vera found it strange having a bed, and bedroom all to herself, after her first day at work.

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 The Spot Writers–our members:

 RC Bonitz: rcbonitz.com

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Tom Robson: www.robsonswritings.wordpress.com

 

 

 

 

 

Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for February is to use the following in a story: “How could she (or he) do a thing like that?” (Inspiration came to Cathy as a result of a recent birth; no, not mine!) This week’s flash fiction comes to you from Cathy MacKenzie. Check out her new Facebook page OUT OF THE CAVE (and the call for submissions for a horror anthology for teens).

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Consequence

by Cathy MacKenzie

Nathan, rubbing his forehead, sways to and fro. “How could she do a thing like that?”

“I don’t know. Why in the world would she do that?” His problems aren’t my problems, so I don’t know why he’s asking me.

“You think I’m terrible, don’t you?”

“Not at all.” I don’t usually lie.

“But I don’t understand.”

“What don’t you understand?”

The colour of his face alternates with blotches of red and white. “I…I don’t understand.”

“I don’t understand why you don’t understand.” I sigh at his silence. “What’s not to understand? Pretty clear to me. You penetrated, you enjoyed the moment, and now there’s a consequence.”

At least I assumed he enjoyed himself.

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 The Spot Writers–our members:

 RC Bonitz: rcbonitz.com

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie:https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Tom Robson: Blog pending