Val Muller

The Electronic Wordsmith

This week’s Writer Wednesday features Darcy Town, author of Wastes of Space, a science fiction novel (please note that this book is for adult readers, as it contains mature content). Scroll down to see the giveaway entry form!

Synopsis:

In the early 21st century, the Cold War between the American and Chinese Empires slogs on in a stalemate. There’s a ceasefire in effect, but the peace is artificial—secretly enforced by an alien blockade that surrounds the planet. Earth is caught in a territory struggle between two warring factions: the Empire and the Resistance. Lacking harvestable talents, both groups classify Earthlings as Wasters.

Hidden among the Wasters is an alien girl with the power of moving spaceships. She teams up with Rake, a drug-addicted ex-Astronaut, to join an intergalactic war that Earth did not know existed…but first Rake has to realize he’s travelling with an alien to begin with.

 

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About the Author:

I earned a degree in Comparative Religion, so themes-wise that certainly pops up here and there in my writing (okay, more than a little here and there in some books).

I write what I enjoy reading/watching – which is fantasy/sci-fi with dark humor and a bit of romance. What I consider romance however is to some…a bit off (and kinked out). And when I say dark humor I mean black. But I always have lighthearted moments (I do not believe a story should be all one way or another). Gotta spice things up!

Speaking of…I like to write stories that cater to all sexual preferences in one story. I have your typical male-female romances. I have male-male, female-female, transgender, bi-sexual, etc. This is mostly due to the fact that well…1. I like writing about it. 2. I see it in my everyday life. 3. I like having a well-rounded cast of characters from all walks of life.

I am the author of the Morningstar Trilogy and the Wastes Series.

Guest Post: Who was your biggest supporter while writing your book? Please tell us why.

My biggest supporter?  That would probably be my mother.  She has always encouraged me to go after the things that make me happy and give me a sense of purpose.  She’s always been there to reinforce that truth, especially when things could seem a bit bleak.  She reinforced the belief that the only person’s opinion on the story you’re writing that should truly matter is your own.  A writer should tell their story, the story that they wish to create.  They shouldn’t bend to what is trending, and they shouldn’t be afraid to create new rules or use characters that are not the norm.  I took all that advice and ran with it, and I think a lot of that can be seen in Wastes of Space and Morningstar.

My mother is the first to defend my stories and characters to others (especially the more conservative parts of the family), and she has a remarkably open mind about things.  I use her to bounce ideas off of, which is great if I’m having a bit of writer’s block.

Besides being an emotional supporter, she’s also been invaluable when it comes to the writing portion as well.  She is a lover of sci-fi and has plenty of opinions there, but she also received a Masters degree in English Literature.  Anytime I needed a second opinion on a grammar rule, I’d go to her to discuss it.  We’d both whip out our rulebooks and discuss what the rules really mean.  She made what would normally be boring or troublesome turn in to a fair amount of fun.

All in all she’s helped me through some tough times writing-wise.

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Synopsis for Wastes Away – Book Two:

A split second later in the same galaxy as before, but pretty far away…

Rake and Ravil have escaped Earth and the Empire, towing the rest of their friends and new allies with them. They flee to an abandoned Empire colony known only as Seed Planet 15.

Out of fuel and common sense, they crash and nearly wreck their ship, stranding them in the middle of a seemingly endless swamp. On first glance the place looks mostly harmless, but what they’ve landed on is anything but. Seed Planet 15 has a nasty history.

The planet has more hidden in the mist than just ghosts and rumors. And if the crew doesn’t get off the planet soon, there will be nothing left of them but spare parts and a rusted ship.

 

Synopsis for Waste Not, Want Not – Book Three:

Barely making it off Seed Planet Fifteen with their lives, Rake and the crew are content to hang out and lick their wounds for a while, if it weren’t for the fried wiring and Stalker damage that have left the ship prone to reoccurring blackouts.

Needing supplies for repairs, the crew decides the best course of action is to raid abandoned Ampyr outposts for gear. Smart, no foreseeable problems there.  Except one of the outposts they hit isn’t empty, Lincoln’s personality issues are getting worse, food is going missing, and their Rexos is about to hit puberty and apparently that’s accompanied by uncontrollable rages. As if that wasn’t enough bad news, there seems to be a sentient black hole chasing down Ravil and attempting to eat her.

But not to worry, Danny’s reforming their squad and apparently ranking still flies out in space. No more messing around, things are getting serious. At least seriously screwed up.


Excerpt:

A howl from outside the building woke Ravil up.  Her eyes shot open as goose bumps raced across her skin.  She reached for Rake, but her hands slipped through air.  Another howl came louder than the last, followed by a faint scream.  She stared at her empty outstretched hand as the realization set in—he’d abandoned her.

Ravil slipped out of the tub, kept low to the floor, and held her knife out in front of her.  She reached the hall and crawled towards the windows.  Weak sunlight filtered into the apartment through the grimy glass.  Every fiber of her being told her to go back and hide in the darkness of the bathroom, but she would not wait for death to come to her.  Rake had left her; he’d lied last night.  She held back tears and moved another few inches.  She was on her own now and she would handle it.

The hall creaked.  Ravil froze.

Rake kneeled by her side and whispered into her ear, “Not a sound now, Bebette.”  He held one of her Bowie knives and crawled past her, keeping his head below the level of the windows.  He crept towards the closest and used a piece of mirror to look outside.  His shift in expression made Ravil scoot back into the bathroom.  She climbed into the tub and covered her ears.

The howls and screams continued until they cut off in a definitive silence.  Rake came in some minutes later, his face ashen.  He sat down and looked over at her.  “We cannot walk out on the streets.”

“Wh…why?”

“We just can’t.”  Rake’s hands shook.  He grabbed his left hand with his right and pressed it into the floor; he broke into a sweat.  He took a deep breath.  “It’s not safe.”

“Can’t we run?”

He shook his head.  “Do you want to end up a screamer?”

Ravil sank down below the level of the porcelain.  “What is out there?”

 

This is the first in a series of middle-grade books following two girls, Valerie and Samantha. The girls are best friends, but they are total opposites. Sam is fashion-conscious while Val is not, for example. But their opposites make them good friends, and even Val’s mother shakes her head at the creative games they come up with. In this book, the two girls sneak out to the barn in search of a mysterious possum Val’s mother has been talking about. They follow the possum through a mirror that had been covered in a tarp and find themselves in a mysterious world—the world of Grimm’s Fairy Tales. (I won’t explain the possum; you’ll find out at the end.)

The girls recognize some of the things they encounter, such as a girl named Snow (as in Snow White) and other familiar elements from fairy tales with which Val is familiar. Befriending Snow and some other helpful characters, the girls must navigate the world (and the villains) of fairy tales. It’s definitely a book primarily for girls, as both protagonists are female, and the story focuses on the fairy tales having to do with evil stepmothers and marriages. It’s a clever mix of modern storyline and classic fairy tale, and the author mixes it up enough that it never feels stale. The reader is also kept in suspense during the times when Val and Sam cannot remember certain elements of the tales—remembering them would have helped them solve the problems they encounter much more quickly. This suspense will keep the reader turning the pages. I could see myself having enjoyed these books when I was a girl Val and Sam’s age.  

The narrator is kept a mystery for the first chapter or so, until we learn the narrator is actually the garden gnome that stands watch in Val’s parents’ garden. At times, the narrator’s personality came through, which I found enjoyable. At other times, the narrator’s personality faded into the tale, which disappointed me because I found the gnome’s voice and tone humorous, adding to the story.

Val’s mother also plays an important role in the story. She’s the one who points out the possum in the barn, and she’s been writing a story (that she knows Val and Sam are reading) about Valerie and Samantha going on adventures. It’s even hinted at that the whole tale might be the result of reading Val’s mother’s manuscript and letting their imaginations go wild—though the girls agree that it was all too real to have been simply imagiation.

I received a review copy of this book in exchange for my honest opinion. All opinions expressed in this review are my own. I’m reviewing the other two books as part of a blog tour, so stay tuned for more!

This week’s chapter comes from Cathy MacKenzie. Check out her books of short stories available on Smashwords for only $1.99 and $0.99. https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/camack. Her books of poetry are available there, as well.

 

Next week’s chapter will be written by Deborah Dera. Deborah traditionally ghostwrites articles and stories but is in the process of finishing up her first eBook to be released on the Kindle platform later this year. Keep your eyes peeled!

 

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CHAPTER 21

“Dr. Kendrick – Sam…” Remy averted her head just in time to avoid his leering lips. If she hadn’t had the desk behind her to grab hold of, she was sure she would have landed flat on her back.

“What’s up with you? I’ve been waiting all week for this. You’ve been avoiding me.”

“No, I haven’t. I’m here to work. That’s what I’ve been doing.” Remy, although proud for standing up for herself, wondered if she spoke a bit too gruffly.

“You’re not busy now. I give you permission to stop whatever you’re doing,” Dr. Kendrick said.

“Sam – Dr. Kendrick – we have to talk.” Remy hesitated. Did she dare go further? Did she dare tell a lie? “I’m in a relationship. Besides, you’re my boss. I don’t want to mix pleasure and business. I should have told you that earlier. I’m sorry.”

“You’re in a relationship? Not with that drunken slob from the other day, I hope.”

“He’s not a drunken slob. He’s just been going through a rough patch. And, yes, that’s him. Jeremy is his name.”

“I don’t believe it,” Dr. Kendrick said. “I just don’t believe it. I thought you and I had something special.”

“Sam.” Remy shook her head. “I’m sorry. I want to keep my job. I need to keep my job, but if this keeps up, I’ll have to quit.” She felt braver with each word she spoke.

Dr. Kendrick backed up a foot. His hand waved in the air, like he was shooing away flies, except there were none around. “Okay, okay,” he said, before muttering words Remy couldn’t catch. He stared at her for a moment before turning back toward his office.

Remy slumped to the chair and let her face fall to her hands.

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Remy barely had her condo door shut behind her, when her cell phone rang. She grabbed the phone from her coat pocket to see “caller unknown.”

“Damn.” She had almost forgotten that depraved unknown caller or callers and the text messages. Was he –or she – back at work? Or could it be Jeremy calling? But, no, Jeremy wouldn’t show up as unknown caller.

She hesitated, her finger ready to hit the green button, and then thought better of it. She watched the flashing light until it stopped and waited to see if the caller left a message. Nothing.

“Fine, be that way,” she said, before tossing her purse and phone to the hall chair. Tears formed in her eyes when she thought of Jeremy and his poor mother. She desperately wanted to talk to him, but knew she shouldn’t bother him, not when he was visiting his mother. She was also afraid to talk to him, not knowing what she’d say if his mother’s condition had become worse.

The ringing of the doorbell interrupted her thoughts. She peered through the peephole, shocked to see Dr. Kendrick standing there.

What? All sorts of thoughts invaded her head. She backed away from the door, her hand across her mouth to stop herself from screeching. What the heck? What was he doing there? Her stocking feet were soundless on the floor, as she escaped into the bedroom. She hoped he hadn’t heard her earlier when she threw the phone down. Who knew how long he stood there, listening through the door. Did he follow her home?

Remy thought of several possibilities of where she could later say she was. She could be at a neighbor’s. She could be out for a walk. Yes, he’d never know she had been home.

The doorbell rang again, insistent, intruding into her private domain. Then the phone rang.

Remy crept back into the living room to check the call display. Jeremy. Darn, she thought. I can’t pick it up. I can’t answer. Dr. Kendrick will hear and know I’m home. I have to let it ring.

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It’s always refreshing to read a classic. While I appreciate plot-driven works, there’s just something about a book like Hurston’s, one full of figurative language and imagery, that quenches my intellectual thirst as a reader.

Hurston’s novel follows the life of Janie, a woman on a quest to find herself, love, and meaning in life. As a young child, Janie was raised by her grandmother, a woman who knew slavery. Nanny uses her own life experiences to shape her goals for Janie: Nanny was raped by her master and almost killed by the master’s jealous wife after the birth of her daughter. Janie’s mother was raped by a white schoolteacher and then ran off from responsibility. Nanny did not want to see the same thing happen to Janie.

As a result, Janie is married off at age 17 to a much older man simply because he can provide for her. The problem is, Janie has never been satisfied with simply filling her basic human needs. She experiences an epiphany under a pear tree. The “blossoming pear tree in the back-yard….called her to come and gaze on a mystery.” The tree is described in a beautiful and suggestive passage comparing the tree to “a flute song long forgotten in another existence and remembered again,” a song “that had nothing to do with her ears.” She watches the bees among the blossoms and experiences a vision of perfection in marriage, “the thousand sister-calyxes arch[ing] to meet the love embrace and the ecstatic shiver of the tree from root to tiniest branch creaming n every blossom and frothing with delight.” It was a revelation that “left her limp and languid.” This epiphany is what Janie uses to compare all future relationships.

Needless to say, Logan, her first husband, cannot compare. He is older, he’s focused on working his farm, he doesn’t wash his feet before bed, and she hates “de way his head is so long one way and so flat on de sides and dat pone uh fat back uh his neck.” In short, “the vision of Logan Killicks was desecrating the pear tree.”

Janie runs away with a man younger than Logan (but at least ten years older than her). Jody starts the town of Eatonville in Flordia, an all-black incorporated town. At first Janie is flattered to be the mayor’s wife, but as time goes on, she realizes that Jody has stifled her freedom. The men in the town are infatuated by Janie’s beauty, specifically her hair. Being three-quarters Caucasian (from her family’s history of rape), her hair is much softer than the other women’s, and it makes her stand out. Jody catches someone stroking Janie’s long braid (without Janie’s knowledge) and forces her to keep her hair tied up for the next twenty-odd years.

At nearly age 40, Janie becomes free of her marriage to Jody, and she meets a younger man named Tea Cake. At age 25, he can’t ignore his love for her despite the age difference. I won’t spoil the ending, but Tea Cake definitely fits Janie’s pear tree vision.  Through the story, Janie does find what she was looking for. The horizon is used as a symbol throughout, and at the story’s end, despite its bittersweet qualities, Janie “pulled in her horizon like a great fish-net,” with “so much of life in its meshes!” She learns what life and love truly is through the novel, and it’s an experience you’ll enjoy discovering along with her.

The challenge of this book is its use of dialect. Hurston has become famous for her anthropological use of diction. Words are spelled the way they were spoken among southern towns in the 1920s and ‘30s. “Ah” is used instead of the pronoun “I,” for example. While it presents an initial slowing of reading, it adds lots of flavor, and by the third chapter, you’ll barely notice it. The rich use of figurative language and interwoven symbols makes this a rewarding reading experience.

Chapter 20 of Remy’s story is by Val Muller, author of the Corgi Capers, Deceit on Dorset Drive and newly-released, Halloween-themed Corgi Capers: The Sorceress of Stoney Brook, a mystery series for young detectives, as well as the sci-fi-time-travel-romance For Whom My Heart Beats Eternal.
Next week’s episode comes from Cathy MacKenzie. Check out her books of short stories available on Smashwords for only $1.99 and $0.99. https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/camack. There you can read the first story in each book for free. However, the stories are all different, so the sample stories aren’t a true representation of the other stories. Her books of poetry are available there, as well.

 

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Chapter 20

Remy couldn’t help but smile. For the first time, she seemed to be forming a bond, an actual bond, with Jeremy. So his ex-girlfriend was a psycho—he wanted no part of it. So he freaked out—his mother was sick and he was going through a rough patch.

He couldn’t stop thinking about her. She leaned over and kissed him on the cheek. Remy looked at her and smiled, leaning in for more.

“As flattered as I am,” Remy said, pulling away, “you’ve got to visit your mother. It sounds pretty bad, and you can’t ignore your family. Sticking your head in the sand doesn’t make bad things go away. You need to visit your mom. Take your time. Do what needs to be done and say what needs to be said. I’ll be here when you get back. At this point we both need time.”

Jeremy nodded, tears in his eyes.

“You’re right. You’re right.” He stood. “You have my cell number. If Barbara does anything to you—if she comes near you or calls you or anything, you call me right away.”

Remy nodded, and Jeremy helped her to her feet. “Thanks,” she said. “I’ll see you in a few.”

He squeezed her hands once before turning away. Remy watched him leave, feeling a whole mix of emotions. She was glad for the time to sort them out.

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At work, Irene took full advantage of Remy’s offer. In fact, she didn’t wait until five o’clock to leave. She snuck out a 4:50 with a curt, “You’re closing up tonight, right?” The door slammed shut before Remy even had a chance to answer.

The last patients were gone for the day, and Remy started straightening up the front desk. Maybe she could sneak out right at five, too.

“Is she gone?” a voice asked behind her.

Remy turned around to see Dr. Kendrick standing behind her. Very close.

“All last week I was hoping she’d leave a few minutes early.”

“Dr. Kendrick,” Remy said.

“It’s Sam,” he answered as he leaned in for a kiss.

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Catherine A. MacKenzie
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Jessica Degarmo
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RC Bonitz
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Val Muller
https://valmuller.com/blog

 

This post is part of the BlogFlash Halloween event. You can read all the participating stories and vote for your favorite. The list of all participating stories can be found below.

The Stairs

by Val Muller

Lisa hated doing laundry. She’d rather scrub the house with a toothbrush. Why did the washer have to be in the basement? It was the stairs–wooden stairs open in back, revealing the shadows underneath. Ever since childhood, she feared a monster lurking there. She pictured it reaching from under the steps, its humongous, clawed hands wrapping around her ankles. Pulling her into its abyss. The coal furnace ignited on the other side of the basement, whispering to life. It sounded like mother. The shadows under the stairs illuminated and danced with the sinister red light of coals. Lisa shuddered.

“It’s your imagination,” Mother always said with no sympathy for Lisa’s fears. In fact, ever since Lisa confessed her terror of the basement, Mother made laundry Lisa’ permanent chore. “You must overcome your fears,” she said. “If you don’t own your fears, you’ll be their prisoner.” If Lisa didn’t know better, she’d say Mother enjoyed watching her daughter cower every laundry day.

“She’s gone now,” Lisa reminded herself. “Just get the house cleaned and sold–you’ll never have to do laundry here again.”

To punctuate the point, she kicked over the ironing board. No sense ironing anymore. It was all going to Good Will. The ironing board clanked against the concrete floor. A clanking echoed near the furnace.

“H-hello?”

A thud answered.

Lisa’s eyes widened, and she picked up the ironing board. “S-sorry,” she whispered to the darkness.

Silence.

The adrenaline of her fear hardened to anger, and Lisa turned back to the laundry. “Why am I still doing this? Mother’s gone. I don’t have to do her wash anymore. I’ll donate it as is. So what if it smells like mothballs?” She turned to the stairs. “Hear that?” she asked the shadows. She took the box of laundry detergent and tossed it at the stairs. It exploded in a powdery mess. Lisa’s eyes narrowed. She was the bullied finding the flame of revenge.

“Like that, do you?” she shouted. She picked up the fabric softener. “Conquer this fear, Mother!” She tossed it at the wooden step. As it spilled, the lightbulb above popped into darkness.

“You’ll be their prisoner,” the furnace whispered as it, too, extinguished.

“Hello?” Lisa gulped. Her eyes could not adjust to the darkness, and she shuffled to the stairs. She took it one step at a time, the wood slick with laundry powder and fabric softener. “You’ll be their prisoner,” the furnace hissed again, coming to life with a clunk. The red light illuminated the area under the stairs, revealing a lurking shadow with eyes glowing red. The shadow reached out, two clawed hands reaching for her ankles. She lurched backwards, her feet losing purchase just as she felt the tight, sharp grasp at her feet.

“Mother?” she gulped.

“Their prisoner,” the furnace whispered as her head hit the concrete and her world went black.

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This story takes place in 1659 Bavaria. Although it’s called The Hangman’s Daughter, it mainly follows the hangman, Jakob Kuisl, as he fights to solve a mystery. A child’s body has washed up in the river with supposed markings of witchcraft, and Jakob and his allies are worried that this will begin a witch-scare like the one that happened thirty years earlier (and resulted in the torture and deaths of many innocent women).

I’d heard a lot about this bestseller, so I was hoping for something stellar, but it wasn’t as good as I expected. Part of that, I think, is because the book is a translation (it was originally written in German). The writing seemed uneven to me. At times, I would get lost in the narrative, but most of the time the writing seemed painfully slow, and I watched the percentage number on the bottom of my Kindle screen creep along. For the first thirty percent of the book, I wasn’t even sure if I wanted to finish it. The story, to me, didn’t really pick up until I was 75% of the way through.

It definitely started out with an intriguing preface, illustrating the disturbing details of being a hangman. This profession, in the 1600s, was frowned upon but necessary. The hangman, with his knowledge of the human body (torture and medicine combined) was shunned by townfolk. He was also tasked with clearing the trash from outside of homes each week, and he and his family were considered “dishonorable.” The caste-like nature of this society is starkly different from what I know as an American, and it was interesting yet aggravating to me. Jakob has more integrity than anyone else in the book and should not have been treated so horribly. The fact that he was, and that he hated his job yet found ways of making it work, made him a likeable character. During the novel, he is tasked with torturing a confession out of a suspected witch, the midwife. Since Jakob respects the midwife (she delivered his own children), he uses his knowledge to delay the more gruesome parts of her torture, giving him time to solve the mystery (and disprove that it’s witchcraft). The majority of the book follows Jakob trying to track down a character known as “the devil” and determine what his role is in the murder.

Because of the title, I was waiting for the hangman’s daughter, Magdalena, to play a role—which she did about three-quarters of the way through. A doctor’s son has taken an interest in Magdalena, but since she is “dishonorable,” his family (and the rest of the town) disapproves of the match. I didn’t learn much about her, and as a result I felt too distanced. In fact, I felt this way about most of the characters. Some of the scenes took too long to get through. Some of the dialogue seemed unnecessary. And sometimes, when I wanted more details, the story fell short. A few more well-chosen details could have made me feel closer to many of the characters. I didn’t hate the villains the way I feel I should have, either. I’m not sure how much of this might be a result of the translation, though.

The Kindle edition did come with illustrations. My black-and-white screen didn’t do justice to these, but they did help fill in visual gaps. A hard copy or a bigger/brighter screen (cue ad for Kindle Fire!) would have helped.

I might be holding my standards a bit higher because this is a bestseller, but this is my honest opinion. I enjoyed the details of the story that gave me a taste of life in the 1600s: the smells, the discovery of a new powder called “coffee,” the strange herbs midwives and doctors would use for various ailments. I would have wanted more details about all the characters. The bottom line: it’s an interesting story that introduces a reader to the culture of 1659 Bavaria, but it could have been condensed, or kept the same length with lots more details added. I’m glad I borrowed it for free using Amazon Prime…

Chapter 19 of Remy’s story is by RC Bonitz, author of A Little Bit of Blackmail and the soon to be released sequel, A Little Bit of Baby. Jessie and Ike have troubles of their own! Look for it on Amazon and B&N November 8!

Next week’s chapter will come from Val Muller, author of the Corgi Capers, Deceit on Dorset Drive and newly-released, Halloween-themed Corgi Capers: The Sorceress of Stoney Brook, a mystery series for young detectives, as well as the sci-fi-time-travel-romance For Whom My Heart Beats Eternal.

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Chapter 19

Jeremy scratched his ear in silence for a moment. “I don’t know,” he finally muttered, “I guess I’ll have to talk to her again.”

“That didn’t work very well before,” Remy said.

He turned and stared at her. “What do you think I should do?”

What did she think? This was her problem? “I have no idea. No, wait- you could get a restraining order, I suppose.”

Jeremy brightened. “Hey, that’s good, right, I will.”

“You really ought to spell things out to her too. Very clearly.”

“I tried that. I told you.”

Somehow Remy wondered just how specific and emphatic he had been. “What did you tell her?”

“Well, I dunno. I don’t remember exactly.” He grinned. “I’ll tell her you’re my girlfriend now. That’ll show her how things are.”

Remy held her tongue. This was not going very well. First he asked her what to do, and now he wanted to involve her in a dispute with a woman who might be unbalanced?  Not good at all. Alright, she had to take a minute, had think before she told him off or said okay. What did she want to do? Was he a guy she wanted in her life? “Don’t involve me with Barbara. I don’t want her camping on my doorstep.”

“Oh yeah, she might do that I guess,” Jeremy said quickly.

Remy frowned. “She’s your problem, Jeremy, not mine. I don’t want any part of a love triangle. When you’ve settled everything with her we can talk, okay?”

Jeremy blinked. “Hey, that’s not fair. I told you, she means nothing to me. Why won’t you give me a chance?”

Remy sighed. Why was she being so stubborn with him? Not stubborn maybe, defensive? He was the stiff-necked one in a way, pushing like he did. “Jeremy, I just met you. I don’t owe you anything and you haven’t won my trust. Fair has nothing to do with it.”

He studied her face, then smiled. “Damn, you’re pretty when you’re mad.” She started to protest, but he raised his hand. “I know, not mad, just upset. And anyway, you’re pretty all the time.”

“Is that a new tactic- compliments?” she drawled sardonically.

He laughed softly. “Maybe it is, I guess so. Look, all I know is- you make me crazy. I think about you all the time. I see your face in my sleep. I’m not going to let Barbara stand between us. I’ll get that court order.”

 

The Spot Writers- our members:

Catherine A. MacKenzie

http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Jessica Degarmo

http://www.jessicadegarmo.com/

RC Bonitz

http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller

https://valmuller.com/blog

 

 

 

 

 

I was given an advanced review copy of this work to review. The YA novel is a sci-fi adventure in which a young man named Jason must help fight a race of giant, interstellar wasps in order to save Earth. The bottom line: Sometimes humorous, sometimes terrifying, and always imaginative, this high-tech, interplanetary tale will keep you buzzing through page after page. You will never look at bees the same way!

In fact, as I’m writing this review, I am watching a handful of carpenter bees ravage my wooden deck, and it’s actually making my skin crawl. The story follows a race of giant bees—bigger than humans—with their eyes on Planet Earth. The most terrifying is the General, a nightmarishly huge wasp bent on destroying humans.

The story is full of technology—the humans have advanced from our present-day technology, but so have the bees. They have sinister technology, characters, and motivations that underscore the novel with a tone of foreboding dread: The Death Watch, the Eternity Drive, the War Machine, Death Rays, and the deadly General. Even in the story’s lighter parts, these threats are constantly in the background, giving the reader a sense of urgency. Still, not all the bees are bad, and I enjoyed the more light-hearted interactions Jason has with the friendlier apians and was touched by some of the more poignant moments as well.

I also enjoyed the themes running through the book: Jason and his father are firm believers in the possibilities offered by education and science. Through the conflict with the bees, they risk their lives to use science to help the Earth. Another theme the author makes us question is the nature of humanity. Though under attack by a horrendous race of bees, some of the humans are still sticking to their own factions, valuing loyalty to individual countries rather even over loyalty to the human race as a whole. As a music lover, I also liked how Jason links music and science, and uses music to his own advantage in a way reminiscent of Dune. And suggestions about the nature of the Bees’ history and the nature of magic versus science was intriguing as well.

I enjoyed the story overall. There are places where the imagery truly carries each scene (descriptions like “blood orange light” stress the sinister intentions of the bees). My one wish was to be just a bit deeper inside some of the character’s heads before all the storylines come together. Still, I enjoyed the use of future slang; and overall, the suspense of the story carried the writing, making this a page turner and a quick read.

I recommend this book for fun-loving sci-fi fans, apian lovers, and readers liking a multi-cultural examination of the way we humans live, and can live, in this world.

 

Chapter 18 of the continuing saga of Remy comes to us from Deborah Dera. Deborah traditionally ghostwrites articles and stories but is in the process of finishing up her first eBook to be released on the Kindle platform later this year. Keep your eyes peeled!

Next week’s chapter will come from RC Bonitz, author of A LITTLE BIT OF BLACKMAIL and A BLANKET FOR HER HEART, both available from Amazon or B&N. He’s looking forward to the release of A LITTLE BIT OF BABY, due in November.

The Spot Writers’ blogs appear at the end of this story. Don’t forget to check them out.

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Chapter 18

Remy shifted uncomfortably, not exactly sure what she should say to Jeremy. The explanation he had given her about his mother being ill made all the sense in the world to her. She could hardly fault him for acting badly in that situation, though she wished the episode hadn’t been so downright threatening.

Still, she hesitated. Remy was willing to let Jeremy have his say, but she wasn’t about to open herself up to a dangerous situation. He watched her patiently as she struggled to find the right words. Rather than opening the door, she pulled the key back out of the lock and motioned towards the step as she sat, inviting him to sit with her.

“We should talk,” Jeremy said. “I’ve wanted to talk to you for a while now – about what happened that day when Barbara showed up…?” He trailed off, posing his statement as a question, checking to see if she remembered. As if she could forget.

She sighed. “Look. I know you’re going through a lot. We don’t really have to get into this right now, but –“

“No! No! I want to explain what happened. Please?”

Remy nodded. “Alright. What’s up with Barbara?”

“It’s really not as complicated as it looks. Barbara and I went out for a couple of months. We met at a wedding – she was a friend of one bride’s family. I dunno. We started talking and hit it off. It was sort of nice to have someone to laugh with. Neither one of us really knew anyone but the bride and groom, so…”

“So you dated.” Remy suddenly laughed to herself, realizing she could save some embarrassment on both of their parts by simply letting him off the hook. “You can skip the nitty gritty details. How do we get to the point where Barbara shows up on your doorstep, rattling about a wedding and claiming she’s pregnant?”

“Right. Well, if you haven’t noticed…” Jeremy paused to glance at Remy, “Barbara seems to be a bit clingy. Possessive, really. I’m all for spending time with the one you love and everything, but a guy has to have a little bit of breathing room once in a while. Somehow we went from fun at a wedding to some pretty serious dating and before I knew it she’d practically moved into my apartment. This was over the course of – I dunno – two or three weeks? I admit I didn’t exactly tell her to leave, but I was still a little surprised the day her friend’s van pulled up with the rest of her stuff.”

Jeremy seemed to relax a bit as he spoke and even laughed a little himself. “I’m sure the look on my face was priceless. My saving grace was that I’d already placed an offer for my condo here, and I told her in no unclear terms that when I moved she was not coming with me. I didn’t exactly say we were breaking up, but I definitely made it clear that we were not going to live together.”

Remy carefully studied Jeremy’s face. “She didn’t take that very well?”

“Uhm – not exactly. At first she threw a temper tantrum. I mean, I didn’t know a grown woman could act the way she did. Then, after a few hours, she got really calm. It was unnerving. Then she started acting like nothing had happened.”

Remy shot Jeremy a questioning glance, eyebrows raised. “She acted like nothing had happened?”

He nodded. “Yea. She went to the apartment complex and asked if she could take over my lease when she left. She even asked me if she could keep whatever furniture I wasn’t taking with me. I let her keep a few things since I had planned to start pretty clean here anyway. And – well – yes. Aside from that she acted as though we were in a normal, healthy relationship.”

Jeremy paused and shrugged. “I tried to break it off when I moved out, but she insisted I was just going through a phase. She showed up here more times than I can count. I told her that we were through, didn’t have much in common – you name it. Things were just weird and I wanted to get as far away from her as possible.  I thought she’d finally gotten the message until she showed up at my door – well, at your door – that morning. I hadn’t seen or heard from her at all for about two weeks.”

Remy nodded in understanding, trying to process what she was hearing. She didn’t really want to pry into their relationship but she got the feeling there was more to Barbara than Jeremy wanted to discuss. “And now she’s pregnant.”

“And now she says she’s pregnant.”

This time she couldn’t help it. Remy laughed out loud and Jeremy looked at her, shifting uncomfortably. He looked nervous at her outburst but relieved when she started speaking again. “I’m sorry. It’s just that I just saw her leaving. I told you that. And I was thinking she doesn’t look pregnant. I don’t know what she is, but she really looks – I don’t know – sick? She looks awful.”

“Or deranged,” he added sarcastically. “But, you’re right. I guess I have a bit of a problem in that regard.”

“You sure do.” Remy looked Jeremy in the eye. “What are you doing to do about it?”

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