Val Muller

The Electronic Wordsmith

This is the second book in a trilogy, and I read this book about a year after I read the first one. I remember having liked the first one, but I didn’t go back and review the plot. That said, it took me until about page 30 to remember everything that had happened. Then it all came back. The trilogy is a middle-grade/young adult fantasy following Calwyn, a chanter who escapes her home in the icy mountains and discovers an entire world—a troubled one—that needs her help. In this installment, Calwyn and her diverse group of friends (some have the gift of chantment; others are good at sailing, others at navigating the desert or healing) are on a quest to rescue chanters from dire living conditions. In this world, chanters (who use song to control the world) are feared in society and exploited by those with evil intentions.

But aside from the main quest, there are plenty of subplots to keep things interesting. At the end of the first book, Calwyn’s love interest, Darrow, has left her. Though they seemed—at times—perfect for one another, Darrow never fully opened up to her. In this second book, Darrow is still missing, and Calwyn wishes he would return. She thinks of him when her quest becomes difficult or lonely. At times, imagining what Darrow would do in a situation even provides her strength. To keep up the suspense, the author provides some of the chapters through Darrow’s perspective. He is returning from his own journey, and he thinks about Calwyn, too. He is disappointed when she isn’t waiting for him at home. I enjoyed the alternating perspectives, especially because I learned much about Darrow’s troubled childhood and his motivations for acting so unpredictable (I won’t spoil this, as it is revealed slowly throughout the novel). That said, I was disappointed when they finally did reunite. While they definitely helped each other as far as the quest was concerned, their romance seemed short-lived and fizzled when Darrow would not open up to Calwyn, hiding elements of his past from her. The spark that each of them imagined never manifested in reality.

Aside from the innocent romance, I enjoyed the underlying themes and the diversity of characters. For example, some of the characters were raised along the sea or in the forest, while others grew up in the desert. When they encounter desert or water, the characters show interesting opinions on what is scary versus desirable in life—and as you can imagine, their views differ. This helps to stress the reason so many of the factions in their world are at war. In the end, it turns out all everyone needed was a little dose of understanding. Still, although the external conflicts are resolved for the time being, Calwyn experiences her own troubles. She has been discovering slowly that she has a talent for many gifts of chantment (chanters can normally only sing one kind of chantment). In the first book, an evil man had been traveling the globe in an effort to learn all the types of songs, fulfilling a prophesy that someone would eventually become the “singer of all songs” and wield great power. Many of the characters hint that Calwyn is on her way to become this singer, and the implications disturb her greatly. There is also a question over whether the villain was actually killed in book one—a question left to be answered in the final installment. I won’t give away anything else about this conflict as it seems to be the most important part of the story.

From a writer’s point of view, I enjoyed the alternating viewpoints and the use of interpersonal conflicts to mirror global ones. I would have liked just a bit more imagery to describe some of the settings, though I thought the desert was particularly well described.

The bottom line: This is a fun read for a middle-grade or young adult lover of fantasy.

This episode of Remy’s story comes to us from Val Muller. Check out her sweet romance novella, For Whom My Heart Beats Eternal, and her middle-grade mystery series, Corgi Capers. Find out more at valm16.sg-host.com

Next week’s piece comes from Cathy MacKenzie. Check out her three books of short stories available on Smashwords for only $1.99 and $0.99. https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/camack.There you can read the first story in each book for free. However, the stories are all different, so the sample stories aren’t a true representation of the other stories.

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Chapter 10

Somehow, word of Remy’s night with Dr. Kendrick had made it to Irene. Remy could tell as soon as she stepped into the office. She pretended not to notice Irene’s smirks and sat at her desk, taking a sudden, intense interest in cleaning out her email box. Irene brought over a patient’s folder, taking extra time to set it in front of Remy, extra time to try for eye contact.

But Remy didn’t look up. She pretended not to notice. Irene returned again with another folder—and again, the same intense stare. She seemed to be bringing everything over piecemeal this morning. A patient’s chart. A pen. A piece of discarded mail. Not her usual efficient self. Remy wondered how long she’d be able to avoid the inevitable. She’d never been able to hide things from Irene, and it was only a matter of time.

She finally broke at lunch.

“Alright,” Remy said after locking the door to the office. Dr. Kendrick had gone out for a burger, leaving the two assistants alone, but Remy didn’t want to take any chances. “What’s the smirk all about?”

Irene grinned. “You tell me, Miss I’m-dating-the-boss.”

Remy blushed. “We’re not dating,” she said. For a moment, she couldn’t help but smile.

“That’s not what I heard.”

“Wait.” Remy’s smile faded, and her vision narrowed. “First of all, who told you we were dating?”

Irene shrugged, an over-exaggerated gesture indicting Dr. Kendrick’s office.

“What did he tell you?”

“Just that you two had a hot date at Banjo Dan’s.”

“It wasn’t a hot date,” Remy muttered.

“I heard there were drinks involved.”

Remy scowled. “What else did he tell you?”

“That’s all,” Irene said. “He wouldn’t get into details. But from what he said, it seems like you had quite the night out.”

“What?” Remy knew it was a mistake to date the boss. No. They weren’t dating. They’d just gone out for drinks. And Remy had been upset. And she’d refused Sam’s offer to spend the night. No, not Sam. Dr. Kendrick. Dr. Kendrick, her boss.

Irene smirked. “I think it’s smart.”

“What is?”

“Dating the boss. I mean, you’ve seen his car, right? And I wonder what his house is like. Do you know?” she teased. “Does he have like a million bathrooms and granite counters?”

“No! I didn’t go home with him. Is that what he said?”

Irene raised an eyebrow.

“He did, didn’t he?”

“Not in so many words.”

“Irene, I didn’t go home with him.”

“Well I don’t see why not.”

Remy crossed her arms. “Because.”

“Because why?”

Remy searched for the answer. Why hadn’t she? She’d been terrified of her mysterious stalker, and annoyed at Jeremy for—for what? For having a relationship before he met her? Why did Jeremy bother her so much? She barely knew him. What was it about him that got under her skin? And why hadn’t she gone home with Dr. Kendrick? He had a guest room. He would have let her sleep there. He wouldn’t have bothered her; she knew that deep down. So why did she refuse? Because he was her boss? Because he bought her dinner and drinks? Because he offered to check her apartment for intruders? Because he offered to protect her from a crazy stalker? Why?

“Because why?” Irene asked again.

And the answer came quickly, blurted before Remy could even stop herself. “Because I’m seeing someone else. We have plans after work today.”

“Who?” Irene asked.

But before she had even finished asking, Remy was blurting the answer. “Jeremy.”

 

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This is the first book in a series, a middle-grade fantasy novel following the life of Tal, a boy who wakes to find his whole world changed. His father is missing and presumed dead, his mother is gravely sick, and his two siblings depend on him. But with his father missing, his family is in need of a Sunstone, a magical stone that provides light and warmth to the family, and allows them entrance to a forbidden part of his world, which consists of a castle of seven towers. But everything seems to have turned against Tal: his cousins are indifferent at best, one of the authority figures does everything in his power to ruin Tal’s chance for success, and Tal’s siblings are too young to be of help.

For a middle-grade reader, this book is a “gateway” novel to the world of fantasy. With sunstones and magic shadows that change shape in helpful and sinister ways, to magic involving light and sound, to a caste system with more hidden beneath the surface than Tal could ever expect, the author establishes a new and intriguing world.

This first book focuses on Tal’s attempts to secure a new Sunstone for the family. He tries to win it, but when his talent is foiled by the evil Sushin. Tal even ignores protocol and tries to secure a Sunstone from the Empress, with disastrous results. Finally, Tal finds the Icecarls, a group of people he had never heard of—non-magical people who live on the ice. They, too, are in search of a Sunstone, and they assign Tal to work with Milla, an antagonistic girl on her way to become a Shield Maiden—whose primarily goal seems to be killing Tal! Here, Tal is challenged by his inability to use his magic or his protective shadow and must use courage the way the warrior-like Milla does. They confront extreme cold, darkness, and giant beasts called Merwin.

I won’t ruin the ending. I’ll only say that it was a quick read that establishes an interesting world and, for young readers of fantasy, is an intriguing start to what promises to be a compelling series.

This episode of Remy’s story comes to us from RC Bonitz, author of A LITTLE BIT OF BLACKMAIL and A BLANKET FOR HER HEART, both available from Amazon or B&N. He’s looking forward to the release of A LITTLE BIT OF BABY November 3.

Next week’s Chapter will be written by Val Muller. Check out her spicy romance novella, For Whom My Heart Beats Eternal, and her middle-grade mystery series, Corgi Capers. Find out more at valm16.sg-host.com

The Spot Writers’ blogs appear at the end of this story. Don’t forget to check them out.

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Ambushed

What to do? Remy retreated to the kitchen and downed the dregs of her morning coffee. Yuck, it was cold. She put the cup down and tried to steady her fidgety hands. The clock said it was time to go to work, but how could she? Okay, so what was the big to do? She had to face the man and she would. On her own terms. When she wanted to.

Stop stalling, she told herself. You’d think this guy was something special. As if it mattered what he thought of her. What she thought of him. Why was he sitting on her doorstep like that? He liked her? Well, obviously he did, but what about Barbara? And his child? His child!

Okay, that was it. Remy picked up her purse again and started for the door. A brilliant thought struck her. She didn’t have to get to work exactly on time every day. She was never late. Dr. Kendrick would be mad, but she deserved a little slack at least once. Jeremy wanted to block her doorway with his butt? Well, he could block a little longer.

She put down her jacket and meandered into the bathroom. Her makeup wasn’t quite perfect yet. And another little brushing wouldn’t hurt her hair. Did her nails need a touch up too? Pulling the brush through her hair, her stomach tightened. Conscience, darn she was supposed to get to work on time. Darn you Jeremy. You’re making me do things I don’t like to do.

Grabbing her purse and jacket again, she strode to the door, and threw it open. “What do you want?”

Startled, Jeremy looked up and grinned. “I want to talk to you.”

“We have nothing to talk about.”

His grin died. “I want to explain. Why are you so upset?”

“You tried to trap me in my condo. I’m not upset- I’m mad.” She hated being nasty, but she had to be so he’d leave her alone. If he didn’t she’d be in big trouble.

“I’m sorry. You don’t have to talk to me right now. I just—”

“Good. I have to go to work.” Remy tried to step past him, but he didn’t move. “If you don’t mind?”

Jeremy gave her the most forlorn look, then got to his feet, and stepped aside. “When can I see you?”

She almost said something like, ‘you can wait ’til doomsday’, but somehow that’s not what came out. Instead, she said, “I don’t know.” The words didn’t even have much snap to them. Darn, what was wrong with her?

“Listen,” he said, sounding almost desperate, “I’ll stop by tonight, after work.”

She charged past him and headed for her car. She should have told him not to bother, but she hadn’t. Well, she could tell him after work.

 

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Catherine A. MacKenzie

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Jessica Degarmo

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RC Bonitz

http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller

https://valmuller.com/blog

Deborah Dera

http://www.deborahdera.com

Tonia Brown’s short stories have appeared in a variety of anthologies. She has cranked out several books, including Lucky Stiff: Memoirs of an Undead Lover, Badass Zombie Road Trip, Skin Trade, and the erotic steampunk series Clockworks and Corsets. Tonia lives in North Carolina with her genius husband and an ever fluctuating number of cats. When not writing she raises unicorns and fights crime with her husband under the code names “Dr. Weird and his sexy sidekick Butternut.”

 

You can learn more about her and her pen name, Regina Riley, at: www.thebackseatwriter.com

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How to Write a Novel

Or

How to Lose Friends and Alienate Yourself

by Tonia Brown

 

In my brief career I have penned nine novels (Some of which may never see the light of day, praise Eris!) eight novellas (yes there is a difference between a novel and novella.) and a crap ton of short stories. In all of my time as an author, I get asked a lot of questions. Where do you get your ideas? How do you find the time to write? Where do you start? How do you finish? None of these questions are easy to answer. (Save for the first one: I get my ideas from a jar of pickled pig brains I bought off the internet. Whenever I’m ready to start a new novel, I shake up the jar, ask for a new idea and the pig brains shoot the plot into my mind via telepathy. True story!)

Writing a novel is no easy task—otherwise everyone would do it. Now, I know it seems as if it is that way sometimes. Just log into your friendly local social network and you’ll find folks posting left and right about the book they are working on, or the research they are doing for a new book, or how the book they are writing is causing them so much internal conflict because isn’t it oh so hard to kill off a main character? The truth is, for every ten folks who say they are writing a novel, perhaps one of them has got as far as plotting it, one in twenty are past the first chapter, one in fifty are nearing anything like the halfway point, while the rest are all just blowing hot air about their progress, or never started or simply gave up a long, long time ago in a galaxy far, far away.

Why? Because while I am here to attest that writing a novel is hard, for some strange reason there are folks out there who seem to think it is as simple as breathing. And by all rights it should be! I mean, think about it: you sit around on your rump, throwing back beers and stuffing your gob with pizza while pounding away at the keyboard for x number of hours until, viola! A book comes out of the other end of the computer. Easy peasy, call me Wheezy.

But, as we all well know, nothing comes easy. (Except for teenage boys.) For those of us who have actually written a book, we can all agree that while the previous description is pretty dead on about the beer and pizza, it is sorely lacking three other things; blood, sweat and tears. (And I ain’t just talking about the band, though they do make some good music!) Most folks who sit down to write that Great American Novel find they either don’t like the smell of sweat, can’t stand the sight of blood, or aren’t the crying kind of person.

Whenever someone flat out asks me how to write a book, my first answer is to read. A lot. It may sound like a stupid thing to suggest, but I find the majority of folks who approach me, all hot to write a masterpiece, don’t read at all! If you don’t read, how can you write? It’s like wanting to become a pie maker, but you don’t eat pies. Or a scientist but you won’t do science. Or a prostitute but you won’t have sex.

The art and craft of writing lies in the shared experience of the story. (The art and craft of writing should not to be confused with the arts and crafts of writing, which is a whole different thing—with lots of yarn and glue and glitter.) If you never partake in someone else’s story, then how can you expect to share your own effectively? Besides, well written books are like instruction manuals on how to write. Reading a good book is the equivalent of a free writing course.

The second thing I always warn folks of is a novel takes dedication. I’m always hearing folks say how they would like to write but they can’t find the time. If you want to write you will make time. Turn the television off. Put down the phone. Get off the internet. (I don’t mean get off on the internet, I mean shut down your browser, you pervert!) Anything worth doing is worth doing well, and that requires dedication. Make writing a priority and you will find time for it. Set a personal word goal every day and try to reach it, no matter what. Even one thousand words a night is nothing to sneeze at. If you can write one thousand words a night, you’ll have a good sized novella in a month, and a decent sized novel in less than three.

Make time to make it happen, and it will happen.

On that note, the last thing to remember is that writing takes time. No matter how talented you are, you aren’t going to just squat a novel out in a few days, ready to read! Writing, like any other art, is time consuming. My personal output varies from a few months to a few years, just depending on the novel in question. Yes, it is true that I wrote Lucky Stiff in fifty six days, from beginning to end, with very little need for fine-tuning. Ninety-seven thousand words dropped out of my brain in fifty six days. It was more like taking dictation then writing.

And sometimes it will be like that for you. Sometimes the story will flow like water, coursing through your veins like so much blood. All you have to do is insert razor and let it pour out onto the page.

But sometimes, oh yes those other times it will be more like cutting off an arm and a leg and an ear, then smearing these various body parts across the blank page only to find you should have smeared left instead of right and now you have to start all over again! Thank the gods you have two arms!

The trick is to be patient and move at the story’s pace. Calm down and let the story tell itself. You can only control so much of the process, the rest is a natural ebb and flow of creativity. Today you write five thousand words, tomorrow you write three. Not three thousand, just three. Don’t fret. Go with the flow and the story will be done with the story is done. Not before.

I suppose I could go on and on, but I should probably stop here. I could get into the real nitty-gritty of writing. Of how you will end up cutting yourself off from normal society, locking yourself up for weeks at a time, pounding away at the keyboard like a frustrated donkey on crack until you deliver your baby into the world screaming and crying and covered in blood, most of it yours … but you don’t want to hear about that. Do you?

Write well, and take care.

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 Synopsis for The Cold Beneath:

In the race to the North Pole, who will become the victor, and who will fall to the ravages of the Cold Beneath?

Phillip Syntax is the world’s best biomechanic with a checkered past of betrayal and lost love. When given a chance at redemption by the celebrated soldier Gideon Lightbridge, how can he refuse? This ill-fated expedition turns from daring to disastrous when their airship, the Northern Fancy, crashes in the far and frozen north, leaving the crew stranded without hope.
But that isn’t the worst of it.

One by one the dead crew members arise from the cold ashes to seek the warmth of the living, and it becomes every man for himself in an effort not to join the ranks of the revenants.

 

 

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I chose to read this book after hearing some of my students talk about its unique point of view. This historical fiction novel shows readers the Holocaust from the point of view of a child who doesn’t fully understand it. We might consider the narrator and protagonist to be “special” or “slow.” He operates on a different wavelength than the rest of humanity—ignorant or innocent, depending on your outlook. His names throughout the novel (because the orphan never learned his real name), include “Stopthief” and “Misha.” Other characters refer to him as “runt,” “stupid,” “silly,” “cuckoo” and other names to help provide clues to the reader about Misha’s state of mind vis a vis the rest of society.

Misha (it’s what I’ll call him) reminds me of Isaac Bashevis Singer’s “Gimpel the Fool” in his noble innocence and in the way the reader questions exactly what Misha knows/understands and what he chooses to see beyond. For example, Misha is tiny enough to sneak out of the ghetto, which he does nightly. He returns every night, though, bringing food to his friends and (adoptive) family. When asked why he doesn’t simply run away from the ghetto, Misha admits it’s a question he cannot answer. Like “Gimpel the Fool,” Milkweed never makes it completely clear what Misha’s motives are. Is it complete ignorance? Is it the qualities of an anti-hero? Is it simply innocence that allows him to see the best sides of all people? Neither Gimpel the Fool nor Misha are willing to question much about what they are told. In Milkweed, however, even Misha cannot completely forgive the Nazis, illustrating the horror of their deeds.

When the story begins, Misha admires the “Jackboots,” the Nazis who have been trained to walk in perfect precision with their shiny boots. Misha enjoys well-defined tasks (such as standing at attention), and walking like a Nazi is right up his alley, so their robot-like ways appeal to him. He even tells everyone that he wants to be a Jackboot one day. An orphan, Misha is often asked whether he is a Jew. He does not understand the question: he knows that Jews are people with beards who get to have their naked bodies painted with yellow paint (which he admits sounds fun), or have to use their long beards to mop the sidewalk while a crowd of onlookers laughs. More than once, Misha comments that he is not a Jew—and is glad he is not one. His simple innocence is not his personal judgment of Jews; rather, it is a reflection of the stereotypical beliefs of the time period. Instead, he tells everyone he is a Gypsy. At one point, a friend makes up a cover story for him, complete with details about Misha’s siblings, parents, grandparents, and family history. Misha loves adopting this identity, reciting the story to himself and others almost to the point of obsession. He also “adopts” a sister, whom he coaches in the ways of sneaking and stealing. Though it’s a novel about the Holocaust, it’s also Misha’s own search for an identity. As he grows, he realizes the Jackboots are not what he thought, and he decides he hates them. In the end, we are left with the story of Misha as an adult, though the ending comes quickly and glosses over much of Misha’s life. I won’t give away the details, but it’s this last part that, for me, solidifies the connection to “Gimpel the Fool.”

From a writer’s perspective, I enjoyed the book’s unique point of view. The naïve viewpoint is an interesting perspective to examine the difficult topic of the Holocaust. Though it does cause a sort of distance between the narrator and the reader (the same way I felt when reading “Gimpel the Fool”), it allows for insight through repeated motifs that bring meaning to the story. For example, Misha synthesizes people’s beliefs about heaven and life, concluding that there are invisible forces that take away dead bodies (those who have died of starvation or death and are covered with newspapers, only to be gone the next day). He’s also told different ideas about the human soul, such as what happens after death and what part of us lives on. Misha concludes that there are angels all around us, invisible angels. When Misha watches people die, he squints hard, trying to see the angels coming out of their bodies. Such motifs are repeated effectively throughout the novel, making it poignant at times despite the morbid outlook of the rest of the book. At other times, Misha’s viewpoint offers imagery that is gruesome, yet because we only hear it from Misha’s point of view, a younger reader may not entirely understand exactly what it is Misha is describing (I think this makes it more chilling!). It was a fast, engaging read—I read it in a few hours while stuck at the airport one day—that treats the difficult topic of the Holocaust in a new and engaging way.

Chapter 8 of the continuing saga of Remy comes to us from Deborah Dera. Deborah traditionally ghostwrites articles and stories but is in the process of finishing up her first eBook to be released on the Kindle platform later this month. Keep your eyes peeled!

Next week’s chapter will come from RC Bonitz, author of A LITTLE BIT OF BLACKMAIL and A BLANKET FOR HER HEART, both available from Amazon or B&N. He’s looking forward to the release of A LITTLE BIT OF BABY, due in September.

The Spot Writers’ blogs appear at the end of this story. Don’t forget to check them out.

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CHAPTER 8

It’s not what you think.

This time the text message was from Jeremy. Remy sighed. Part of her wanted to answer him and find out what was really going on, but part of her was scared. What if Barbara really was the one sending the text messages? Their brief encounter the morning before was certainly enough to show Remy she leaned a bit towards the unstable side of life. But still – how had she gotten her number? From Jeremy? Had he let his guard down around someone he seemed to have such a dislike for? Had she gotten into his phone?

Please answer me.

Remy considered it, but left her phone on the counter in favor of a shower. She certainly didn’t owe Jeremy anything. Saturday mornings in the office were the busiest and she knew Irene would be out sick again. Remy would have to deal with the chaos of the Saturday morning routine and the awkwardness of Dr. Kendrick by herself.

As Remy basked in the shower steam and enjoyed the hot water cascading down her back, she couldn’t help but think back to her time out with Sam – no, no, Dr. Kendrick – the night before. She thought about his demanding demeanor in the office – his pride and joy – and then her thoughts drifted to his infectious smile and the genuine concern he had shown her the night before. Maybe he really had invited her to his place with nothing but honorable, protective intentions. Maybe Remy wouldn’t have minded if he had wanted more.

Shaking the thoughts from her head, Remy turned the shower off and grabbed her favorite fluffy towel. Wrapping herself snugly, she padded towards the kitchen and the aroma of freshly brewed coffee. Just as she put the pot back on the warmer, her phone buzzed again.

I’m really sorry about Barbara. I hope she’s not bothering you. I’d really like to explain.

Shaking her head, Remy grabbed her coffee and headed back towards her bedroom. She pulled out her most comfortable pair of scrubs and quickly dressed while thinking about the phone.

Why won’t he stop texting me? Why is he being so persistent? She struggled with the idea of a man she’d known for less than two days feeling as though he urgently needed to explain himself to her.

Remy considered turning the phone off and leaving it home. What if she leaves me another threat, though, and I don’t know what it is? The thought was intimidating and Remy suddenly wished she had been able to convince Allison and Sarah to take the self-defense class she was too chicken to take on her own.

Gathering her jacket and purse, Remy headed towards the kitchen one last time. She reached to throw the cursed phone into her purse as another text came through.

Can I at least come in for a cup of coffee before you leave?

Come in, she thought? Coffee? What? How does he… And that’s when Remy realized the magnitude of her problem. She quietly snuck up to her front door and looked out the peephole, a wave of déjà vu washing over her. This time she didn’t see Barbara. This time it was Jeremy – alone – sitting on the stoop directly in front of her door.

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Catherine A. MacKenzie

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Jessica Degarmo

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RC Bonitz

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Val Muller

https://valmuller.com/blog

Deborah Dera

http://www.deborahdera.com

I heard great things about this book, and it’s as good as people say. Though it’s over 400 pages, it’s a fast read. It’s told in first-person point of view using present tense, which is usually something I dislike, but it worked well here.

At first, the premise of the book was a little hard to swallow, but I was quickly pulled into the world of factions. The book begins with a coming-of-age event—young adults in each faction must choose whether to stay in their current factions or become initiates in one of the other four factions. Each faction is similar to a tribe, embracing the qualities for which the factions were named: Amity, Candor, Abnegation, Dauntless, or Erudite. Beatrice (aka Trice), a member of Abnegation, has learned she is Divergent—in other words, she doesn’t fit neatly into just one of the factions. I won’t give away any more of the story. But it’s filled with action, reflection, friendship, love, loss…

Stylistically it’s a light read, but the content is anything but light. While Trice has to navigate the difficult initiation process, she also discovers there’s a more sinister plot afoot, with factions threatening to join forces and start wars. The imagery is just enough to paint the outlines of a picture while allowing the reader to fill in the rest: I never felt bogged down by descriptions. Many of the chapters are shorter, leading to the need-to-go-to-bed problem of just-one-more-chapter-before-lights-out.

The book will appeal to young adults and adults alike. Some of the elements reminded me of The Giver, one of my favorite books. Others reminded me of The Hunger Games, though I liked the voice of Divergent better. While I thought the premise of The Hunger Games was more believable, I found more connections to our life in Divergent. Let me explain.

On one level, the book is an adventure story. On another level, it’s a dystopia. On yet another level, the book can actually be read as an allegory for the way we live. The factions in the book are designed to control people with a tribal mentality—“faction before blood” is repeated often. Anyone who joins the Dauntless faction, for example, is expected to be brave, get tattoos, use violence to solve problems. Anyone in Abnegation is expected to dress plainly and put the needs of others above the needs of oneself. But a member of Abnegation is not expected to be brave, and a member of Dauntless is not expected to be selfless. Those who are Divergent are able to use traits from multiple factions to become a more balanced (and more successful) human being. Faction leaders see this as dangerous because thinking and acting for oneself makes a citizen harder to control. When I first started reading, I thought the idea of such diametrically-opposed factions was ridiculous. But the more I read, the more I realized it wasn’t as far-fetched as might be thought.

The obvious connection I see if in our country’s two-party political system, which leads to a pep-rally mentality: it’s “us” versus “them.” If members of both parties would compromise, our country would be much more successful. If Republican citizens would recognize the merit of Democrats’ ideas, and Democrats would recognize the merits of Republicans’ ideas, we could have more open discussions, pointing out problems in the government (i.e., corruption, unintended consequences, weaknesses) rather than aiming our efforts at attacking each other. The same thing happens in Divergent. Citizens are not supposed to question the fact that there are factions in the first place. Instead, they are to focus their energies on disliking or making fun of other factions. It’s only people like Trice who can step back and think critically about the flaws of the system rather than be brainwashed into becoming a mindless pawn who acts like a high school student during the Homecoming game. Definitely food for thought.

I usually don’t provide a rating on my blog reviews, but this book deserves five stars out of five. It’s a fast read, and I recommend it!

Chapter 7 of the continuing saga of Remy comes to us from Cathy MacKenzie. Check out her three books of short stories available on Smashwords for only $1.99 and $0.99. https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/camack.There you can read the first story in each book for free. However, the stories are all different, so the sample stories aren’t a true representation of the other stories.

Next week’s chapter will come from Deborah Dera. Deborah has just recently joined the Spot Writers, and Chapter 8 will be her first contribution to the group.

 

CHAPTER 7

“No, I’d just like to go home, if you don’t mind.” Sam stared at her.

Remy saw his face change from an inquisitive, hopeful expression to one of mild displeasure, but she didn’t care. Things were getting out of hand – or they might – if she didn’t get home. Unknown texters and callers be damned. She felt safe in her condo. There were twelve units in her building, so it wasn’t like she was totally alone. She’d double-bolt the door. Yes, she’d be fine. She’d keep her cell phone close. She could dial 9-1-1 quickly.

“Okay, then, let’s go,” Sam said. He motioned for the waitress to bring the bill.

Once outside, Remy let out a repressed sigh. The fresh air felt cool on her face, which she knew was flushed from the extra drink. Sam was right; they were the best Long Island Iced Teas she had tasted. Usually she stuck to white wine, so the change was good.

Eleven unknown text messages? Remy repeated the words over and over in her head during the drive home. Who would have done that? Surely it wasn’t Barbara. They had just met, and Barbara really had nothing to fear from her, although, of course, Barbara couldn’t know that. Remy glanced at her watch. It was after ten. She felt Sam’s gaze upon her, but ignored him. As much as she had enjoyed the evening, she wished she hadn’t gone out with him. He was her boss, after all, and their relationship should remain totally professional. Even though nothing untoward happened, it would be hard to remain focused the next day. In fact, work would be forever awkward. She’d always sense him watching her, wanting her. She knew his type. Why oh why did I go with him? Remy let out a huge sigh. “Don’t poop where you eat.” She tried to remember where she had heard that quote.

“Hey, you okay?”

“Oh, yes. Fine. Thanks.”

“My offer still stands. You’re welcome to spend the night at my place. I have a guest bedroom. I promise you’ll be safe.”

“No, really, I’m good.”

“Okay, then.” When he pulled in front of Remy’s building, she grabbed her purse from the floor and opened the door.

“Thanks for dinner. And the drinks.”

“Maybe I should come in with you. Just make sure everything is okay,” Sam said.

“No, really. I’m fine. I have my keys right here. The lights are on. Thanks again,” she said, just before shutting the door. She bent down and gave Sam a wave. Yikes, what am I thinking? I didn’t need to wave at him. Childish.

At home, she plopped on the couch and read through the messages again. Unreal. Quickly, she deleted them – all except Jeremy’s message. She wasn’t sure why she didn’t delete that one, but for some reason she wanted to keep it.

Sorry. We can talk when you get back.

It sounded genuine, but emails are open to interpretation. Without hesitating, she hit the delete button. He had Barbara. And a baby on the way. She didn’t want to be involved in something disgusting like that.

Yes, it is disgusting, as harsh as that sounds, she thought. Remy had morals; having a baby out-of-wedlock was not part of her life’s plan.

Later, in bed, while tossing and turning, all sorts of thoughts drifted through her head. She rehashed the evening with Sam – no, Dr. Kendrick. She had to keep their relationship professional. Thus far, it was just one teeny indiscretion: an evening out. One evening out of her lifetime, and there wouldn’t be any more with him.

Olympia Dukakis, that’s who it is. The name came her like a thunderbolt crashing out of a clear blue sky. “Don’t poop where you eat.” Remy loved that expression and wished she had heeded it.

Jeremy flashed in front of her, as well. Then a screaming baby. And a cranky wife – Barbara. She dreamt of being at their wedding. She was the maid of honor, standing at the altar with two of Barbara’s friends, watching as a young boy dressed in white wheeled in their baby daughter sleeping soundly in a white plush wagon.

After the ceremony, she kissed the bride and the groom and offered her congratulations. When her lips brushed across Jeremy’s cheek, she bolted upright to see the sun streaming through the slightly parted drapes, like it was attacking her face. She rubbed her eyes and looked at the clock. Two minutes to seven. Two more minutes until the alarm blasted. She reached over and turned it to the off position.

What a nightmare.

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Book Review: A Blanket for Her Heart by RC Bonitz

This is a sweet romance involving two middle-aged characters who carry their own baggage. The main female, Anne, has only one hand—she lost it in an accident caused by her alcoholic mother years back. Her past has left her scarred—both literally and emotionally—to the point that she has become a recluse, finding comfort in the solitude of her house, her garden, and her furniture restoration workshop. Paul, the main male protagonist, has a heart-breaking past all his own (I won’t ruin surprises here). The two meet after Paul has a bicycle accident near Anne’s house. The romance is an unlikely one: the child-like Anne refuses to emerge from her shell initially, but Paul’s determination to help her is unwavering.

I won’t include any spoilers, but I’ll only say that I enjoyed the book even though some of the characters frustrated me. But that is the mark of a good book: no one in the world is perfect, and these characters’ flaws made them three-dimensional and real. At times I wanted to jump into the book and shout at Anne, telling her it’s okay to leave her house. Paul, too, had some stubbornness that I wanted to shake out of him.

From a writer’s point of view, I enjoyed the use of alternating perspectives to provide a better understanding of Anne, Paul, and some of the other characters, as well as to add suspense.  I also enjoyed the many foil characters, designed to show us (and Anne) the different ways of living; the symbols and character histories designed to enrich our understanding of the plot; and the full-circle ending (which I will not spoil). I will note that the ending took guts to write, but it fit the rest of the story well. The book is well-written and a fast read. It’s a book full of drama, for those who like that kind of thing, and sweet romance that never becomes annoying or unbelievable. A great beach read (which is where I read it!) for fans of sweet romance and drama.