Val Muller

The Electronic Wordsmith

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This month’s prompt is to use these five words: riot, tear, leaf, bread, nurse.

Today’s post comes from Cathy MacKenzie. “Like” her WOLVES Facebook page to keep up to date on her first novel, WOLVES DON’T KNOCK (coming soon!!): https://www.facebook.com/WolvesDontKnock/  (No! This book is not about werewolves or vampires!)

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Too Much Silliness by Cathy MacKenzie

The outside commotion dragged Natalie from her dinner. She peeked out the bedroom window to darkness, but when flares soared high into the sky, she saw police brandishing their guns. A full-blown riot!

She yanked the drapes together as if blocking the scene made it less threatening. The action reminded her how she closed her eyes when she didn’t want someone to see her—as if doing so made her invisible. Such silliness!

Returning to the kitchen table, she demolished the last of the bread and soup. The soup had cooled in the few minutes she’d been in the bedroom. She closed her eyes, imaging the horror outside—outside on her very street, right outside her window! How could that be?

The world had changed; violence was the new normal. Unknowingly, she had picked the right profession. Nurses and doctors were in demand. At first, she hadn’t been certain she could follow through with her chosen career, but gradually, during her forty-plus year as a nurse, the sight of blood became her new normal.

Except she wasn’t working any longer and missed those days at the hospital.

She missed her husband, too.

She let her face drop to her hands, ignoring the tear that plopped to the table. Her sweet Bill. Whatever in the world had she been thinking?

She dipped her index finger into the blob, which had increased with the addition of several more tears, and traced the outline of a leaf. The shape resembled a teardrop, reminding her of dear Bill. A teardrop leaf. She snickered. How silly!

She smacked the blotch, surprising herself.

She sighed and returned to the window, peeking between the drapes. The din had lessened though a throng of people still lingered.

She went to the closet and withdrew an almost weightless box from the top shelf, placing it on the floor and removing the lid. Ah, her nurse’s cap, which she hadn’t worn for the last ten years, not after she’d been forced from the hospital due to her age. At least that’s what she told herself.

In reality, she had been fired for drinking blood, caught in the act by a sickly patient who had screamed at the discovery. Natalie had tried to wheedle her way out of the predicament, but blood dripping down her chin was the only evidence needed.

A policeman had the audacity to ask if she were a vampire. A vampire? Hadn’t they gone out with the dark ages? Had they ever been real?

“You’re too silly. I’m not a vampire.” Her words had been spewed to deaf ears—except for the dratted patient who had given Natalie away. Natalie had wanted to throttle her white, turkey-gobbler neck.

She sighed and twirled her waist-length hair into a bun, ensuring it lay neatly on top of her head. Had she really been fired because of the blood? She had convinced herself she had been fired due to her age, which gave her a legitimate reason to hate her employer and the staff, who had been itching for her to resign for years. Luckily, she had managed to keep her pension. She had worked the requisite thirty plus years; no one had the right to snatch that from her,

What a load of crap! It wasn’t against the law to drink blood. And silliness to boot! So much silliness that no charges had ever been laid. The hospital, not interested in adverse publicity, wanted to forget the incident. Old Mrs. McNaughton, the woman who had caught her in the act, was senile and adamantly refused to testify. They had no case even if the hospital had wanted to press charges.

Natalie’s supervisor at the hospital had declared her a nut case. Natalie grimaced. After over thirty years at the same hospital, she should have held the supervisor positon, not some upstart twenty-year-old who didn’t know the difference between a needle and a thermometer.

“What kind of imbecile drinks blood?” Natalie’s supervisor had added after declaring her a nutcase.

“Me,” Natalie had said. “I was thirsty.” She kept a straight face but inside her guts constricted with glee. She had known it was the wrong reply, but she couldn’t help herself. She had whispered it, though, so only the supervisor heard it, which made the younger woman even more irate. But the telltale blood was the nail that kept the lid on the coffin, so to speak.

“Never mind,” Natalie had said, “I quit,” even though she was aware she was a tad late; she had already been fired.

She had paid no never mind to the awe-struck onlookers, snatched her handbag and her pristine white cap that had fallen from her head during the “excitement,” and raced from the ward. She hadn’t set foot in that hospital since. Wouldn’t give them the satisfaction of knowing she might be sick.

Without more pondering, she set the cap on top of her head. It sat perfectly, wedged on her bun, but just in case, she secured it with two bobby pins.

After a final look in the mirror and a minor adjustment—must look presentable, dearie—she closed the door behind her and descended the three flights of stairs to the ground level.

The evening was darker than usual with the streetlights destroyed by rioters, but riots meant injuries. Injuries meant blood. No one would see. A dark corner would exist, somewhere, away from the cops and the flares.

She licked her lips in anticipation. Her dear, sweet Bill flashed in front of her. She prayed she could snare a wounded, unconscious man. Alive was best, one who resembled Bill. Poor Bill, gone much too soon, but she had enjoyed his last moments of breath even if he hadn’t.

She snickered. Much too much silliness! She’d never find another Bill.

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Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Millicent Hughes: https://www.danburyonfire.com

Welcome to the Spot Writers. The prompt for this week is to use these five words in a story or poem: riot, tear, leaf, bread, nurse.

Today’s tale comes to us from Val Muller, author of the poignant YA tale The Girl Who Flew Away, a story of friendship, family, addiction, adoption, and forgiveness.

Valentine’s Day

By Val Muller

Why on Earth would she agree to babysit her niece and nephew on Valentine’s Day? Allison took a deep breath and closed her eyes, making the living room full of children disappear for a few seconds. Her own seven- and five-year olds were rambunctious enough, but to take on a toddler and a crawler at the same time?

Allison tried to remember what it had been like. It was hard being new parents, and Melanie and James had only been at it for a couple of years. Their little Brucie, the crawler, still wasn’t sleeping through the night, and Marianne was going through her terrible twos. No wonder Melanie and James needed a break.

Still. Did they have to go out on Valentine’s Day?

In the middle of the week?

After hopping their kids up on chocolate and lollypops?

Allison opened her eyes again. The television blared Peppa Pig, but before she could come to terms with the fact that she knew the episode by heart, she noticed little Brucie’s mouth. It was outlined in bright blue, and the color was dripping down his chubby cheeks in long, sticky lines.

“Marianne, don’t let your brother eat your lollypop,” she sighed. “He’s too little for candy.”

Marianne’s eyes flashed, and she took a handful of Lego Duplo blocks and chucked them across the room. She sputtered a string of gobbledygook that sounded like witchcraft and then crossed her arms in anger. Then she hurried to the bookshelf and flung several bedtime storybooks with the fervor of one ready to start a riot.

“Mom, Marianne didn’t do it,” Amy said. Amy, the seven-year-old. The only one adult enough to offer any assistance.

Allison chuckled at that thought. A seven-year-old as an adult. This was her life now.

“Well then who did?” Allison asked.

Amy pointed at her brother. Adam smiled guiltily, revealing a row of blue teeth. In his hand was the offending item. “Adam, Brucie’s too young for candy, okay?”

The kindergartener shrugged. “It’s Valentine’s Day. Everybody deserves candy.”

Something about this annoyed Marianne, who was already on the verge of tears. She charged Adam in an attempt to steal his lollypop.

“Pop!” she screamed.

Adam resisted, his hand knocking to the ground the plate of bread and butter he’d insisted on for dinner and then promptly ignored. The plate flew like a frisbee and hit Brucie on the forehead. The baby wailed immediately.

Allison hurried to pick him up. This better not have left a bruise. Melanie and James were still in that honeymoon phase of parenting where they cared about every little injury. They’d probably take off work to bring the baby to the pediatrician to check for a concussion or some other injury they researched on the internet. Allison kissed the wound to no avail.

Meanwhile, Adam and Marianne were coming to blows.

“Amy, please help!” Allison asked.

The seven-year-old shot a “why me?” look.

Marianne ran to the carnage of books and ripped out several pages, shredding them and throwing them in the air like leaves.

Allison shot a look at her daughter. “Please, Amy” Allison begged. “Help mom out this evening, and I’ll take you to Target to pick out any toy you want.”

At that, Adam froze. “Me too?” he asked.

Allison sighed. There went the money she saved by not hiring her own babysitter and taking a date night of her own. Instead, she agreed to babysit for her sister’s kids and allowed her husband to work late.

“I guess,” she sighed. “If you help take care of Brucie and Marianne.”

Adam sprung into action. A roll of tape materialized from nowhere, and he dove into action, putting together the torn pages like a nurse sewing together a patient. Marianne stared, captivated at the process.

Amy picked up little Brucie and took him to the bathroom, where a minor fuss indicated that his face was being washed. A moment later, the four of them were sitting on the couch just as a new episode of PJ Masks was coming on. Allison couldn’t help but smile. It was an episode she hadn’t seen before. A rare treat. She snuck into the corner of the room and plucked three of the chocolates her husband had given her before work this morning. She popped one in her mouth and hid the other two behind her back. These were quality chocolates, not to be shared with children. Not even mature seven-year-olds.

She eyed the bottle of wine on the living room table but decided she could wait until Melanie and James came to pick up the kids—and until the hubby returned. For now, in the warm glow of the television and the soothing sweet of candy, the chocolate was enough.


 

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Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

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Following a sixteen-year-old named Sarah who is having a self-proclaimed existential crisis, this book is gritty and strange. This review contains spoilers.

At the very beginning of the novel, I got the impression that Sarah was just an angsty teenager frustrated with life, which made the book seem like a cliché of a YA novel. But I was not familiar with A.S. King. As the story continues, it becomes clear that this author walks the line between reality and magical realism. And as this becomes apparent, it’s also clear that Sarah’s frustrations are beyond ordinary: there are underlying issues Sarah is unwilling to confront. The story isn’t really just about a teenager going through an angsty time. It’s about larger issues.

Sarah is an artist. Or at least she was. But now, she seems unable to draw. She’s frustrated with life, thinking nothing new or original happens. Even though she doesn’t quite realize it, she’s searching for what truly constitutes art. The title is inspired by one of her friends, who draws tornados, claiming that they contain all manner of debris that help define who were are and what we go through.

Sarah is going through her own tornado: she has dropped out of school after some drama with the art club and art class. Worse, she roams around Philadelphia, going to dangerous places, such as a run-down and abandoned school now used for graffiti and worse. She follows people around. Tries eating out of trash cans. And is obsessed with a homeless man who is, in her mind, a real artist. All the while, she mopes over the absence of her brother, who left her when she was ten.

As story continues, Sarah meets several versions of herself: a ten-year-old Sarah who has fresh memories of a disturbing family vacation to Mexico; a twenty-three-year-old Sarah who seems arrogant and annoyed at the teenager’s crisis; and a forty-year-old Sarah who seems to have things more or less together. When I first met the ten-year-old Sarah, I thought for sure she was a manifestation of Sarah’s memories. But then other characters begin to see her as well (and the other Sarahs as well).

We come to learn, through use of varied points of view and flashbacks, that Sarah’s mother has been in an abusive relationship with her husband since they first met. Although she seems down to earth and strong (she’s an ER nurse and has seen everything), she has been making excuses for her husband’s behavior since almost the start of their relationship. And it turns out the couple has stayed together partly for the “benefit” of Sarah and her older brother, Bruce. After a trip to Mexico during which Sarah’s brother was hit—hard—by their father, he decided to leave home (he was in college at the time) and has been out of contact since.

Once I saw that this was not a normal tale—and that it was about the ramifications of abuse and all the people it affects—I was hoping for a bit more. I wanted an additional twist. But the reveal comes slowly, and by the time it came, it was fairly obvious what had happened. But that was part of the point, I think: Sarah and her mother had made excuses and repressed memories so that the obvious was not so obvious to them. The method of storytelling in some ways mimics that. Even Bruce, who took some action, did not do enough to rectify the situation, and the slow reveal emulates that as well. I also liked the fact that Sarah’s brother went on to work with troubled youth—and he explains that sometimes, adults who behave horribly can trace those roots back to childhood. While it’s easy to hate people like Sarah’s father, it’s even suggested that his own childhood helped to shape him into the person he is.

All in all, the book should want to make readers want to reach out to seek help if needed or to offer help to those in need. I can see this book hitting home with readers depending on their experience. Since I’m reading this for a YA bookclub intended to screen books for potential use in schools, I would warn that there is some violence in the book as well as language. But more than the physical violence, the hidden emotional violence and torment is disturbing. Even beyond the abuse of her father, Sarah also encounters bullying at school—an art club that stole her best project and destroyed it so it couldn’t place in the art show—as well as observed a sexual relationship between Ms. Smith (the art teacher) and one of Sarah’s former (female) friends. The literary elements of the novel, for me, balance out this content, making it justifiable for student use with warnings in advance.

On a side note, the existentialist echoes reminded me of the play Rosencrantz and Guildenstern Are Dead, especially the sentences: “I am a human being. I am sixteen years old. And that is enough.” To this end, this novel could be paired with other complex texts in a thematic unit on existentialism, such as Stoppard’s play, Hamlet, and Life of Pi.

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This month’s prompt is “hunger” (the hunger does not have to be literal).

Today’s post comes from Cathy MacKenzie, who is diligently finalizing her novel WOLVES DON’T KNOCK. Coming soon! (No, it’s not about werewolves and vampires!)

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“Hungering for a Nude” by Cathy MacKenzie

About ten years ago, when I was taking art lessons in Mexico, Dimitar, the instructor, asked if he could paint me—nude!

Immediately, I’d been aghast. The dirty old man! But I gave him leeway; he was in his eighties, after all.

But he had to be joking. Who would ask to paint me, a fifty-plus-year-old woman? And what fifty-year-old flabby female (like me) would agree?

He was serious!

Hmm… What would posing for a painting entail? Would I have to pay him for the privilege? Would he pay me for my time (and embarrassment)? I would want the painting (good or bad), but would he keep it?

I had shaken my head—literally. Silliness to even contemplate such an idea. “No!”

I took painting lessons from Dimitar for several years while wintering in Mexico, managing to produce several “masterpieces,” mostly of my grandchildren (so, of course they’re works of art!). One day he chastised me: “I suspect you used a ruler,” words I’ll never forget. I kept the ruler hidden behind my pastel paper or on my lap under a paint rag, confident he’d never see it. I enjoyed painting but needed the basic image first, and for that I used a ruler, measuring wee eyes and noses and lips and then doubling, tripling, or quadrupling them onto paper.

We didn’t go to Mexico in 2013, and when we returned the following winter I discovered Dimitar had died in February of 2013, at ninety-three. I was saddened. He truly was one of the old masters, and the art world would be darker without him. He’d also been a magnificent teacher; he taught me, and I don’t have a smidgen of talent.

We are back in Mexico this winter, and Hubby doesn’t waste time nattering that I should have accepted Dimitar’s offer.

“You lost your only chance,” he says.

I had for sure. “I know,” I reply.

“We could have had a painting of you by a real master.”

“Yeah, but I’m not sure I could have posed naked.”

“Your private areas would have been covered. He would have painted them from his imagination.”

“Oh, really?” 

“You’ll never look as good as you looked back then.”

Another non-compliment. But Hubby is right. Even though I looked gross back then, I look grosser today; most of us don’t improve with age. But I continued to waver whether Dimitar had been serious, not that it matters now.

Hubby continues to drone on about the lost opportunity.

I glance in the mirror and sigh, regretting my decision back then. “Yeah, I wish I had.”

(RIP Dimitar Krustev. I miss you.)

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The Spot Writers—Our Members:

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Millicent Hughes: https://www.danburyonfire.com/

 

 

 

 

 

 

I happened upon an article about The Armada Tree in Northern Ireland. The Spanish Sweet Chestnut tree supposedly grew from a chestnut that was stored in a sailor’s pocket when he was buried in an unmarked grave after washing up from sea. While not completely proven, the story is a romantic one, and inspiring. That a living monument could mark someone’s passing is encouraging. And in a very real way, it illustrates the idea that we are all connected and exert influences that last beyond our days.

The gnarled tree reminded me of the film The Fountain¸ an artistic piece involving three interwoven timelines related to a search for immortality and an acceptance of death. In the film, a tree—the tree of life—plays an important role as characters reconcile what it means to live and to love and to die.

I remember being a child and talking to my parents about trees. They were trying to explain to me how slowly trees grow. I inquired about planting an apple tree and asked when we would be able to eat the apples from it. The answer was a bit shocking to me—turned out, I would have already moved out of the house by the time the tree grew to fruition. Back then, it was hard for me to fathom that. What did they mean, the apples wouldn’t be ready in time for me? How could that be?

They told me that planting a tree was a symbol of hope. Huh? When you plant a tree, they explained, you were thinking about making your yard (or wherever) a better place a long ways into the future. That meant you were thinking of your children, or their children, or the children of someone you’ve never even met. It meant you were thinking about making the world a better place even long after you were gone. It was the most hopeful thing one human could do for another.

crystal-ankh-200x300In my novel The Man with the Crystal Ankh, the fictional town of Hollow Oak centers around a—well, hollow oak, an ancient oak tree with a partially hollowed trunk that was used generations ago to hide the child of a controversial coupling. Now, generations later, the town’s descendants are still trying to reconcile the events of their past.

The concept was inspired by all of the old trees I’ve encountered in my life, the large one whose girths speak to times long before my grandparents. The “protest tree” at my college, the looming willow at old Gallaher’s Estate, the huge tree providing shade for several play features at my child’s favorite park, the fiery yellow leaves of the tree on the front lawn of my workplace. Touching the bark and feeling the solidity of the tree in the earth, it’s easy to imagine the generations of people who must have passed below the tree’s branches. What stories did they tell? What worries did they shoulder? What hopes did they have for the future?

I imagine the trees watching days without horses, and then the emergence of clip-clopping on dirt roads, and the first roarings of motor cars. Like the Ents in The Lord of the Rings, they would stand firmly, only barely glimpsing at the days of humans. We would seem to pass them as an ether, a miasma of frantic energy that barely took the time to slow down and reflect.

As I plant new trees in my nearly-open yard, I do take the time to reflect. I listen to the chirp of a bird. I feel the warmth on my face as the sun provides a rare spring day in the middle of winter, and I glance at the trees that are already taller than when I planted them. And then I wonder what they may see in their lifetime and what they might inspire in those who follow me on this earth.

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This month’s prompt is to write a story involving hunger. The hunger does not have to be literal. Today’s post comes to us from Val Muller, author of the YA novel The Girl Who Flew Away, available from Barking Rain Press or anywhere books are sold.

Satan’s Donuts

By Val Muller

Her stomach growled even before her alarm sounded. A tired swoosh of the hand turned on the television, and the merciless Morning News came on with something warm and bubbly resounding on the screen. It was the perky and very fit, athletic, and blonde reporter Janet Simmons. She was speeding down the sidewalk—backwards, always backwards so she faced the camera—in beautiful high heels and speaking into the microphone without even sounding winded.

The camera stopped as she turned briefly, revealing her mornings destination. Simmons was known for her fun local features on the morning news. This morning, she was standing in front of the heavily advertised Satan’s Donuts.

Sally giggled. It wasn’t really called Satan’s Donuts, of course. It was called Satin Donuts. You know, because of how smooth they are when they slide down your throat. One after the next.

Not that Sally would know. She had stayed on her diet everyday for the past four months and had already shed 20 pounds. But that was the easy weight. Now, her body seemed to have reached what it believed to be ideal weight. Her doctor disagreed, encouraging her to lose the extra 10.

Satan’s Donuts happened to have its shop just four blocks from Sally’s office downtown. They had already wallpapered the mail room with flyers for free donuts to celebrate their grand opening. Several co-workers had brought in boxes over the past week, taking advantage of the BOGO offer.

At work, donuts were everywhere.

These were not regular grocery store donuts or even national franchise donuts. These were the kind that Sally could smell as soon as she walked into the office. They smelled expensive. They smelled like they were made of ingredients of higher caliber then Sally traditionally ate or cooked with. They smelled like they were worth the calories.

These Donuts were Gourmet.

And there, on the screen, sitting at the 1950s-style counter on a Satan-red and chrome stool, was Janet Simmons. Skinny and smiling in her trim pink suit. In front of her, the store owner had set a dozen donuts, lined up along the counter so that the camera could pan them slowly and excruciatingly.

The camera paused as the owner cut a small slice of each one. Kind of like a pizza. Sally watched as thin and perky Janet Simmons picked up the First Slice.

This one was a traditional Boston cream. But it made the national franchise brand look anemic. It was like a giant puff pastry. The entire donut was just about as big as Janet Simmons’ trim face. The camera panned in for a close-up. The dough looked airy and soft. The custard filling glistened in the light, and the chocolate ganache on top looked good enough to be a meal on its own.

Janet Simmons bit into her little slice and exclaimed all kinds of heavenly sounds to let the viewer know exactly what they were missing. She put down the remaining portion of her little sliver and moved on to the next donut.

Yes, she was going to sample all 12. But it was clear her producer and an eye on the clock because she started speeding up her little taste test. She hurried through the powdered jelly and committed blasphemy when she shoved a double chocolate into her mouth without truly savoring it.

She didn’t even really give the maple and bacon donut the time it deserved.

Simmons did finally pause for the birthday cake donut, a rainbow-speckled wonder that looked good enough to die for. The pink of the sprinkles perfectly matched her suit.

Sally winced. Her mouth watered. A rough calculation suggested that even with her small bites, Janet Simmons had just ingested about 500 calories worth of goodness.

That’s right, Sally had researched it. Each of those donuts topped out above 800 calories. They were a dieter’s nightmare. And they were giving Sally a headache.

Her stomach growled as the segment on TV finally came to an end. And of course a McDonald’s commercial appeared, displaying an egg and cheese sandwich magnified to take up the entire 60-inch television.

Sally turned off the TV.

Her stomach growled as she pulled on her shorts and workout shirt. She checked the weather and tied her shoes. A glance in the mirror made her smile. She lifted her shirt to check out her abs. Sure they were nothing like Janet Simmons’– all the world would know, after Janet’s little visit to the yoga studio last for last weeks’ feature—but they were defined, and they were progress.

Sally headed through the kitchen to the front door and eyed the box of chocolate protein cereal that waited for her to finish her run. That and half a banana wouldn’t even equal what Janet Simmons had eaten that morning. And that was its own kind of victory.

Sally locked her front door and pounded the sidewalk at a brisk pace. A good run, she learned, was the best way to beat the hunger, and to look just a little more like Janet Simmons.

 

The Spot Writers—Our Members:

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

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I read this collection of short stories for part of my young adult book club. As such, I’ll be looking at it primarily for its use in the classroom. The stories are primarily about relationships or characters seeking better lives. They span America and India (and some other locations). First, a brief overview of each story:

“A Temporary Matter”
A young couple, still hurting from the stillbirth of their first child, is given notice that the electric company will have to turn off their power for an hour each evening as part of scheduled repairs. The couple is forced to interact in the darkness as opposed to ignoring each other, as they have grown accustomed to do since the tragedy.

“When Mr. Pirzada Came to Dine”
Told from a child’s point of view, this story focuses on a man named Mr. Pirzada, from Pakistan. Living in the US after the Pakistani civil war, the man is reeling after losing contact with his wife and daughters. He brings candy for the speaker during his frequent visits, which seems like his way of lessening his guilt for the absence of his own daughters. The story highlights the differences in cultures, the universality of the human condition, and the way people react to stress and tragedy.

“Interpreter of Maladies”
In this story, a tour guide named Mr. Kapasi takes a family, Mr. and Mrs. Das and their children, on a tour of the Sun Temple at Konarak. He notices the family doesn’t seem to care about each other, especially Mrs. Das, and he begins to have hope for some type of long-term/long-distance interaction with her… or possibly more.

“A Real Durwan”
Boori Ma is in her sixties and takes care of an apartment complex. She always tells stories about her old life, and the stories seem embellished, to help her reconcile her current condition. Though she seems miserable, things start looking up when one of the residents installs a sink for everyone to share, and the other residents catch the fever to improve the place. But perhaps they are allowing themselves a bit too much freedom and abandoning the caution that had kept them safe.

“Sexy”
The story follows an affair between a young woman and a married man. This is the first story that caught my eye as possibly inappropriate for high school students depending on the audience. The language mentioned that he “entered her,” which could possibly be disturbing for some readers. And yet the story does have literary merit as it plays with the definition of “sexy” and includes a second story as a foil to the affair.

“Mrs. Sen’s”
This story follows a woman who feels isolated after her husband took a professorship in the United States. She does not know how to drive, and he tries to teach her as a way of giving her some independence. At the same time, she takes on a babysitting job for extra income. Yet everything she does seems to clash with the American culture she is so uncomfortable with.

“This Blessed House”
After knowing each other for only months, a young couple marries. They find several tacky Christian items in their new house (salt and pepper shaker, a giant poster, etc.), which the wife is thrilled about and displays on the mantle. The husband reminds her that they are not Christian. The artifacts become a point of contention, and it is revealed that the husband feels distanced from his marriage and seems to prefer solitude.

“The Treatment of Bibi Haldar”
Bibi Haldar has a history of seizures, and no one has been able to diagnose a cause or prescribe an effective remedy—until she is told that marriage is the only cure. Because of her reputation, no one wants to marry her. Spoiler: she is finally cured when she becomes pregnant from an undisclosed man and spends the rest of her days as a single mother and business owner. This tale read almost like a fairy tale to me.

“The Third and Final Continent”
In this story, set in 1969, a man travels from India to England, then to America, to start his life. He is married in India via an arranged marriage. While waiting for his wife’s paperwork to clear, he rents a room from a 103-year-old woman. In a rarity for this anthology, he and his wife grow to love each other and live a happy life.

In some ways, the story in this collection start to feel repetitive in the motif of a passionless love—and with the sense that it is nearly impossible to find a real love. There is a sense that characters are each self-absorbed and never truly communicate their thoughts/feelings/desires/goals to each other. Several are together simply because they have been together for so many years.

I do think the stories are valuable for studying cultural differences and assumptions. They would be ideal for looking at women’s studies, for instance. As a teacher, I would be more tempted to choose one or two short stories to read in isolation, though I could see an AP Lit class using the entire collection.

The characters do feel real enough—even though they are only short stories, the characters all feel that they have depth and could become the subject of an entire novel if the author felt so compelled. The only story I would try to avoid is “Sexy” because it’s about an affair and has the most blatant mention of sex, but some populations would be fine with this. Nothing was explicit.

Living/teaching in a relatively privileged county, I can see these stories being used to highlight element of life students may not have had to encounter—loss, the search for love and purpose, falling into a life without having truly thought about one’s identity or goals, the way we treat outcasts, whether we have sympathy for others and whether our experiences help improve our ability to sympathize.

As a teacher, I would probably have my students choose one character from a story and do additional research in a character profile, examining what makes this character tick and possibly connection to characters from other works of literature and even the student’s own life.

Some cautions for high school: depictions of sex, drinking, smoking, extramarital affairs.

Underrepresented populations: Indian

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This month’s prompt is to write about a fictional something that should be left in the past. Today’s story comes to us from Val Muller, author of the poignant YA novel The Girl Who Flew Away: https://www.amazon.com/Girl-Who-Flew-Away-ebook/dp/B06XKDFXTZ

 Sulfur

By Val Muller

Even in Georgia, the day was brisk, leaving streets empty. It was the first week of January, and most people still had their Christmas decorations up. Was it to make the cold snap feel less brutal? Or maybe the Southerners simply hibernated when temperatures dropped too low: the decorations would come down when they could move again.

In any case, it worked out well for Andrea. She’d used extra perfume this morning—“holiday sparkle,” it was called, and it paired perfectly with the pine needle potpourri she stuffed into her satchel. If he asked about the scent, she could claim she was just being seasonal. Celebratory. That’s what people looked for in a nanny, right? A celebratory nanny would never have been involved in a—no, she had to move past it.

She took a deep breath and double-checked the address on her phone. Yes, this was it. 13450 Hummingbird Lane. His name was Mr. Weinstein, although her expansive Internet searches could not tell her whether he pronounced it as steen or stine. A forgivable offense, but given her situation, she couldn’t afford to make any mistakes.

He answered the door holding a handkerchief to his nose, then he dabbed his red nostrils and invited her in. He closed the door behind her before reaching a hand and offering a shake. She told herself not to hesitate and to grip firmly, glad she was wearing thick leather gloves against his germy hand.

“Andrea Climbury,” she said.

“Goob to meet you,” he said. “Excuse the mose.” He motioned to his head, obviously congested.

“Of course,” she offered. At first she frowned at his lack of introduction—she still didn’t know how to pronounce his name. But then her face broke into a smile. With a stuffy nose, there was no way he could smell anything about her—pine tree or otherwise. She swore with the last interview, the sulfur ruined everything.

“Come on into the study,” he said, checking his watch. “Elissa is just finishing her map.” His face drew into a smile at what must have been Andrea’s surprised expression. “She still maps. She’s only three,” he said. “I mow, my ad made her sound a bit older. Unintentional. She’s a bit precocious, is all. She loves books.”

“I certainly do love to read to the little ones,” Andrea said. “It’s one of the reasons I answered your ad. At my last job, books were a big—” She caught herself. “And I’ve worked with children of all ages.”

Mr. Weinstein motioned for her to sit on the couch. She glanced around the study. The books were all leather and looked older than even Mr. Weinstein. They had to be worth at least twice what he paid for his house. Several rare volumes sat open on pedestals.

“Elissa loves to read,” he explained.

He retrieved Andrea’s resume from his desk and joined her at the other end. “So, Ms. Climbury, I see you’ve moved here from up north. Andover, was it? Now where do I know that town? I’ve never been to Massachusetts, but the name sounds so…”

Andrea sighed. This was it, then. He’d make the connection and she’d be on the search for a job again. If Georgia wasn’t far enough, then where in the world could she go? Distract him, stupid!

“Yes, there was a little girl there. Madison. She loved to read, too. That’s how—” She forced her face into a smile. “Anyway, I was, um, heartbroken when her parents decided to send her to boarding school.”

He nodded, but his face was elsewhere, trying to retrieve a memory. Then it relaxed. “That’s right! Andover. Late last year—Andover was the site of that, well. I don’t know what to call it, actually.”

The Portal to Hell. That’s what the media had called it. The house that randomly opened up in a sinkhole filled with what appeared to be smoldering magma. Unexplainable by geologists, architects, and city planners. A new tourist destination for fans of nearby Salem, and witchcraft, and the occult.

Andrea scratched her nose, and it burned with the familiar scent. She feared she’d remember the scent as long as she lived. To be fair, Madison had been a nice girl. Even to this day, Andrea blamed the books. They’d turned the child into a young Dr. Faustus. And then all it took was a passing taunt on the way home from little Madison’s rival. A few Latin chants later, and little Jenny’s house had become a portal to Hell.

Madison’s parents told Andrea the decision for boarding school was unrelated to the sinkhole incident. It wasn’t completely clear they knew their daughter was to blame. So what if Madison had been standing on the rim of the smoldering crater when the fire department arrived? But Andrea suspected they’d put two and two together. Why else would they send their daughter off to Wisconsin?

Same reason Andrea was down in Georgia.

Andrea looked up to see that Mr. Weinstein was frowning at her. “I’m sorry,” he said. “You probably don’t like talking about that very buch.” He sniffled. “I’m sure it was traumatic for your town.”

Andrea turned her face to sniff out the pine scent of her satchel. It helped cover the itchy sulfur that had infused itself into her on that fateful day. “In any case,” she said, “I’m eager to start in a new position right away. Like I said, I love working with kids.”

A pitter-patter on hardwood interrupted the conversation. “Speak of the devil,” he said, “here’s little Elissa now.” He turned to a wild-eyed little girl in a pink, frilly tutu with a sequined purple witch hat. “How was your map? You ready to do some reading?”

“Yes!” she squealed.

Andrea looked around, searching for the stash of children’s books that had to be somewhere. But little Elissa was already busy pushing a wooden stool up to a pedestal stand containing a very old, leather-bound volume.

“The Necronomicon,” she chirped, offering a toothy toddler smile to Andrea and her father.

Mr. Weinstein turned to admire his precocious little daughter. “Miss Climbury, I’m sure the two of you will get along just fine. I’ll leave the two of you to get acquai—”

But when he turned toward Andrea, he saw only an empty couch, felt the draft of the front door opening to the cold, and even through his congestion caught the faintest whiff of sulfur among pine.


The Spot Writers—Our Members:

Val Muller: https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie: https://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Dorothy Colinco: www.dorothycolinco.com

 

 

A member of my book club chose this as one of our reads this year. The novel is based on a true part of America’s history: Georgia Tann and the Memphis Tennessee Children’s Home Society. According to historical records, Tann coerced parents to sign away the rights to their children, sometimes having mothers sign over their children while still part unconscious from childbirth. Sometimes Tann would resort to outright kidnapping. And then she sold the children for a high price to families desperate to adopt.

Wingate creates a fictional family—the five Foss children—who are left alone on their boat home on the Mississippi while their mother is taken to the hospital with complications trying to deliver twins. While alone, a group of adults kidnap the children, promising the children their parents will be there soon. This storyline, taking place in 1939, is one of two interwoven tales in the novel. We learn chronologically about the Foss children as they struggle to stay together and navigate the abusive orphanage.

The other storyline takes place in the present day. A 30-year old lawyer named Avery Stafford has returned to the South from Baltimore. She’s being groomed to be her father’s replacement in case the politician should have to lose office due to his bout with cancer. She’s not quite happy about her life, though she has accepted her place in the wealthy family and all the grooming it entails. Essentially, her life is a never-ending PR stunt. Every opportunity is taken to put a positive spin on the family, and there always seems to be an assistant watching her to make sure she isn’t tainting the family’s reputation. Her mother and future mother-in-law are constantly pestering her (and her fiance) to set a wedding date, reminding them that it would be a good PR opportunity should it be needed.

During a visit to a nursing home, Avery is “accosted” by one of the elderly residents, who takes her dragonfly bracelet, an heirloom from Avery’s grandmother (who is staying at a different, more expensive, retirement home). It’s clear that the old woman recognizes Avery, or at least the bracelet, which leads Avery to put her lawyer skills to good use, tracking down the truth about her family’s history and its connection to the Children’s Home Society. Avery is tough and not easily intimidated, and once she commits to solve the mystery, it happens fairly quickly.

Throughout the tale, we hear two voices: Avery’s 30-year-old voice, and the voice of a young adolescent (identify withheld: spoilers), who was part of the Children’s Home scandal. I enjoyed the younger voice more. It’s less obvious and more honest. Avery was never allowed to be honest with herself, and she isn’t until the very end, making some of the plot points fairly obvious. Perhaps that is the point.

As I read this novel for a YA reading group, I wanted to include a bit about appropriateness for the classroom. There are no explicit scenes in this book. At the children’s home, there is some violence and suggestions of sexual abuse, but nothing too explicit. If it were a movie, I’d see it as a PG-13 if they included the fight scenes as written–but moreso because of the unpleasantness of the living conditions at the orphanage and the threats made by the workers there.

In terms of under-represented groups, there are the “river gypsies” referenced in the 1939 chapters—families reminiscent of the culture in Huck Finn (which is referenced several times throughout the novel). The orphans themselves offer a reminder that not everyone has a stress-free family situation. Even the wealthy who adopted the children were fighting their own battles (infertility, infant loss). And then there is a glimpse of the working classes—those who served the wealthy families and those who were so desperate for a job that they stayed at the Children’s Home Society despite what was happening there. In Avery’s time, there is the political issue that is still important today: the fact that those without lots of money are often forced to live in less-than-ideal senior living situations.

The reading level was not difficult (though there is some old-fashioned language in the chapters from 1939). An average high school reader would be able to read it with little trouble (though it’s not an easy read for that age; it’s more of an adult than a YA novel). The style was rather simple. There were not passages of swirling metaphors or beautiful prose that stood out; rather, the focus was on the story itself. I wonder, though, if a high-school student would be able to relate. The two protagonists are slightly younger than a high-schooler and more than a decade older.

While I thought I would not relate to Avery because of her family’s wealth and political savviness, I ended up feeling sorry for her. It was clear by the end that she was in her own type of prison—the same way that one of the Foss children felt imprisoned even when adopted into a wealthy household. Her decisions were not her own. As the novel points out, it’s the same reason Huck Finn decided to run away at the end of Twain’s novel: personal freedom was more important to him than anything else. It’s a lesson Avery embraced by the end.

Disclaimer: My story, “Dorsal Fin,” appears in this anthology. The anthology was published several years ago, and I thought I’d wait a while to review it to avoid an immediate conflict of interest. I receive no financial benefit regardless of how well the anthology sells.

The anthology contains 75 pages of horror stories, 11 stories in all. The stories are just realistic enough to be plausible but just speculative enough to fall into horror. They run the gamut of witchcraft, murder and hitchhiking, taxidermy, and more. I enjoyed the anthology. It was dark but not super explicit. There were no stories that made me truly want to cringe (though the taxidermy story made me come close). Rather, the stories allowed the reader to use her imagination to fill in the explicit bits. And there were certainly elements to disturb a reader.

I liked how each story had its own style, so they always felt fresh. On the other hand, they were all of similar quality: I always felt I was being given relevant details without any uselessness. While short, the anthology kept my interest.

My story, “Dorsal Fin,” is based partly on my ability as a kid to jump into my mother’s mind. Once, when lost at Kids ‘R Us, I heard my mom calling to me and telling me where she was, even though when I asked her about it, she said she hadn’t said a word and didn’t even realize I was lost (she thought I was just browsing clothes). Similarly, when my husband and daughter wandered off at Walmart, an image of fabric jumped into my mind, and sure enough I found them by the craft section next to the fabrics. But in each of those circumstances, a bit of panic inspired me to use my mind in ways it is not normally used. In the story, a character has a similar ability and is stranded in paradise—a desert island and is in need of a way to create panic to reach out to her mother for rescuing.

All in all, the anthology is a good read for around Halloween, or—if you’re like me—during the darkest days of the year.