Val Muller

The Electronic Wordsmith

Legendarium takes place in an imaginary place “between world,” a place where all the stories ever created intersect. If anything happens to the stores as-written, there are dire consequences to the world as we know it. The two main characters are Bombo Dawson, an up-and-coming author and Alistair Foley, a harsh and jealous literary critic. In fact, Alistair has given Bombo his only one-star review on Amazon.com, making the two mortal enemies. However, they have been visited by ghosts of famous authors and sent on a mission to save the Legendarium (and, by extension, the world!).

The book takes us through several novels that you’ve probably heard of (or could easily research), the most famous being the world of Alice in Wonderland (Through the Looking Glass). As the characters progress through each storyline, they realize their task is to keep the storyline as close to the original as possible. When they don’t, dire things happen. For instance, their failure in one case led to “President Martin Luther King, Jr.” no longer becoming President, but rather—being assassinated.

The book continues characters that were created in a previous novel. The prologue tells us what we need to know about what has already happened, and I didn’t feel like I missed out for not having read the first novel.

My favorite part of this book was the characterization. I laughed out loud several times at the clever interactions and characterization. The book doesn’t take itself too seriously, which gives it a great tone and voice. What really made the book for me was the clever tone. I read the book in two sittings and was surprised when I looked at my Kindle and saw I was 60% finished already (and that I had to take a break to run to the grocery store!). It’s definitely a page turner. In some ways, its clever humor reminded me of Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy (although that book annoyed me a bit; this one didn’t!). As an avid reader, I was familiar with most of the allusions and references (and characters) in this book, and many of the twists on famous works made me laugh. For instance, at one point, the Vorpal sword was sticking out of Moby Dick. At another point, the characters were counting things that should never be done the same way Alice counts unbelievable things she has experienced.

As a writer, I also enjoyed the funny jabs at modern-day publishing. It’s noted time and again how famous writers of the past would have trouble getting published today. Many times, Alistair is being pushed to self-publish his novel, something he is adamantly against for most of the novel. That said, because much of the humor comes from references and allusions, I’m not sure how a non-reader would react to such a book (though if they don’t generally read, why would they pick up this book anyway, right?).

In short, this was a clever read and well worth the cost. I can’t remember the last time I actually laughed (in a good way!) while reading a book. An enjoyable read over all. I’m always skeptical when I see a book with lots of five-star ratings, but for me, this book deserves every star.

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I’m reviewing this book as part of a blog tour run by Juniper Grove Book Solutions, receiving a copy of the novel in exchange for my honest review. What follows is an excerpt and synopsis provided by the blog tour, and a review—written by me. This book is rated “17+” because of mild adult content.

 

Synopsis:

Mia Langdon—tomb raider and adventure-seeker—has everything she wants. Freedom. Independence. No chains (a.k.a. a man). Her troubles begin when she’s attacked on a dig in Peru. Soon, she’s forced to use her tomb raiding talents to find the flaming arrows of an Egyptian goddess. In the wrong hands, this weapon could destroy the human race—and nearly had.

Used to doing things her own way, it isn’t long before she figures out that she needs the help of Harrison Braden Stanton, her stuffy, but so yummy, Egyptologist and ex-lover. There’s one problem. He despises what she does. As Mia and Harrison find themselves in the middle of a battle between the Egyptian gods and goddess, there’s no choice for the woman with a Grand Canyon-sized independence streak and the man working for the Egyptian god, Osiris, but to work together to prevent the destruction of all they love.

Excerpt from Blood on the Moon by Cassiel Knight:

Harrison sighed and leaned back in the chair. He stretched one arm over the back of Eleanor’s chair. She turned and smiled at him, lavender eyes sparkling nearly as much as the diamonds she wore at her neck and in the delicate pink lobes of her ears. He smiled back and she returned to telling their tablemates a story about her last trip to France.

His girlfriend was in rare form tonight, bubbling and officious and impeccably attired in a blue dress the color of Egyptian lapis lazuli hugging every curve and swell of her body. Pure feminine delight, a feast for the eyes.

He sighed again. For some reason, the banquet set before him left him full. After nine months of dating exclusively, he knew Eleanor expected him to pop the question, as the Yanks would say. A week ago, he considered doing just that. But now, a sense of restlessness and anticipation left his feet tapping and not from a desire to dance.

His gaze swept the crowd again. Where was Sophie? He hadn’t seen her since she and Sebastian left to see the tomb mock up. His niece hadn’t wanted to wait until his duties as exhibition curator were discharged before going off and exploring. Fortunately, his friend surprised him with a visit and now ran watch over Sophie.

Blood_on_the_Moon[1]Harrison rubbed his chin, feeling the slight scrape of his morning shave wearing off. Time for him to go find his wayward, high-spirited niece. The last thing he needed was for her to find her way into a part of the museum she wasn’t supposed to be. And it wasn’t like his best friend from childhood would be any sort of detriment. In fact, Sebastian was just as likely to lead the way.

As if towed toward her by a fishing line, his gaze found and locked onto a tall woman in a sleek gown of scarlet. It wasn’t just the color that got his attention, or made his mouth suddenly dry. It was the long, naked line of her spine revealed by the nearly backless dress, a smooth expanse of flawless skin that begged to be touched. To be caressed. To run his lips along the indentation of her spine.

Unlike most of the other women with hair pulled into tight knots, the exotic woman’s black hair fell in a loose braid down to the middle of her back. Some hair escaped, defying any attempts at control.

She carried herself confidently, her strides smooth and slinky as if she were aware of the appreciative gazes following her every move. Pure animal sexuality screamed from every bump and swivel of her hips. Harrison clenched his jaw. Fingers gripped the back of the chair as he fought the urge to adjust the tightness in his crotch.

Holy hell.

The woman’s whose body language fairly shouted take me now turned her head and looked him straight in the eye. God almighty. The full lines of her lips curved into a mischievous smile. Familiar tawny eyes glowed with humor.

Mia.

He should have bloody well known. Indeed, the most primitive part of him had known. Scarlet dress, red, the color of warning. The color of danger. Everything Mia Langdon was. Dangerously exotic, dangerously sensual.

The only woman who had the power to take his breath away. The woman who he once thought would be at his side for the rest of his life. Until he discovered, unlike the perfect relationships in romance novels, love did not conquer all. It failed to conquer the insurmountable, deep within their soul, differences each had about their passions. The passion for history. While he worked to protect the past for the future; Mia salvaged the past’s treasures for the glory. For the excitement. For the money. That he could not get past.

Hovering at the beautiful woman’s side was the sun-kissed sable waves of his recalcitrant niece. And just a little further away, a tall man with dark hair. Bloody hell. Sebastian. Harrison’s stomach twisted. The only way this situation could get worse is if—

“Harrison!”

Review

I chose to review this book because I love reading about the culture of ancient Egypt. My absolute favorite part of this book was the research done about Egypt. I loved getting to see and hear the gods and goddesses and experience their interactions. I especially enjoyed the flashbacks Mia got to experience about ancient Egypt. For instance, at one point she “wakes up” in ancient Egypt and finds herself wrapped in a dress of the time period. She’s not used to such attire, and she has trouble walking in it. I love being transported into such a world. I also enjoyed how Mia, a descendent of ancient blood, was so fiery. She reminded me of Lara Croft—strong, independent, and able to defend herself.

The plot was strong—lots of character conflict (kidnapping, former relationships, sexual tension) to keep it interesting, not to mention an archeology adventure. My one wish is that the pace was a bit faster, especially at first. I really got “hooked” around 35% into the book—when the ancient Egyptian elements picked up. Some of the words and phrases could have been condensed a bit—at times, I felt like the author did a superb job “showing” us details with indirect characterization but then felt compelled to “tell” the reader what we’re supposed to take away, anyway. Knight is clearly a skilled writer and should trust the readers to pick up on her indirect characterization 🙂

I recommend this book for anyone who loves ancient Egyptian culture, history, and romance.

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This week the prompt is to use five of the following words in the story: shadow, mountain, shell, sunlight, hammock, bottle, chain, wheel

 Today’s contribution comes from RC Bonitz, author of A LITTLE BIT OF BLACKMAIL, A LITTLE BIT OF BABY, and A BLANKET FOR HER HEART. 

The Ring

 by R.C. Bonitz

Fresh out of the shower after cleaning up some poison ivy, I was sitting down to lunch with my Granny Annie. Sunlight streamed in through her kitchen windows. She stood at the stove making her fried egg bacon sandwiches I loved so much, drowned in catsup and her secret blend of spices, yum.

“We have visitors,” she said suddenly, staring out the window at the wagon wheel gate beside the road.

Now unannounced visitors made for an event. You see, Granny lived in the shadow of a mountain, half way to the summit. The only way to get to her place was by the dirt road up the mountain. I stood up and joined her at the window.

I saw the woman first, did I ever. A twenty year old Kate Beckinsale she was, oh boy. Standing by Granny’s wheel, she was talking to a man perched on the big flat boulder next to Granny’s mailbox. I took in that much of the scene before Granny shoved me out the door and down the path. Not that I needed much shoving.

“You folks lost?” I asked, grinning like a fool at Kate.

The man spun around and smiled. “No, we’re hiking up the road. To the summit.” White haired, Granny’s age, he gave her the once over. “Just thought we’d take a break on your rock here.”

“It’s a long hike to the top,” Granny said.

“It’s not bad,” the man said, smiling.

“You must be an athlete,” Granny said.

The man laughed and shook his head. “I go dancing a lot. That keeps me in shape.”

“Would you like a drink of something?” Granny said, friendly as all get out. I stared at her. I mean, Granny’s not one to welcome strangers over much. She likes her privacy. That’s why she stayed on the mountain when Pops died a few years ago.

I caught Kate’s eye. She gave me a dazzling smile. It was time I found out her real name. I offered my hand.

“Greg Hawkins. Nice to meet you,” I said.

“Lois Ryder. Thank you. If you could fill our water bottles, we’d appreciate it.”

“Be glad to,” I said and took the bottles she offered. I started back to the house, but she didn’t follow, darn it.

“Do you like to dance?” the man asked Granny as I strode up to the house.

I didn’t hear Granny’s answer but I didn’t need to. She and Pops used to go dancing all the time before he got sick. I scooted into the house, filled the bottles and hurried back outside. Granny and the old man were deep in conversation by the gate. Lois met me on the path.

“Thank you,” she said as I held up the bottles.

“They seem to be hitting it off. Are you related?” I said with a nod toward the old folks.

“He’s my Grandpa. They’re making a date to go dancing.”

I took a deep breath. Time to try my luck. “Do you like to dance?”

“I love it.”

“Would you like to go?”

Her eyes twinkled, then she frowned. She held up her left hand, palm down. A ring sparkled on her fourth finger “Sorry, I’m spoken for.”

 

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 RC Bonitz

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 Val Muller

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 Catherine A. MacKenzie

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 Melinda Elmore

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We is a Russian novel first published in the 1920s in New York (Banned in its home country, it wasn’t published in Russia until 1988!). I wanted to read this book because it’s the prototype around which 1984 (admittedly) and Brave New World (allegedly) were modeled. In both cases, the similarities are clear, but each of the three novels has its own take on the dystopian theme of collective versus individual. This review contains some, but not all, spoilers.

In We, the protagonist is known as D-503 (all citizens are referred to as a number; in fact, all people are simply called “Numbers.” The novel takes place in the far future (there is a historical event referred to as the Two Hundred Years War, which allowed the “final revolution” to take place, resulting in the current society). D-503 is working on a spaceship called the Integral. One State hopes to send this probe into space to spread the perfect society that One State has become.

The civilization in One State is surrounded by glass. Most buildings are made of glass, allowing Numbers to see what other Numbers are doing. The civilization itself is surrounded by a glass wall that filters sun and blocks bad weather. The point is: everything is predicted and prescribed. Numbers have a “table” that tells them what they must do at each given hour of the day. During the prescribed time for walking, they walk side-by-side—like lock-step robots.

The Benefactor is the “Big Brother” character in this novel. It’s shown that he executes those who displease him by rebelling against the state (they’re executed by being placed in a dome until they suffocate). There are poets, but their role is to write poetry for state-sanctioned occasions. D-503’s friend, for example, is a poet who primarily writes poetry to be read at Executions.

The book is told through a journal D-503 is writing. It’s clear that Orwell took this as inspiration: Winston is writing in a journal in 1984, writing to a group of people who are freer than he. Similarly, D-503 is writing to a civilization that seems to be us, today—one who doesn’t understand the strange, regulated practices of One State. His journals make much use of mathematical metaphor, so if you are rusty on math (like I am), you should brush up. For instance, D-503 is bothered by the concept of imaginary numbers (I can sympathize with him on that one—math started making no sense to me at that point in my studies!). He is also bothered—but strangely fascinated, it seems—by anything beyond the norm. For instance, D-503 claims that he has hairy hands, and this bothers him immensely. He also notices a man named S, who is curved like an S, and a woman whose face has fish-like features. This becomes important later.

Though most things are made of glass, Numbers may request permission to engage in sex with other Numbers. This is to prevent jealousy–the whole point of this society is for everything to be ordered and controlled. Unknown variables are feared. Any Number may request any other Number, so Numbers may have multiple partners; D-503 does. O-90 is his lover and begs for him to impregnate her (illegally) so she can have a(n unsanctioned) child. He complies and later helps her try to retain custody of her baby, despite his “brain” telling him he should not be crossing One State.

He also meets a rebellious woman named I-330. I-330 introduces him to an ancient house (like the antique shop in 1984). This house is unique in that it has actual walls—not glass. It houses artifacts of the past and is watched over by an ancient Number. We come to learn that the ancient house contains a way to enter the area beyond the glass walls. D-503 eventually has an affair with (and becomes madly in love/obsessed with) I-330 and enters this area, finding a group of people who seem to be covered in fur. These are rebels—relatively “free” people who live life their own way. Once again, D-503 is strangely fascinated and horrified by them. He joins them for a time and plots ways to use the INTEGRAL to help them and their cause.

Still, D-503’s journal entries show that he is torn. He realizes he is contradicting One State. He keeps telling himself he is sick—he even visits a doctor who tells him he is afflicted with having a “soul.” D-503 continues to document his “madness” in hopes that his readers will fully understand what he is going through. Soon, One State clears out all the auditoriums to make room for operating tables. The State has discovered a way to essentially lobotomize part of the human brain (using X-rays) in order to kill the imagination.

Big spoiler. D-503 is eventually caught by the Benefactor. He confesses everything and undergoes the operation, thereby “healing” himself of his imagination and soul. I-330, however, will not confess or break down at all, despite the Benefactor’s attempts at torturing her. Once again, the pessimistic ending (the victory of the state over the individual) and the use of torture is echoed in 1984.

All hope is not lost, however. For instance, at one point birds re-enter the glass city, and it’s implied that the State will not be able to continue on forever. Once again, math is used as a metaphor. Though the people have been told that the Two Hundred Years War allowed for the final revolution, they realize that in math, there is no such thing as a final number: numbers are infinite, so there can be no final revolution. In other words, there is always hope. That was my favorite message in the otherwise grim book.

The other part of this book I found fascinating is how the Benefactor made a stark comparison between religion—Christianity specifically—and his own rule. I’m not anti-religion by any means, but I have always been fascinated with how “bad” people through history have tried to use religion to manipulate and control others. In this case, the Benefactor explains that in religion, people like the idea of a decisive, vengeful God. They like to know that there are definite rules and definite consequences. This is logical. He notes that it is human nature to want to give up control to such a higher power. He, like Big Brother, is simply taking the place of that higher power. It is his job to run One State with specific rules, and it is his job to execute people who fail to obey. This is similar to 1984. In the end, Winston is made to realize that he loves Big Brother, and that all his unhappiness prior to his “epiphany” was simply caused by the fact that he was wrong—and didn’t put blind faith in what Big Brother told him, that sometimes, black is white.

Although I am glad I read this novel, I didn’t enjoy it as much as I liked 1984. I do see where Orwell (admittedly) took his inspiration, but I thought 1984 was much easier to relate to, and character motives are just a bit easier to understand. 1984, I thought, was much more terrifying, taking the ideas of We to a more disturbing level. In We, I at least got the impression that there was a reason behind the Benefactor’s desire to impose strict rules on everyone. It seemed One State truly did want to impose order for the benefit of all (the consequences were still terrible). In 1984, it seems that those in the Inner Party simply want to have power because they can. The results are the same, though, regardless of the motive. This is only my first read-through of the We, so I plan to read it again in a few months to see what else I can pick up on.

I read this book as part of my dystopia kick, along with 1984, Atlas Shrugged, and Brave New World. I also plan on reading The Iron Heel. If you have any other classic dystopias to recommend, please leave me a comment or send me an email. I’m fascinated by people’s imaginings (and their real-life inspirations) about our future and the ways in which we might harm ourselves. I also like to see author’s opinions on whether—and how—we will be able to overcome our self-destructive tendencies and start over. In We, I was particularly fascinated with the beast-like tendencies of the people beyond the wall. Reason seemed to be an enemy in this book.

The theme of this week (“I’m so cold my bones have frozen”) is appropriate, as winter temperatures seem to be here forever, at least for author Cathy MacKenzie. Her most recent publication, BETWEEN THESE PAGES, is a compilation of 18 short stories. The book is available on Amazon and Smashwords:

Frozen in Time

by Cathy MacKenzie

 Until Vivian heard her husband’s voice, she wondered if she had actually spoken.

“What?” John said.

Despite the cold, warm relief rushed through her body at his reply. She yearned to touch him, but her arms were bolted to her sides. Icy crisps filled her mouth when she attempted to speak, but she made another attempt.

“So cold. Freezing.”

“You’re always cold,” John said.

“No, it’s truly cold, John. It is. So cold I can barely breathe.” She swallowed more frosty crystals, which melted as they cruelly descended down her throat. John was a raging furnace, especially in bed, unlike Vivian who was continually chilled and craved his warmth on winter nights. A vision of the two of them snuggling in bed formed before her.

Panic set in when he didn’t reply. “Can you hear me? John?”

“I hear you.”

“Cold. Very cold. Where are you?” Vivian said. The arctic hardness weighting her down was colder and longer-lasting than any other she had experienced. She hated the cold, always had.

“Vivian?”

“I’m here. Can’t see.” Though it took great effort to open her mouth and Vivian felt she should conserve her energy, she had to talk to her husband. Had to know he was near despite the glacial dankness.

Vivian heard a muffled reply. At least she thought she did. Had he spoken? Why couldn’t she see him?

“Can you see me?” she said.

In the muted silence, time remained still. Frozen. Could they be? Or was it just her? Vivian remembered the day—or thought she had. Had she and John gone skiing, as they usually did on the weekends? It was still winter, right? To whom was she talking? Was John there?

“John?”

“I’m here.”

“What’s happening? Where are we?”

 “I…not sure,” he said, hesitation and uncertainty obvious in his voice.

 “Are we in a dream? Am I dreaming? I can usually wake myself out of a dream, when I want to. I want to now. But I can’t.”

“Vivian, that’s hogwash. If you can do that, then you’re not really asleep. I’ve told you that before.”

 “Just humour me. Try to wake yourself up, John.”

Vivian heard nothing in response but the cold. Could one hear cold? Certain she could, she shivered though tightly encased in her arctic prison. Pressure numbed her ears as liquid trudged down her eardrums.

John was trying to wake up, she knew it. Both of them must awake from the horrid dream they were immersed in. But when had they ever shared the same nightmare? When had they ever discussed dreaming within a dream?

“No, I’m still awake,” John said. “Or asleep. Whatever I am. Nothing’s changed.”

Vivian would have sighed in desperate resignation, had she been able to. But a swallow of another clump of ice crisps was all she could muster.

“Vivian…I…love…”

Silence ruled. Although it seemed a lifetime elapsed, Vivian knew it was merely minutes. How could a life pass by that fast?

“Vivian, you there?” John’s voice sounded weaker.

“Yes…here. But… I’m sinking, John. Sinking somewhere…not sure where… I…” She closed her mouth, then parted her lips. The life sucked from her. Although unable to utter her last words—“I’m so cold my bones have frozen”—she suspected John already knew.

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RC Bonitz
http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller
https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie
http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Melinda Elmore
http://www.authormelindaelmore.blogspot.com/

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Today, I’m happy to feature guest author Renee Swann on my blog. After checking out her post, be sure to stop by her website to say hi:

 

My family says I’ve always had a way with words. And I suppose that’s true. They seem to flow fluently from my mind to paper (or computer). I’ve been writing little stories since I could write. It has always been a kind of release to me, a way to get any angst or troubles out.

 

I have a folder with a handful of (very roughly) finished or half-finished novels. Maybe I’ll go back and finish them one day, maybe not. It doesn’t matter. Those rough drafts got me through the hard times and they’ll be with me for ever. What does matter, is that I keep going (Who am I kidding? As if I could give it up!), because for every goal I smash through, I get a little bit closer to my dreams. Every piece of fiction I pen holds the possibility to change someone’s life for the better — which is what any writer can hope for.

 

And there’s one novel that changed mine.

 

Two years ago, on a caffeine and sugar high, a character popped into my head. She was twitching with her own sugar and caffeine overdose and I instantly loved her. As a cupcake baker, Veronica Hart’s main concerns were if she’d made enough cupcakes for the day and keeping up with the horde of customers. Until two people return from her past — one determined to shake things up, the other begging for forgiveness. Both are wanting to win back her heart. And her world is about to be turned upside down.

 

I wrote The Truth about Love (aforementioned book) in six weeks, while being mentored by a very talented author: Anne Harth. Her faith in me and enthusiasm for my writing kept me going. I have learnt so much since then and continue to do so.

 

My Never (My Never #1)In early 2013, I wrote a 5,000 word short story for a competition (Love on the Road). It didn’t win but I lengthened it to a novella and in August, it became my first published book, My Never. It’s about two high school sweethearts who reunite after twelve years, by pure chance. Or was it fate? Moni and Troy have spent years trying to get back together, to make it work, but it just wasn’t. Then on a vacation to Cairns, Queensland, while celebrating her thirtieth, Moni bumps into Troy. So much has changed in their lives, but they may finally be ready to recommit. Moni must make a decision — return to her home town and stale life or follow her heart and stay in Cairns?

 

Since My Never, I have been working on several other books, including the sequel The Worry List (which is out on March 25th), getting The Truth about Love polished (available October 2014) and The Hunted (which you can read for free here until June) and its sequel The Forsaken. You can read more about all of my forthcoming books and some excerpts on my website.

 

 

Renée lives in Sydney, Australia with a crazy pooch called Abbey and a boisterous, somersaulting rescue budgie named Kaleb. Her life was changed for ever when she was struck with an idea of an over-caffeinated ninja cupcake baker who falls in love with her rival. She immediately began writing and hasn’t stopped since. Besides writing, Renée is passionate about animal rights and cupcakes. In her spare time, she likes to read, paint, watch crime shows, and write articles for Squidoo. Renée is an author of adult fiction (writes as Renée Swann) and soon-to-be young adult author (as C.J Hart). Her books are available on Amazon, Kobo and Angus and Robertson.

 

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Read an excerpt of My Never here.

 

**Celebrating the release of The Worry List, I’m happy to announce a 30% discount on the My Never paperback (if you purchase it from here)! Code: AX375HMP

Offer valid until the 31st of March 2014.

 

A couple of weeks ago, we had a late-winter snow storm that cancelled work and school for two days—a Monday and Tuesday—giving me a four-day weekend. I had written 10,000 words the previous week in my work-in-progress (Corgi Capers: Curtain Calls and Fire Halls), and I promised myself if we got the full four days off, I would finish the entire first draft, a novel for middle-grade readers with an estimated 50,000 word total. Up to that point, I had never written 40,000 words in four days before, and I wasn’t sure if it could be done. The undertaking would require me to change several writing habits:

Outline vs. Discovery

Normally, I work from an outline, but I create the outline only several chapters ahead of what I’m writing. Thus, I’ll work on, maybe, five chapters from the outline, and as I work, I discover things about characters and plot, and I integrate the new discoveries into the next several chapters of my outline. I prefer this method because it allows me to work on “what I feel like.” So if I’m in an outlining mood, I can work on a few chapters of outline. If I’m in a writing mood, I can work on writing. If I ever get stuck, I can go back and edit my last chapter or two.

This time, because of the condensed time frame, I decided to work 100% from an outline. Understandably, this outline was the most Spartan I’ve written. Normally, my outlines are several dozen pages, full of quotes and passages I jot down as I plan. This one was literally a bulleted list of plot events and character development points broken down by chapter. The outline definitely kept me on track—there wasn’t enough time to get writer’s block if I was to meet my goal—though I did end up changing some of the major points I’d written as well as adding many others.

I’m not sure that I liked working 100% from an outline. I sort of felt like I was cheating when I changed something, but it definitely kept me on track. It didn’t give me an excuse to stop writing to flit about the next few chapters in the outline, or take a break to edit, something that’s not entirely helpful when trying to knock out a draft. With the outline, I sacrificed capriciousness for discipline.

Handwritten vs. Typed

This was the biggest change for me. As my clicky wrist attests, I like to handwrite all my first drafts. The only exception to this is if I have such a flow of ideas that my hand cannot keep up. After I handwrite the draft, I type it up, editing slightly as I type, especially correcting things in earlier chapters that I have since changed in the later ones, or adding foreshadowing I didn’t know about in the early stages. But I knew my wrist would never survive if I tried to write 40,000 words in four days. Thus, I turned to my laptop.

It was awkward at first. I typed a few clumsy sentences, and I felt like I was writing. When I write by hand, I get lost in the ideas. I forget that I’m there writing. But I told myself this was only a first draft. Like NaNoWriMo, the goal was simply to finish.

Before long, I did fall into the story and temporarily forgot I was writing, although I was much more easily jarred out of the storyline. Perhaps it was the position: When I write by hand, I lie on the floor—my world consists of me, the paper, and the pen. At the laptop, I sat, giving me a view of everything in the room, out the window, down the street… Or perhaps it was the easy distraction of email or the Internet. Nonetheless, I proved that it could be done. Although my draft came out less poetic than previous first drafts, I realized a new level of productivity if I can just learn to type first drafts instead of write by hand.

Discovery

What I learned surprised me. The sheer pace of my draft meant that everything was compressed in my mind. I didn’t leave time to forget about a character arc or a plot point. Everything came out as fast as my brain could fathom it. Two things surprised me.

The first is the way the characters seemed to develop on their own. I won’t give away any plot points, but at several instances I found myself frowning in awe at what was coming out on the screen. It apparently lived in my subconscious, these symbols and layers of meaning developed simultaneously among numerous characters (some of whom I thought would simply be playing a cameo). When working from a slowly-developing outline, these changes and developments come through much more slowly, making them more difficult to notice. Working so quickly, I felt like I was watching one of those time-lapse videos of a flower poking out of the ground and blooming. The novel’s closing image seemed to come out of nowhere, but when I read it again and thought about it, I realized it was always there, cooking in my subconscious brain.

The second is the way my story refused to follow the rules of my outline. From the start, I knew who the culprit of this mystery was, but along the way, several characters swore the guilty party was not guilty. I didn’t believe them, thinking they were simply protesting in order to provide foils, confusing the reader and making it difficult to guess the real culprit. I mean—this is MY outline, and I TOLD THEM ALL who the bad guy would be from the start. The bad guy was supposed to accept his role and act accordingly, and everyone else was supposed to slowly realize his guilt. But when I got to the scene in which the culprit was revealed, my hands refused to obey my outline. My brain told them to do something else—reveal a different culprit. I paused as the guilty party’s name flashed on the screen. I pondered. And then I nodded. My brain had been right after all. It all fit into place. My subconscious had known all along.

From this experience, I’ve learned that I much enjoy writing novels—at least, first drafts—in the most compressed time period possible. I always thought I wrote novels over the summer simply because of the nature of my job as a teacher—that’s when I had time. But thinking on it now, it seems my brain likes the compressed time to keep characters and plot active in my subconscious brain. I’ll admit, it was mentally taxing. Once I was finished, I had the rare desire to simply stare at moving images on a television screen. And granted I’m giving myself a few weeks’ break (to finish another work in progress) before I actually get into editing.

But writing a novel in a week is something I want to try again.

And with the threat of another three or seven inches coming Sunday night for winter’s last hurrah, maybe I’ll get that chance after all.

The theme of this week (“I’m so cold my bones have frozen”) is appropriate, as winter temperatures seem to have temporarily snapped back for author Val Muller. She is the author of the Corgi Capers mystery series, the sci-fi romance For Whom My Heart Beats Eternal, and the supernatural chiller Faulkner’s Apprentice, and hopes that spring weather returns soon.

Starscape

By Val Muller

The place is so quiet, I can’t be sure it’s real. The landscape is cold and barren. Not just inhumane. Inhuman. This was always a risk. I knew it when I signed up. We were counseled, told to expect something like this. Told what it would be like to be the last one remaining. It was never a likelihood, but it was always a possibility. They gave me a tiny capsule to swallow, but I never intended to go out that way.

Of course, it had to be me, the unlucky survivor.

I know how much they invested in me—in us—so I followed training protocol to the very last command. After landing, I launched the probes, took the readings, the pictures, the samples, sent back the communications, and launched the craft that would take the samples back to Earth. And now, according to protocol, I wait. There’s supposed to be another cohort coming. But in the meantime I’m supposed to be here colonizing. Terraforming. I’m supposed to be building a community and reporting back on the possibility of procreation.

All of these objectives are impossible with a party of one.

I haven’t gone to the settlement for three days now. I’ve been sitting up here on my cliff. I call it “Loverlook.” It’s “lover” plus “overlook” combined. When we got here, I was supposed to mate-up with one of the other astronauts. We were matched genetically, though I don’t think we would have chosen each other on Earth. Anyway, since I erected the settlement, I’ve spent more time up here than down there. I would sit up here and imagine I was back on Earth in some kind of romanticized version of life based on every 1950’s movie I’ve ever seen. I’m the beautiful, rebellious teenager, and I’ve snuck up here to “Loverlook” to be with my lover, the one my parents don’t approve of. You know, we just got back from a burger and shake at the dairy barn, and now we’re watching the stars through his open-topped convertible. I used to talk to him, my imaginary mate, but now I just keep it all in my head.

The cities I saw sparkling below as the sun set over the Martian desert—those cities exist only in my mind. But my mind has been quieting lately. I’m having trouble seeing those cities. When I first arrived, I really saw them in my mind’s eye. I saw them as our future. Not 1950, and not 2050, but maybe 2150. Maybe there would be all manner of sparkly diners and open-topped convertibles and people on roller-skates living life like it was simple again.

But those pictures have faded in my mind’s eye. I have received no more communication from Earth. They must know I’m still alive, but no one on Earth likes upsetting news. I accepted long ago that they’re ignoring me until I go away. Now, from Loverlook, I see only the rocks. The landscape reminds me of the Wild West, only more barren, if that is possible.

I expected something when I came here. The mystery of life solved, maybe, or some deep insight into the human condition.

Not emptiness. Something.

Something like—I don’t know. When I was younger, I read The Martian Chronicles by Ray Bradbury. I don’t remember a lot of details, but I remember the feeling of the book. There was such a striving among the characters, a desire to pick up the pieces of something lost. To continue a civilization despite past mistakes. There was one part where the main characters are looking for Martians, and they end up looking into a body of water to see them—looking into a body of water to see their own reflection. They were the things they sought.

And now I think I’ve come all the way to Mars to realize my own paradox. In this awful Martian silence, I’ve learned that the things I sought were always with me. The things I sought were always there on Earth, dispersed among me and the millions of souls with whom I used to share the human condition. It took unimaginable miles and uncountable resources to teach me that the thing I sought, I already had.

I’m enlightened now, and I think it’s time to go. I know I won’t have much time once I pull off the mask. The terraforming has hardly begun to work, and it certainly hasn’t done a thing for elevations like Loverlook. But I don’t need time—hardly any at all. I just want to see the stars shine one more time, the way they looked from Earth—through my bare eyes, the eyes of a dreamer, and not through the shield of a mask.

They twinkle. Little winks, like shared secrets they’re allowing me to hear just this one last time. They send a shiver through my body, and I feel the shiver fly faster than light to someone back on Earth, a girl not unlike me, who is lying in a grassy field looking up at the very same stars and wishing and dreaming and finding out what human means. With another shiver I fly back to Mars and return to myself, and my eyes feel strange and dry in the Martian atmosphere. Then I shudder with understanding and plaster a smile on my face before I can realize that I’m so cold, my bones are frozen with the rest of me, looking out at my eternal starscape from my lonely perch of Loverlook.

The Spot Writers- our members: 

RC Bonitz
http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller
https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie
http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Melinda Elmore
http://www.authormelindaelmore.blogspot.com/

 

Welcome to the Spot Writers. This week the prompt is “I’m so cold my bones have frozen.” Today’s contribution comes from RC Bonitz, author of A LITTLE BIT OF BLACKMAIL, A LITTLE BIT OF BABY, and A BLANKET FOR HER HEART.  

 Next week’s story will be by Val Muller, author of FOR WHOM MY HEART BEATS ETERNAL, a sci-fi romance, and CORGI CAPERS: DECEIT ON DORSET DRIVE, a mystery novel for young readers.

 

 Winter Surprise

 He parked his truck and stepped out into the swirling snow. Trapping and releasing pesky beavers for the state was fun, normally. He loved the time he was able to spend in the woods, normally. But today the temperature was darn near zero and the wind bit right through his coat. Couldn’t leave the beaver trapped too long though, had to pick them up.

Starting down the trail he thought he heard someone shout for help. There, ahead, next to a tree. A woman, crying out. No hat, just a sweater and a vest, what was she thinking on a day like this.

“Help me, please, call 911,” she cried.

He stopped in front of her. She was tied to the tree? And the vest? It couldn’t be. A bomb? He shook his head. This was no dream.

“My phone doesn’t work here. That is a bomb, right?”

She sobbed. “He said it would go off at noon. What time is it?”

“About eleven thirty.”

“Oh God, help me please.”

He examined the vest. Bombs he knew nothing about, but electrical stuff he did. And he had wire in the truck. “who put you in that thing?”

“A wanna be boyfriend. A weirdo.”

“You turned him down?”

“Yes. Please hurry. I’m scared.”

“Cold too I’ll bet.”

“I’m so cold my bones are frozen, but that doesn’t matter.”

“Be right back,” he said and hurried back to his truck. He returned a moment later with some wire and a knife.

She was crying now.

“Hey, don’t cry. Your tears will freeze,”

She giggled. “They’re tears of relief.”

He nodded, hoping the tears were justified. He had an idea how to free her but who knew if it would work. He began to trace the wires that ran from place to place.

“Have you got a blanket?” she pleaded.

“No, and I can’t cover you up. I have to see all the wires on you.”

“What are you going to do?” she asked in a small voice.

“Try to get you out of the vest.”

“What about the bomb?”

He gave her a lopsided grin. “I don’t think it will go off.”

“You don’t know?” she whispered.

Nope,” he said and began to scrape a wire with his knife.

 

 

 

The Spot Writers- our members: 

RC Bonitz
http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller
https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie
http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Melinda Elmore
http://www.authormelindaelmore.blogspot.com/

 

 

This month’s challenge is to write something beginning with “My favorite colour tastes like…”

Today’s writing comes to us from Melinda Elmore. Her most recent publication, Blood on the Feather and Shall We Dance, is mixture of mystery and murder and a sweet Halloween tale. The books are available on Amazon and through my publisher, Dancing with Bear Publishing.

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“My favorite colour tastes like…”

 

My favorite colour tastes like….

The dew on a new morning leaf

The sparkling drops tingles the mouth

Leaving one to mesmerize the taste across their lips.

 

My favorite colour tastes like….a Hersey’s Kiss….

Chocolaty, divine….never-ending…..

Melts in the mouth from the warmth of the sensations

 

My favorite colour tastes like…an Arizona sunset

Full of color and breathtaking…..

 

My favorite colour tastes like…..

The sound of the flute…..

Soothing and musical.

 

My favorite colour tastes like….

My family….

Full of unconditional love.

 

My favorite colour tastes like….

Love….

Heart feeling and full of emotions.

 

My favorite colour tastes like….

Friendship…

Being there for everybody you can…

 

My favorite colour tastes like…..

Life….

Full of vibrant sensations for total enjoyment.

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The Spot Writers- our members: 

RC Bonitz
http://www.rcbonitz.com

Val Muller
https://valmuller.com/blog/

Catherine A. MacKenzie
http://writingwicket.wordpress.com/wicker-chitter/

Melinda Elmore
http://www.authormelindaelmore.blogspot.com/