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Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for this month is to write a dramatic scene. Your heroine is alone in a house someone is breaking into. Today’s contribution comes from Val Muller, author of THE SCARRED LETTER and the CORGI CAPERS kidlit mystery series. The story below takes a unique twist on the idea of an “intruder” and challenges Courtney Hollinger, sister of Corgi Capers’ main protagonist.

 

Cold

By Val Muller

“Don’t forget to leave the sink dripping,” Mom said.

Dad smiled. “Wouldn’t want the pipes to burst.”

Courtney smiled back. “Don’t worry. I’ll protect the house.”

“And if anything happens, call Arabella or Cassie. They know we’ll be gone for the night, and we’ve asked them to look in on you.”

“I’m in seventh grade already. I can take care of myself.”

“Seventh grade isn’t that old, young lady. Remember, no going out. Let the dogs out once or twice, but that’s it. And no visitors.”

“Yes, Mom.”

Finally, finally, they left. Courtney watched them from the front window. She couldn’t wait. She had the entire night planned—a movie marathon coupled with a chat session with her friends. And she could text Dave all night, too. She was finally being treated like an adult.

But that was all. She was turning over a new leaf. Her parents finally trusted her, finally un-grounded her. So no sneaking out, no inviting anyone over. Just watching movies with the volume as loud as she wanted, eating whatever she wanted, and having the peace and quiet of being away from her brother.

It would be like being a grown-up. It was going to be awesome.

And then, when Mom and Dad returned in the morning and saw the house was still standing the dogs were fed and happy, they’d trust her even more. Never too early to start thinking about driving—only a few years away!

The kitchen sink was set to drip—last year the pipes had frozen along the outside wall. They hadn’t burst, luckily, but there were so many stories in the news with this recent cold snap. It was the reason they were letting Courtney stay by herself. She was supposed to keep the taps dripping and the thermostat turned up. And, in case anything happened, she knew where the main water shut-off was, and she had her parents’ cell phone numbers memorized. Mom’s presentation wasn’t until the morning, so she could call them whenever she wanted.

Not that she would need to.

She settled into the recliner—Dad’s recliner. She set up Mom’s laptop on the end table, plugged in her phone charger, opened a bag of popcorn, and pulled a blanket up over her. Breaking small rules didn’t matter. Dad would never know she was eating in his chair, and Mom wouldn’t miss her laptop tonight. She smirked and broke one final rule. “Come on, Sapphie,” she said to her dog. “You can sit up here with me.”

Sapphie took a running leap without even thinking, burrowing into the forbidden comfort of the recliner. Adam’s dog yelped and hid under the couch. “Poor Zeph,” Courtney said. “Too bad Adam couldn’t have taken you to his sleepover.”

Courtney shoved a handful of popcorn into her mouth and pushed “play” on the DVR. The first movie started playing just as a text from Dave came in. She signed onto Facebook and posted on her friends’ walls. She didn’t have to worry for once about a parent peeking over her shoulder. She could talk about whatever she wanted, using whatever language she wanted to. She giggled; she could even fart right there in her father’s recliner and no one to reprimand her.

It was everything she expected, everything she hoped. Living like a grown-up was awesome.

Halfway through the bag of popcorn and the movie, the microwave oven beeped. The lights went out.

“What the—?”

Sapphie and Zeph barked in alarm, sensing her tension. She picked up her cell phone. The pale moon outside did little to light the way.

“It’s okay, dogs,” she whispered. She hoped.

“Power out,” she texted to Dave.

“Yeah, me too,” he responded. “Sux. Guess I’ll go hibernate until it comes back on. Gonna get cold with no heat.”

And he was gone, just like that.

And then Courtney shivered. Cold with no heat. With no heat, how would she keep the pipes from freezing? In the kitchen above, she heard the refrigerator turn on. Why weren’t the rest of the lights coming on, too?

Then she remembered: Dad had wired their generator to come on automatically to run the refrigerator. She thought about calling Mom and Dad. They hadn’t been gone that long. Maybe they would come back. Besides, this was Mom’s conference. They had already talked about Mom going by herself and Dad staying behind. Maybe he could come back now.

She looked at her list of contacts, ready to push the button for Dad’s phone, but she shook her head. Sure, she was only in seventh grade, but that was pretty old. She could handle this on her own.

Outside, the wind howled. She must not have heard it over the movie’s volume, but it was raging. It pressed against the windows, making them creak. It lashed against the shutters and whipped through the trees. She remembered being a little kid, all wrapped in a comforter in bed and hearing these same noises. How comforting it had been all those years ago, wrapped up tight with Mom and Dad downstairs to protect her.

Now she was on her own. No one to protect her—and assigned to look after the dogs and the house. And all those chips on her shoulder.

She ran up to the kitchen. The faucet was still dripping. That’s right—water and phone lines were on a different system than electricity. She remembered Mom saying something about that. She pulled the faucet, making the stream of water more steady. Less chance of freezing that way.

But what about the plunging temperatures? A quick trip outside with the dogs proved that the wind was bringing with it a cold front, an arctic blast whose icy grip reached into the ground and into pipes and water lines and flesh.

Courtney shuddered and hurried back inside. She touched the exterior kitchen wall. It felt cold. This was no good. She picked up her phone again, ready to call Dad.

But no. She could handle this on her own. If the refrigerator ran off the generator, then certainly a space heater could as well. Some of the sockets in the kitchen still had to be electrified. It was only a matter of finding which ones…

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The next morning, she awoke to the sounds of dogs barking. They scampered happily down the stairs as Courtney sat up. Her sleeping bag pooled around her, and she looked up at the kitchen sink. It was still dripping. The space heater was still spinning, directed at the cabinet under the sink. She’d stayed up most of the night, checking the pipes and making sure the space heater wasn’t about to catch on fire. It was the most exhausting night she’d ever spent.

The clock on the microwave blinked, letting her know the power was back on. She looked up in time to see Dad coming into the kitchen.

“What happened?” he asked. “Did you sleep in the kitchen?”

Courtney rubbed her head and shrugged. “Power was out,” she said. “Had to keep the pipes from freezing.”

Dad helped her up, and she trudged upstairs to shower.

“We’re proud of you,” Dad called up the stairs, “working so hard to protect the house.”

“Yeah,” Courtney whispered to herself. “Be proud all you want. Being a grown-up sucks.”

 

The Spot Writers–our members:

 

 RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

 

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

 

Catherine A. MacKenzie: http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

 

Kathy Price: http://www.kathylprice.com

 

February is Women in Horror month. As a writer who sometimes leans toward the “dark,” I was excited to hear this. Since being addicted to Scary Stories to Tell in the Dark (a gateway book to other horror), I have been a fan of the macabre.

I’ve come across an IndiGoGo campaign for a horror anthology penned solely by women. It’s going to be published by Dark Regions Press, and they’ve got a great lineup of authors so far!

It’s called Dreams from the Witch House: Women of Lovecraft. Lovecraftian horror is the kind I like–it’s not gruesome, and it doesn’t focus on gore or explicit material for its own sake; rather, it focuses on psychological horror and things like ancient demons hiding in the Earth. If you’re a fan of horror, check out the campaign here. You can pre-order copies and find all kinds of other perks, too (not to mention, you can take a look at the awesome artwork). The campaign is open until March 1.

I’ve only just discovered this anthology and am excited to see they are accepting submissions from female horror writers. Maybe I’ll channel my dark side and write something 🙂


Faulkner's ApprenticeIf you enjoy women in horror, you might like my supernatural thriller Faulkner’s Apprentice. You can purchase the ebook for just $2.99 at Amazon.com and wherever ebooks are sold! It’s the story of an aspiring writer plagued by the bad man who offers her deepest desires–as long as she is willing to pay whatever he asks.

Warning: this is a horror novel with explicit content and best suited for mature readers and fans of the horror genre.

Dark Hollow was recommended to me by a Facebook friend, who said he could not put the book down. I see why. Keene’s novel is a fun read for fans of horror. It follows a writer named Adam who is stuck in his Pennsylvania neighborhood trying to write his next big seller. But his wife has been having miscarriages, and their marriage is strained. Beyond that, women are disappearing into the woods, and men are found murdered.

Minor spoilers appear in only the next paragraph.

As Adam investigates the mystery, he finds a satyr in the woods doing unwholesome things with one of the local women. And when the satyr plays his magical pipes, the entire population comes down with spring fever. I especially enjoyed the imagery describing the satyr, despite how gruesome it was.

(End of spoilers)

I enjoyed how the author wove in elements of mythology with elements of the protagonist’s life to give the plot more personal relevance to the character. I love being scared, and this book definitely did that. Though parts of it were a bit gruesome, especially at the end, I enjoyed how the book built slowly, focusing on psychological horror rather than simply physical gore. I could see this book being made into a great movie.

I recommend it wholeheartedly for fans of the horror genre.

It’s Friday the 13th, and speaking of scary, I’ve been interviewed by Loudoun County Public Schools for their “Writers Block” feature! Growing up, I always thought watching myself on film was the scariest thing in the universe. Looking back on the interview, though, I actually had a bit of fun.

I’d like to thank Tonya Dagstani for interviewing me–and Loudoun County Schools for providing this opportunity. The Scarred Letter has been chosen as one of this year’s Battle of the Books selections, and I look forward to the competition!

Writers Block – Valerie Egger from LCPS-TV on Vimeo.


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Learn more about the novel here!

Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for this month is to write a dramatic scene. Your heroine is alone in a house someone is breaking into. Today’s contribution comes from RC Bonitz, author of A BLANKET FOR HER HEART.

 

HER BACK INTO IT

by RC Bonitz

 

Moonlight cut between the heavy curtains, making a spear of faint gray light across the floor. Darkness, black and deep, clothed the rest of the room. Nel liked it that way. Light kept her awake.

She stirred and opened an eye. Was that a noise downstairs? Ever since Tom died last month she’d been as jumpy as a feral cat. Rolling over in the bed, she closed her eyes again. She had to settle down at night, this wakefulness could not go on. Nerves, that’s all it was, an old woman’s agitated nerves.

Squeak. Nel sat bolt upright in her bed. That was definitely a real sound, not imagination, a door, the back door opening? What else could it be? She shivered in the darkness, strained her ears to hear. A whisper of a wind parted the curtains. Gray light filtered through the room for just a moment and then the curtain closed again. Completely.

She waited, daring not to breathe. Faint, there it was, something in the kitchen down below her. Something, someone moving in her house. A animal? A thief? Or worse?

Fingers fumbling, she reached for the bedside phone. Picked it up, keyed it in the dark. Silence. No dial tone? How could that be? Her hand shook. Whoever it was, he was, he wanted to make sure she couldn’t call for help. Where was her cell phone? Downstairs in her purse! In the kitchen where he was. Oh God, why had she been so careless.

A floorboard creaked, and then another. He was heading for the stairs. Who knew her house so well? Someone she knew? Someone who’d kill to silence her after he got his kicks. Her stomach knotted, sweat broke out, she had to keep herself together. If she only had a gun.

A stair creaked, he was coming up. The bat! The old bat they used to play softball with at family picnics.

Nel slipped out of bed and felt around beneath the box spring. Nothing but carpet. Where the dickens was it. She leaned down, shoved her arm further under the bed. A creak on the stairs. He was coming. Finally. Her fingers closed around the bat.

Another stair gave out a warning. Near the top now, coming for her. What could she do, a frail old woman with a heavy baseball bat. Tom’s words came out of nowhere,, from a softball game so many years ago, ‘put your back into it, Nel’. She stood up beside the door, bat ready, shaking, waiting.

One more creak, the top step now. She held her breath. The door jerked, a stick of light from the hall crept in. The door flew open, banged against the wall. His breathing followed, hard and fast, as he stepped into the room.

She put her back into it.


 

 

The Spot Writers–our members:

 

 RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

 

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

 

Catherine A. MacKenzie: http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

 

Kathy Price: http://www.kathylprice.com

 

Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for this month is to use the following five words in a story: candy, whistle, ferry, ring, and kitchen. This week’s contribution is by Kathy L. Price.

 

Childhood Dreams

by Kathy L. Price

 

She blew into the candy whistle again and again, enjoying the high-pitched sound as well as the delicious taste. If she closed her eyes, she could pretend to hear the seagulls and smell the salty air of the sound.

“Kathy,” her mother called from the kitchen. “Stop that or I’ll take it away from you. Have you finished your homework yet?”

Kathy quit blowing into the whistle but kept it in her mouth, savoring the sweet, cherry flavor. It wasn’t long before the candy had dissolved so much there was no whistle left. That was a huge disappointment because she’d been pretending she was riding on the big ferry which carried them across the water from Fort Myers to the islands. Daydreaming about sunny skies, warm sun, and sand between her toes was a lot more fun than doing math homework.

The two weeks they spent on Sanibel and Captiva every summer, barrier islands off the west coast of Florida, were the absolute best of the whole year. She got to play on the beach every day. She got to see real live dolphins swimming in the ocean; collect perfect, pretty shells which were just lying all over the sand; wade in the water and pretend she was a mermaid. She knew when she was old enough, she was going to get a job at Weeki Wachee Springs and be a real mermaid. Mermaids didn’t need to know anything at all about math. Or maybe she’d be a water skier at Cypress Gardens. There were so many possibilities.

The years passed and the dreams changed. A bridge was built to connect Sanibel Island to the mainland and the ferry service was discontinued. At fourteen, Kathy and her family moved to California, a long, long way from Weeki Wachee Springs. College graduation, marriage, and children of her own changed the course of her life. Many years later, when her little boy blew into his candy whistle, she remembered the ferry and the childhood dreams long dead. She didn’t tell him to stop. She let him blow his whistle for as long as he wanted.

 

 

 

The Spot Writers–our members:

 

RC Bonitz: http://www.rcbonitz.com

 

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Kathy Price: http://www.kathylprice.com

 

 

This book follows Alexa, a lawyer who moved from New York City back to her roots in Pennsylvania, where she lives in her family’s cabin in the woods. Aside from being a lawyer, she volunteers at a women’s clinic that has been the target of increasing heat and violence because one of the services it provides is abortions.

In the midst of it all, Alexa finds a dead body in the woods while walking her dog (a gentle giant!). The seemingly random event seems not to be so random after all, and Alexa spends the rest of the novel dealing with the repercussions of it while trying to help solve the murder.

I especially enjoyed the author’s description of setting. I felt like I was actually there in the woods, and I longed for it to be autumn (and me to have a free moment to go for a hike with Alexa, who seems like she would be a really good tour guide). I enjoyed experiencing the location in the woods that holds a church, once the site of part of the Underground Railroad. Yes, during these moments I felt like I was experiencing, rather than reading about, the setting. And frankly, it made me nostalgic!

I also enjoyed the relationships Alexa has with her brother, coworkers, fellow clinic workers, and the men in her life. And as a dog lover, I could see how Alexa’s dog could be such a comfort during such times. Several interchapters follow a group of young siblings from the 1930s who were murdered by their father because of hardships from the Great Depression. This legend is told by Alexa and shown through these interchapters, and the legend is tied in to the story (as the girls are buried near Alexa’s cabin). The only thing I craved a little more of was Alexa’s life as a lawyer. Since I know little about the day-to-day life of lawyers, I would have liked just a bit more of a glimpse into that aspect of her life.

But don’t get me wrong—there is plenty about Alexa’s life to keep a reader engaged. In fact, I read the entire book in three sittings—the final sitting encompassed literally the last half of the book. The tension in the plot built until the end. And even though a bit of romance was involved, it never really detracted from the plot or got cheesy (though it does raise the age range of readers of the book). When I found out that Knowlton was writing a sequel to this story, I knew I’d be adding it to my “to be read” list.

I recommend this book to anyone who loves mysteries or rural Pennsylvania. Alexa does have a pro-choice stance, and there is a group of gun-crazy religious wackos in the book as well as a few sex scenes (not super explicit, though), so sensitive readers beware.

I worked with the author, Sherry Knowlton, while I was teaching a class through Pennwriters, a Pennsylvania-based writers’ group. I had read just a few chapters of this book that she had been working on during the class. When I heard that the novel she had been working on for my class, Dead of Autumn, found a publisher, I had to read it! Though probably not necessary, I did want to include this disclaimer. However, I only post books on this blog that I have enjoyed (if I don’t enjoy a book, I generally don’t post about it!), so the opinion expressed in the above review is honest and is my own.

 

Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for this month is to use the following five words in a story: candy, whistle, ferry, ring, and kitchen.

Today’s contribution comes from Cathy MacKenzie. Check out her books on Smashwords at https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/camack.

(Cathy’s print books are available on Amazon/Create Space, and e-books are also available on Kindle.)

 

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Night Intruder

by Cathy MacKenzie

 

In the distance, Shelly heard the shriek of the ferry’s whistle. Tom, her husband, had been an employee of White Sail Ferry Company for many years, so she was aware of the difference between the alarm bell, which served to alert crew inside the ship, and the whistle, which warned those beyond the cabin area.

She had never heard the ferry while she had been in the house and never had it awoken her from a deep sleep. She lay in bed and rubbed her eyes. Could it have been a dream? No, she was certain she heard it. She hadn’t slept soundly for the past couple of weeks, not since Tom died.

A tear plopped to the pillow. She wished she hadn’t buried him with his ring still on his finger. Women often kept their spouses’ wedding bands, either wearing them from a chain hanging from their necks or wearing them on their fingers. Her own mother wore her husband’s ring on her thumb.

When a noise, sounding like it came from the kitchen, startled her, she stifled a scream. She dried her face with the edge of the bed sheet and listened.

She got up, slipped on her housecoat and slippers, and crept down the hall. Darkness overwhelmed her. She tried to remain calm. But what was it? How she wished Tom were still alive. He’d protect her. He’d tell her to stay in bed or hide in the closet if he thought danger existed. But Tom wasn’t alive any longer.

When she reached the end of the hall, she paused. A dim light shone on the stainless steel refrigerator. The glow reminded her of the headlights from Tom’s truck when he used to pull into the driveway at night.

She advanced a couple of paces and stopped again. What was it? A sound like papers crinkling. Mice, she thought. She’d always been careful to seal foodstuff into jars or store food in the refrigerator. Tom had thought she was crazy, but one never knew when bugs might come out of hiding. Or a mouse.

“We had mice once you know,” she had told him.

Tom had laughed before hugging her tight. “You’re a silly woman, but I don’t want to let you go.”

“Then don’t let me go,” she had said.

But he had let her go. Without warning, he had loosened his grip on life, leaving her to fend alone just as she found herself that night—alone to contend with whatever had intruded into the kitchen.

She rubbed her eyes again. Despite having gone to bed before eleven and immediately falling asleep, she hadn’t slept well. She wished she hadn’t heard the noise, whatever it was, for surely it was nothing, simply a false alarm, something to cause haywire to her adrenaline and make her heart beat uncontrollably.

Just before she took another step, she heard rustling again. Candy, she was certain. She had left a bowl of wrapped caramels on the counter instead of sticking the bowl in the fridge. Mice, she thought. I can handle a home invader more than I can a creepy critter that’ll run off and hide until the next opportune moment. She shivered and pulled her robe tighter.

When the moon seeped through the window, she noticed the missing sparkle from her left hand. She had removed her ring and had forgotten to put it back on after washing dishes.

Her heart thumped louder. Certain the intruder or intruders could hear, she pressed her palms against her chest. Someone stealing her ring spurred her toward the kitchen. She would never forgive herself if it were stolen. The band of diamonds, which served as her engagement and wedding ring, was her main tie to Tom. Again, she wished she had removed his gold band before the burial.

She stomped her feet though the fake fur sole didn’t lend itself to scaring away intruders. She breathed deeply before reaching the kitchen’s archway and flipping on the light. Though the suddenness of the glare blinded her for several seconds, she was positive a whitish shadow floated from the kitchen toward the pantry.

Did she dare follow? She stifled a scream when she realized the alarm hadn’t sounded, which meant an outside door hadn’t opened. How had someone gained entry into the house? No matter how soundly she slept, she’d have heard the tell-tale alarm. And the individual had to still be in the house, for the security system hadn’t sounded at his exit. He had to be in the pantry.

She walked across the kitchen and stepped into the hallway leading to the pantry and the back door. All was quiet. She turned on the light, slithered against the wall, and then peeked around the corner into the pantry.

No looming monster and the exit door was closed.

Puzzled, yet frightened, she returned to the kitchen. The overhead fluorescent light highlighted a crumpled pile of wrappers that lay on the counter. Wrapped caramel candies glittered from the bowl. The crinkled, silver wrappers reminded her of diamonds’ facets. Her ring!

She turned to the sink where she had left her ring the previous night. Her eyes bulged and a scream caught in her throat. Tom’s plain gold wedding band lay beside hers, glowing as if it had recently been polished. She latched to the counter with one hand and touched the ring with her index finger of the other. Warm air swept across her face. She slipped the too-large ring onto her left thumb.

Caramel wafted around her, and her stomach growled. She and Tom had bought a bag of caramels every couple of weeks, allowing themselves one a day. Shelly hadn’t had hers that day. In fact, she hadn’t eaten a candy since Tom’s death.

Curious, she separated the wrappers in the discard pile and counted them: sixteen.

Sixteen long nights had passed since Tom’s death.

She unwrapped a candy and popped it into her mouth. Slowly she chewed and savoured the sweet goodness. Before she knew it, she had her own pile of sixteen wrappers resting beside Tom’s. For it had been Tom, hadn’t it? Who else could have returned his ring? And who else could have played catch-up with the caramels?

 

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The Spot Writers – our members.

 

RC Bonitz

http://www.rcbonitz.com

 

Val Muller

https://valmuller.com/blog/

 

Catherine A. MacKenzie

https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

 

Kathy Price

http://www.kathylprice.com

 

 

Because this book came recommended, I knew I should stick with it even though it didn’t immediately capture my interest. The book is well written, and Hammond’s strength is the way she interweaves her characters together. It certainly is a character-driven story with the plot taking a back seat.

Samson Brown has been taking care of Hannah for over forty years. Hannah is an elephant left to the town by Max L. Biedelman, an adventurous woman who left the elephant to the town—along with a zoo and some other property. The elephant lives in conditions that are barely passable. She is lonely, her foot is injured from being chained for many hours each day and from standing on the concrete floor, and her past has left her nervous. Sam is caring, but like Hannah, he is suffering. The man is diabetic (he has a bleeding ulcer on his foot/leg) and is in no shape to keep taking care of the elephant; he is ready to retire. When I first started reading, I saw that Sam cared about Hannah, but I didn’t understand why. If the book hadn’t been recommended to me, I may have been skeptical and put it down.

I was glad I held out. I won’t reveal Sam’s reasons for being so devoted to the elephant, but they exist. I will mention that the title comes from a dream Sam has repeatedly, a dream he believes he is having through Hannah’s eyes, in which Hannah is running free with other elephants. There was an “aha!” moment in which the author revealed the true reason Hannah is so special to Sam. It came a bit late for my taste, but it hooked me.

There are a handful of other characters. When they are first introduced, we are given little information about their backgrounds and motivations. They all seem quirky and even selfish. But as the story progresses, Hammond delicately weaves in details about their pasts that justify their actions and explain their motivations. Even the nastiest character seems more likeable. The characters come from all walks of life except for adolescence. Unlike young adult books, these characters have all had pasts (containing various degrees of pain) that have shaped the way they become as adults. That was the dimension I enjoyed the most from this book.

Have you ever met someone who seems miserable, or detestable, and wonder how he or she “got” that way? This book opened my eyes to the characters, bringing sympathy grown from understanding. The book seems to send the message that we have all had a past, and the past cannot be helped. The past, for better or for worse, will shape our present and future, and it’s up to us to decide to what extent.

I mentioned this was a character-driven novel. Although I enjoyed the plot, I felt the ending came too easily, and the suspense built up too late in the book—and never really reached the critical climax. At the end of the book, I wasn’t tearing through pages to see what happened. But it is one of those books that will stick with you for a while, making you consider elements of your own life and the lives of those around you. Hammond provides a great perspective on life and human interaction—through the care of a beloved elephant.


This book is one of the 2014-15 Loudoun County Battle of the Books selections. The selections are as follows. Since The Scarred Letter was chosen as one of the selections, I will be attending the competition and will also be reading the rest of the selections. Books I’ve reviewed from this list are hyperlinked:

 

 

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This month’s prompt is to write a story using the words candy, whistle, ferry, ring, and kitchen. Today’s story comes to you from Val Muller, author of the young adult novel The Scarred Letter, a modern take on Hawthorne’s original.

The Real Candy Crush Saga

By Val Muller

Melody knew it was a mistake, installing the game. She’d always been obsessed with puzzle games. Growing up, it was Tetris. Sudoku and 2048 had all taken their toll—hours of productivity lost. And a mind-numbing game was just the thing to distract her from her coursework. At this rate, she’d never earn her Masters. She smiled and lovingly cursed her sister for suggesting she install the app.

She put dinner in the over—the rest of the pre-packaged pigs-in-blankets she’d served at Christmas—and then slumped in the kitchen chair, staring at the colorful bits of candy on her screen. As she played the game, they sparkled and then became obliterated as they lined up by color. The music was just as addictive, a slow-paced, whimsical song that belied the looming deadlines: research paper, annotations for her works cited page, and a proposal for her research study.

The game whistled in sorrow. She lost the level for the second time in a row. Where was her mojo? She checked the hotdogs. Two minutes left. Enough time to pass if she was careful.

After losing three lives on the level—those chocolate pieces were the worst—she finally advanced to the next section of the game. But this was a social game, requiring friends to “help” by sending and responding to game requests. To advance to the next level, she needed the help of friends. She frantically flipped through the app’s list of friends who also played the game. Who could she ask? Who wouldn’t think she was crazy for sending a game request through Facebook?

Her sister, of course. After all, Mary had gotten her hooked on the game. She pressed “send.” Ever addicted, Mary responded with the request right away. Melody sighed relief and prepared to play the next round. But no—the game had a message for her. One friend was not enough. She needed to find two more friends to agree to help her get to the next level. As if mocking her, her euphoric character’s avatar hovered over a candy-themed ferry that was ready to set sail on a sugar ocean, taking her to the next level.

She rolled her eyes at her addiction, but she couldn’t break it. Once again, she flipped through the list of players. She selected a few acquaintances from high school, sending them the requests. They were always sending her game requests, after all. Her one and only request wouldn’t bother them, right?

Her phone alarm rang, its ring tone a warning that the hotdogs were ready. The game beeped again. A second person had responded. Rosemary, a girl she remembered from summer camp who had friended her on Facebook last year. Amazing how social media kept her in contact with people who would otherwise have fallen off of her radar.

The hotdogs smelled like they were burning, so she shoved her phone into her pocket to retrieve them from the oven. She set them on a plate to cool and eyed the stack of school books on the counter. They could wait until after dinner. She picked up one of the hotdogs, but it was too hot to eat. She flipped through her phone. Mercifully, a third person had responded. She smiled, promising to allow herself some time to play after dinner.

Who was it? William Thompson. She laughed. He was barely an acquaintance. The two had gone to elementary school together. They hated each other in third grade, and then in sixth grade they dated, briefly, for three days, until he dumped her for a seventh grader. It had scarred her for a week or so, and then she moved on. Silly middle school gossip. Good thing he probably didn’t remember. Come to think of it, had he friended her? She couldn’t imagine she’d have sent him a request.

Her phone beeped with a new message. Apparently, William had sent a personal reply along with his merciful Candy Crush aid.

Here’s some help in the game. I’m addicted too. All the way at Level 81. I know, don’t laugh. It took hours.

She smiled and typed, Thanks.

His reply popped up right away. It was the least I could do after dumping you in sixth grade. What a jerk I was. He punctuated it with a smiley face.

The hotdogs were cool enough to eat, and Melody clicked on William’s name, reading over his profile as she ate. Funny—he still lived in the same county, too. Neither of them had managed to get away. As she finished the last of her meal, she couldn’t help noting his marital status was single. Her eyebrow arched, and a mischievous smile curled across her face. She opened the message window again.

William, she wrote, want to grab dinner sometime? She pushed “send” before she could talk herself out of it. She squealed like a little girl and shoved her phone into the kitchen drawer. She couldn’t bear to read his response. Had she really done that? Even though she was alone, she blushed. Then she grabbed the stack of school books and hurried to her desk. Nothing like nerves to set her mind on studying.

The phone, and her candy crush, could wait until later.

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